读后续写 父亲之间的默契 （ppt课件）-2025届高三英语一轮复习.pptx

1、Continuation Writing 父亲之间的默契 At recess the next day.I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game._(我感到很愧疚).I came to Del and sat next to him.At the sight of me,Del asked,What do you want,Germy?His voice sounded hurt.“I dont like the nickname Germy”_(我严肃地说).Then,I told him the whole thing about

2、 how the rumor came.Im sorry.I wish I had never said that,I apologized,lowering my head.Upon hearing what I said,_(德尔用难以置信的眼神盯着我，感到惊讶和愤怒).But seconds later,_(他低下头，平静地说),Its okay.I guess I wasnt very nice to you,either.His words made me relax a bit,but I could feel he was still sad.Now that Del had f

3、orgiven me,I decided to do more before the recess was over.I _(走向)the kickball players and called for their attention.Everyone stopped in surprise.Del didnt beat up anyone,I stated,explaining what actually happened._(听了我的解释),they whispered in astonishment and finally one player shouted,All right,Del

4、,do you want to join my team?A smile broke through Dels gloomy face,Yes,and I want Jamie on it,too!He _(他害羞地瞥了我一眼),and it was at the moment that I realized he was making an apology to me by using my real name._(很快，操场上就充满了欢声笑语).From the experience,they made me realize somethingwords have the power to

5、 hurt and heal.Revision读后续读后续写写（深圳二模）（深圳二模）At recess the next day.I saw Del sitting alone watching the kickball game._(我感到很愧疚).I came to Del and sat next to him.At the sight of me,Del asked,What do you want,Germy?His voice sounded hurt.“I dont like the nickname Germy”_(我严肃地说).Then,I told him the who

6、le thing about how the rumor came.Im sorry.I wish I had never said that,I apologized,lowering my head.Upon hearing what I said,_(德尔用难以置信的眼神盯着我，感到惊讶和愤怒).But seconds later,_(他低下头，平静地说),Its okay.I guess I wasnt very nice to you,either.His words made me relax a bit,but I could feel he was still sad.A fl

7、ush of guilty swept over meI said seriouslyDel stared at me with unbelievable look,feeling surprised and angryhe lowered his head and said quietly情绪描写所做所说所做衔接句所听+所做+情绪描写所做所见Now that Del had forgiven me,I decided to do more before the recess was over.I _(走向)the kickball players and called for their a

8、ttention.Everyone stopped in surprise.Del didnt beat up anyone,I stated,explaining what actually happened._(听了我的解释),they whispered in astonishment and finally one player shouted,All right,Del,do you want to join my team?A smile broke through Dels gloomy face,Yes,and I want Jamie on it,too!He _(他害羞地瞥

9、了我一眼),and it was at the moment that I realized he was making an apology to me by using my real name._ _(很快，操场上就充满了欢声笑语).From the experience,they made me realize somethingwords have the power to hurt and heal.walked towards Upon hearing what I explainedglanced at me shylySoon the playground was fille

10、dwith laughter and talks所做所听所做情绪描写情境描写 主题升华所感所说所做+所说基本内容（基本内容（Basic content)charactersWhat he/she thought想想What he/she did 做做What he/she feel 感感What he/she said说说What he/she heard 听听What he/she saw看看Task1.根据四要素根据四要素(when,where,who,what）提取相关信息）提取相关信息4 ElementsContentswhowhenwhereWhat(main idea)时态时态:_

11、:_Once,when I was a teenager,my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus(马戏).Finally,there was only one family between us and the ticket counter.This family made a big impression on me.There were eight children,all probably under the age of twelve.You could tell they didnt ha

12、ve a lot of money.Their clothes were not expensive,but they were clean.The children were well-behaved,all of them standing in line,two-by-two behind their parents,holding hands.They were excitedly talking about the clowns,elephants,and other acts they would see that night with their brothers or sist

13、ers in a low voice.One could sense they had never been to the circus before.It promised to be the highlight of their young lives.The father and mother were at the head of the pack,standing proud as they could be.The mother was holding her husbands hand,looking up at him as if to say,“You are my knig

14、ht in shining armor.”He was smiling and responding in pride,looking back at her as if to say,“You got that right.”The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets he wanted.He proudly responded,“Please let me buy eight childrens tickets and two adult tickets so I can take my family to the circus.”T

15、he ticket lady gave the price.The mans wife let go of his hand.Her head dropped,and her lips began to shake.The father leaned a little closer and asked,“How much did you say?”The ticket lady again quoted the price.The man didnt have enough money.How was he supposed to turn and tell his eight childre

16、n that he didnt have enough money to take them to the circus?Actually we were not wealthy in any sense.So I understood how the kids would feel.I felt sorry for them.Once,when I was a teenager,my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus(马戏).Finally,there was only one family be

17、tween us and the ticket counter.This family made a big impression on me.There were eight children,all probably under the age of twelve.You could tell they didnt have a lot of money.Their clothes were not expensive,but they were clean.The children were well-behaved,all of them standing in line,two-by

18、-two behind their parents,holding hands.They were excitedly talking about the clowns,elephants,and other acts they would see that night with their brothers or sisters in a low voice.One could sense they had never been to the circus before.It promised to be the highlight of their young lives.The fath

19、er and mother were at the head of the pack,standing proud as they could be.The mother was holding her husbands hand,looking up at him as if to say,“You are my knight in shining armor.”Task1.根据四要素根据四要素(when,where,who,what）提取相关信息）提取相关信息4 ElementsContentswhowhenwhereWhat(main idea)A family with eight c

20、hildren,my father,I,the ticket ladyOnce,when I was a teenager,were standing in line to buy ticketsAt the ticket counterWhen my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus,another family didnt have enough money to buy tickets.时态：一般过去时时态：一般过去时Task 2.找出原文中用得好的动作描写、情绪描写和环境描写，为仿写做准备找

21、出原文中用得好的动作描写、情绪描写和环境描写，为仿写做准备Once,when I was a teenager,my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus(马戏).Finally,there was only one family between us and the ticket counter.This family made a big impression on me.There were eight children,all probably under the age of twelve.Y

22、ou could tell they didnt have a lot of money.Their clothes were not expensive,but they were clean.The children were well-behaved,all of them standing in line,two-by-two behind their parents,holding hands.They were excitedly talking about the clowns,elephants,and other acts they would see that night

23、with their brothers or sisters in a low voice.One could sense they had never been to the circus before.It promised to be the highlight of their young lives.The father and mother were at the head of the pack,standing proud as they could be.The mother was holding her husbands hand,looking up at him as

24、 if to say,“You are my knight in shining armor.”He was smiling and responding in pride,looking back at her as if to say,“You got that right.”The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets he wanted.He proudly responded,“Please let me buy eight childrens tickets and two adult tickets so I can take

25、 my family to the circus.”The ticket lady gave the price.The mans wife let go of his hand.Her head dropped,and her lips began to shake.The father leaned a little closer and asked,“How much did you say?”The ticket lady again quoted the price.The man didnt have enough money.How was he supposed to turn

26、 and tell his eight children that he didnt have enough money to take them to the circus?Actually we were not wealthy in any sense.So I understood how the kids would feel.I felt sorry for them.Task 3：阅读原文后，翻译下列段首句子：阅读原文后，翻译下列段首句子。Para 1：Seeing what was going on,my dad put his hand in his pocket,pulle

27、d out a$20 bill and dropped it on the ground._ Para 2：That day,my father and I went back to our car and drove home without any tickets._看到正在发生的事情，我爸爸把手放进口袋，拿出看到正在发生的事情，我爸爸把手放进口袋，拿出2020元，然后把它扔到地上。元，然后把它扔到地上。那天，我爸爸和我回到车上，没有买票就开车回家了。那天，我爸爸和我回到车上，没有买票就开车回家了。Task 4:构建情节两两段句首定一段句首定一框框&第二第二段句首及正能量结局定第二框段句首

28、及正能量结局定第二框段段1:Seeing what was going on,my dad put his hand in his pocket,pulled out a$20 bill and dropped it on the ground.段段2:That day,my father and I went back to our car and drove home without any tickets.正能量的结局：正能量的结局：_续写续写1：爸爸：爸爸用我们的买票钱去帮助了那位父亲，用我们的买票钱去帮助了那位父亲，我们没有看马戏。我们没有看马戏。续写续写2：在回家的路上，爸爸对我做

29、了什么，说在回家的路上，爸爸对我做了什么，说了什么，以致于我理解、了什么，以致于我理解、支持支持爸爸的行为。爸爸的行为。我理解、我理解、支持支持爸爸爸爸的行为。的行为。Task 5:写大纲：“十句五定法”Para.1:Seeing what was going on,my dad put his hand in his pocket,pulled out a$20 bill and dropped it on the ground.S1.文字文字接龙（接龙（Para1首句首句）_S2._S3._S4._S5.反向文字反向文字接龙（接龙（Para2首首句）句）_Para2：That day,my

30、 father and I went back to our car and drove home without any tickets.S2,S3,S4S2,S3,S4:用用所见，所闻，所说，所做所见，所闻，所说，所做，所所思补齐。思补齐。Para.2:That day,my father and I went back to our car and drove home without any tickets.S6.文字接龙（文字接龙（Para 2首首句句）_S7._S8._S9.正正能量能量结局结局+情境描写情境描写_S10.主题升华主题升华_ _S7,S8:S7,S8:用用所见，所闻

31、，所说，所做所见，所闻，所说，所做，所思补齐所思补齐。手持模板以及常用句式做搭手持模板以及常用句式做搭脚架，开始脑洞大开吧！脚架，开始脑洞大开吧！读后续写四个步骤：1.1.读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络2.2.细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架3.3.增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作4.4.修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写注意：1.不随意添加人物2.不随意变换地点3.少一点对话和心理描写4.多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度5.字写工整，字数足HomeworkComplete the continuation story based on what you have learned today.