续写入门课 Emily ugly女孩上台表演 ppt课件-2025届高三英语一轮复习.pptx

1、2025届读后续写训练一阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.No one expected her to survive.She did make it but with her strange body figure,everyone could recognize her,even f

2、rom a distance.In Emily Whites hometown,there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(大礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the towns people.Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was su

3、ffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1：The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room._Paragraph 2:Finally,the day

4、 of performance came._明确：只能写两段，是故事续写，不是“读后感”题型分析-读后续写评分标准评分档次第一项第二项第三项第四项第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较合理。内容比较丰富所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。内容构思语言表达“读读”后续后续“写

5、写”-“读读”为为“写写”之先之先读出原故事的六要素读出原故事的六要素 （抓住原故事的主题和重点）（抓住原故事的主题和重点）内容构思（1）边读边想象场景，在大脑屮勾勒出画面，为下一步的情景创设做好铺垫。(自我代入,做个”戏精”)（2）边读边圈出关键信息（所有角色&角色基本信息）、(情节发展)(情绪变化)、总结人物性格。（3）故事线即主要情节：“记叙文六要素”：人物、时间、地点、起因、经过、结果（谁在什么时间、什么地方，因为什么、做了什么、最终怎样。)读之三步骤读之三步骤文章类型记叙文叙事人称：叙事时态：叙事方式：化险为夷日常生活.问题矛盾 解决问题 如何结局沟通交流想 开 了互相帮助利用工具问

6、题解决了首尾呼应人也升华了人成长了；人间真情；保护自然.第一、二、三人称通常为过去时态旁白、对白（间接引语、直接引语(尽量少用）考查学生运用知识、能力和素养解决实际问题的能力.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.No one expected her to survive.She did

7、make it but with her strange body figure,everyone could recognize her,even from a distance.In Emily Whites hometown,there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(大礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas s

8、eason for many of the towns people.Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1：The next day,Emily nervously gla

9、nced at the list on the door of the choral room._Paragraph 2:Finally,the day of performance came._Storywhenwherewhowhathowwhylast yearthis year that night the next morning in the school auditoriumEmily Mrs OwensMr Buttlera yearly outdoor performance was refused to join in the perforamnce because of

10、her strange body figurewas given a chance for testing performance.一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件，一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件，圈出关键信息圈出关键信息 1.浅层信息理解浅层信息理解 首先要审题：体裁：_；人称：_；主体时态：_。记叙文第三人称一般过去时waiting for the result a girl with birth problems her music teacher(retired)her new music teacher Summarize main information of each paragr

11、aph(underline the key sentence)Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.No one expected her to survive.She did make it but with her strange body figure,everyone could recognize her,even from a distance.In

12、Emily Whites hometown,there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(大礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the towns people.Many people tried out each year for it,but so many were tur

13、ned away.It can only include the most excellent people in the field.Emily had a beautiful singing voice.Last year she went to Mrs.Owens her music teacher to ask to join in the performance.Without letting her sing,Mrs.Owens took a look at Amys body and said,“Child,you just dont fit.Everyone would sta

14、re at you and that would make you uncomfortable.It would make them uncomfortable,too.”Without singing a single not,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral room.Hurt and upset,she decided never to try out again.But Mrs.Owens then retired.This year,there came a new music teacher,Mr.Buttler.

15、He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try.Emily didnt want to be rejected again,so she hesitated a little about it.As Emily struggled,the door was pushed open and Mr.Buttler called,“Emily,youre next.”Although kind of nervous,Emily did as Mr.Buttler told her to do.Mr.Buttler sat by the p

16、iano to keep Emily company.When Emily finished her testing performance,she thanked Mr.Buttler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day.Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the

17、 next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.1.Emily White 天生身体有缺陷天生身体有缺陷.Enmily 拥有一副好嗓音，想参加表演。拥有一副好嗓音，想参加表演。因为身体缺陷，因为身体缺陷，Mrs.Owens 拒绝她参加表演试音测试。拒绝她参加表演试音测试。.Mr.Buttler 建议建议Emily 尝试参加选拔，并让她参加测试。尝试参加选拔，并让她参加测试。.每年一度庆祝圣诞节的户外歌唱表演。每年一度庆祝圣诞节的户外歌唱表演。Emily 完成了表演测试，完成了表演测试，结果第二天公布结果第二天公布无眠之夜

18、，忐忑，紧张无眠之夜，忐忑，紧张一、原文故事线：一、原文故事线：二、原文情感线：二、原文情感线：Emily：-hopeful(want to try)-disappointed/unconfident（refused by Mrs.Owens)-surprised/expectant/stressed (have a try,couldnt sleep )Mr Buttler:-kind-hearted/encouraging (encourage Emily to try)1.Emily White 天生身体有缺陷，但拥有一副有噪音，想参加每年一度庆祝圣诞节的户外歌唱表演。天生身体有缺陷，但

19、拥有一副有噪音，想参加每年一度庆祝圣诞节的户外歌唱表演。2.因为因为Emily 的身体缺陷，的身体缺陷，Mrs.Owens 拒约她参加表演试间测试，拒约她参加表演试间测试，Emily很伤心，决定不再尝试。很伤心，决定不再尝试。3.Mr.Buttler 建议建议Emily 尝试参加选拔，并让她参加测试。尝试参加选拔，并让她参加测试。4.Emily 完成了表演测试，完成了表演测试，结果第二天公布。无眠之夜，忐忑，紧张结果第二天公布。无眠之夜，忐忑，紧张 根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事总体的发展。根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事总体的发展。Emily couldnt sleep t

20、hat night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.Paragraph 1：The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room._.Paragraph 2:Finally,the day of performan

21、ce came._ending 题型分析-读后续写评分标准评分档次第一项第二项第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较合理。内容比较丰富内容构思The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room.倒推确定框架Finally,the day of performance came.第二段首句中关键信息第一段中应该有所提及;二段首句定一段尾句正能量结局不能偏（人与自我,人与社会,人与

22、自然）美好结局：个人成长；睦邻之间的互助，亲情的温暖,爱心善举的传递等.终于，她成功地登台表演，收获了掌声，战胜了自我。.Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.Paragraph 1：The next day,Emily nervously glanced at

23、the list on the door of the choral room Paragraph 2:Finally,the day of performance came.1)What was the result?2)How would Emily(and Mr Butter)feel when knowing the result?3)How would Emily(and Mr Butter act/react when knowing the result?4)What did Emily do afterwards?1.How is Emily and the audience

24、act/react?(beginning.,then.,finally.)2)How would Emily and the audience feel?3)What did Emily learn from the performance?.1.找到自己的名字找到自己的名字 2.Emily 激动、激动、兴奋。兴奋。3.Mr Buttler出现并祝贺出现并祝贺.4.Mr Buttler 邀请邀请/鼓励鼓励5.大受鼓舞，抓紧训练。大受鼓舞，抓紧训练。第一段最后一句与二段首句衔接：第一段最后一句与二段首句衔接：Finally,the day of performance came.为了表演努力训练

25、为了表演努力训练The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room分析首句+推简单的故事线+理清楚情感线情感线：Emily：紧张的-激动的-感激的-下定决心的Mr Buttler:祝福的-充满鼓励的-期待的-乐助的1.表演前表演前2.表演中表演中3.表演结束表演结束4.文章结尾文章结尾(点题点题)（表演成功，挑战自我成功）（表演成功，挑战自我成功）站到台上站到台上,受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视.开始唱歌开始唱歌,反转反转，甜美的声音震撼，甜美的声音震撼了所有人。了所有人。

26、全场安静全场安静,雷鸣般的掌声雷鸣般的掌声.Mr Buttler 上台祝贺.Emily&观众观众分析首句+推简单的故事线+理清楚情感线Finally,the day of performance came情感线：开心但紧张的-投入的-感恩的-自信 自豪的The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room1.找到自己的名字找到自己的名字2.Emily 激动、激动、兴奋。兴奋。3.Mr Buttler出现并祝贺出现并祝贺.4.Mr Buttler 邀请邀请/鼓励鼓励5.大受鼓舞，抓紧训练大受

27、鼓舞，抓紧训练Finally,the day of performance came1.表演前表演前-站到台上站到台上,受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视.2.表演中表演中-开始唱歌开始唱歌,反转反转，甜美的声音震撼了所有人。，甜美的声音震撼了所有人。3.表演结束表演结束-全场安静全场安静,雷鸣般的掌声雷鸣般的掌声.Mr Buttler 上台祝贺.4.文章结尾文章结尾(点题点题)（表演成功，挑战自我成功）（表演成功，挑战自我成功）最终-故事发展:Period 2 The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door

28、of the choral room.Beyond her expectations,on top of the list was her name!,.,whose eyes brimmed with（=was filled with)smiles.“Emily,we had another good news for you.”he said in a mysterious voice.The little girl looked at him in confusion.“We choose you to be the lead singer.Do you believe in yours

29、elf?”Mr.Buttler asked.Greatly encouraged,Emily nodded determinedly and promised to practise hard for the performance Finally,the day of performance came.Upon appearing on the stage,she was greeted with）eyes and even.But,she began to sing her heart out.Who knew how many such situations she had come a

30、cross?She was really used to it.When she finished her song,there,as if the world was holding its breath.Suddenly,.Mr.Butter was so moved that he almost staggered（摇摇晃晃地）摇摇晃晃地）to Emily and gave her a tight hug.It was then that he knew that Emily did survive from inferiority with her confidence.(a sens

31、e of inferiority 自卑感）自卑感）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.No one expected her to survive.She did make it but with her strange body figure,everyone could recogni

32、ze her,even from a distance.In Emily Whites hometown,there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(大礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the towns people.Emily couldnt sleep that nig

33、ht.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1：The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room._Paragraph 2:Fi

34、nally,the day of performance came._明确：只能写两段，是故事续写，不是“读后感”（1）边读边想象场景，在大脑屮勾勒出画面，为下一步的情景创设做好铺垫。(自我代入,做个”戏精”)（2）边读边圈出关键信息（所有角色&角色基本信息）、(情节发展)(情绪变化)、总结人物性格。（3）故事线即主要情节：“记叙文六要素”：人物、时间、地点、起因、经过、结果（谁在什么时间、什么地方，因为什么、做了什么、最终怎样。)读之三步骤读之三步骤读后续写“三步走”1.：原文阅读+信息梳理 读懂情节+体会语言+理清线索2.：潜心构思+情节预设+明确方向 关注“两线”-情节线&情感线 关注“

35、四点”-四处衔接一段二句和一段首句的衔接一段尾句和二段首句的衔接二段二句和二段首句的衔接文章结局、点题和原文内容和主题的衔接3.：初稿勾勒+润色提升+工整誊写The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room.倒推确定框架Finally,the day of performance came.第二段首句中关键信息第一段中应该有所提及;二段首句定一段尾句正能量结局不能偏（人与自我,人与社会,人与自然）美好结局：个人成长；睦邻之间的互助，亲情的温暖,爱心善举的传递等.终于，她成功地登台表演，

36、收获了掌声，战胜了自我。.Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of stress.1.找到自己的名字找到自己的名字 2.Emily 激动、激动、兴奋。兴奋。3.Mr Buttler出现并祝贺出现并祝贺.4.Mr Buttler 邀请邀请/鼓励鼓励5.大受鼓舞，抓紧训练。大受鼓舞，抓

37、紧训练。第一段最后一句与二段首句衔接：第一段最后一句与二段首句衔接：Finally,the day of performance came.为了表演努力训练为了表演努力训练The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room分析首句+推简单的故事线+理清楚情感线情感线：Emily：紧张的-激动的-感激的-下定决心的Mr Buttler:祝福的-充满鼓励的-期待的-乐助的1.表演前表演前2.表演中表演中3.表演结束表演结束4.文章结尾文章结尾(点题点题)（表演成功，挑战自我成功）（表演成功，

38、挑战自我成功）站到台上站到台上,受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视.开始唱歌开始唱歌,反转反转，甜美的声音震撼，甜美的声音震撼了所有人。了所有人。全场安静全场安静,雷鸣般的掌声雷鸣般的掌声.Mr Buttler 上台祝贺.Emily&观众观众分析首句+推简单的故事线+理清楚情感线Finally,the day of performance came情感线：开心但紧张的-投入的-感恩的-自信 自豪的 扩写:语言&内容 把横线写满，一般要完成把横线写满，一般要完成_字左右的文章字左右的文章 200 动作描写/情感描写/语言描写/环境描写/外貌描写 动作描写/情感描写/语言描写/环境描写/

39、外貌描写把横线写满，一般要完成把横线写满，一般要完成200字左右的文章字左右的文章 周测 范文赏析 语言源自于模仿，内容来自于创作The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room.the choral room.1.1.找到自己的名字找到自己的名字2.Emily2.Emily激动兴奋激动兴奋3.3.Mr Buttler 出现并祝贺4.4.Mr Buttler

40、邀请/鼓励5.5.大受鼓舞大受鼓舞，努力训练努力训练 Beyond her expectations,on top of the list was her name!（倒装）倒装）Overjoyed but doubtful,she pinched her hand hard only to find she wasnt daydreaming.（形容词作伴随状形容词作伴随状语）语）（不定式表结果）（不定式表结果）Then out of the room walked Mr.Buttler,whose eyes brimmed with smiles（笑逐颜开）（笑逐颜开）.（倒装）倒装）（定

41、语从句）定语从句）Greatly encouraged,Emily nodded determinedly and promised to practice hard for the performance.（形（形容词作伴随状语）容词作伴随状语）情感描写 动作描写情感描写&动作描写情感描写&动作描写Finally,the day of performance came.Finally,the day of performance came.1.表演前表演前站到台上站到台上,受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视受到观众的嘘声，与蔑视.2.表演中表演中开始唱歌开始唱歌,反转反转.3.表演结束表演结束全场安静全

42、场安静,雷鸣般的掌声，雷鸣般的掌声，Mr.Buttler上台祝贺上台祝贺4.文章结尾文章结尾(点题点题)（表演成功，挑战自我成功表演成功，挑战自我成功）Upon appearing on the stage,she was greeted with scornful（轻蔑的轻蔑的）eyes and even sneering（嘲笑）（嘲笑）.介词短语作时间状语介词短语作时间状语 But as calm as a millpond,she began to sing her heart out.比喻比喻When she finished her song,there was a moment o

43、f silence,stillness,as if the world was holding its breath.夸张夸张 Suddenly,thunderous applause broke out.（无灵主语）（无灵主语）Mr.Buttler was so moved that he almost(状语从句）状语从句）staggered to Emily and gave her a tight hug.It was then that he knew that Emily did survive from inferiority（自卑）（自卑）with her confidence.

44、（it is.that.强调句）强调句）助动词助动词do/does/did+动词表强调动词表强调动作&情感描写 情感描写环境描写动作描写动作&情感描写主题升华 The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room.Beyond her expectations,on top of the list was her name!,.,whose eyes brimmed with（=was filled with)smiles.“Emily,we had another good news f

45、or you.”he said in a mysterious voice.The little girl looked at him in confusion.“We choose you to be the lead singer.Do you believe in yourself?”Mr.Buttler asked.Greatly encouraged,Emily nodded determinedly and promised to practise hard for the performance.（情绪描写情绪描写+动作描写动作描写+语言描写（画面代入感）语言描写（画面代入感）F

46、inally,the day of performance came.Upon appearing on the stage,she was greeted with）eyes and even.But,she began to sing her heart out.Who knew how many such situations she had come across?She was really used to it.When she finished her song,there,as if the world was holding its breath.Suddenly,.Mr.B

47、utter was so moved that he almost staggered（摇摇晃晃地）摇摇晃晃地）to Emily and gave her a tight hug.It was then that he knew that Emily did survive from inferiority with her confidence.(a sense of inferiority 自卑感）自卑感）情绪描写情绪描写/动作描写动作描写 +环境描写环境描写+主题升华（情感升华）主题升华（情感升华）词汇、短语、句型的积累Practice 第二节（满分25分 This was it.Tod

48、ay was the day.Finally,she would be able to see her again.Itd been five long years.Her university days now felt like a lifetime ago.When Jennifer thought back to it,she didnt like the girl she had been then,but when she thought about Yui Fay,that discomfort disappeared and her whole life lit up.She

49、couldnt be more excited.She kept imagining their meeting how they would run towards each other,hugging and talking of the old times.As she imagined,happiness spread through her body.It was time to get dressed.As she was struggling about what to wear,she spotted a red summer dress,which she wore that

50、 night in Barcelona.She would never forget that night five years before.After a hard week at university,Yui Fay and she spontaneously（心血来潮（心血来潮地）地）bought bus tickets to Barcelona.They slept on the bus and then spent the whole day exploring the city.In the evening.they met these fun young guys and sp