读后续写 第二课 表达意图 课件 -2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项.pptx

1、该题型提供一段350词以内的语言材料，以记叙文为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节架构自然与结构完整的短文。情节构思情节构思 1.负转正负转正的行文思路的行文思路2.段首句的前后影响；段首句的前后影响；3.找到可呼应的细节；找到可呼应的细节；一切答案都在原文写作指导写作指导三大原则01原文一致原则原文一致原则内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯语言表达语言表达风格一致风格一致。03曲折性原则曲折性原则凡是凡是故事都应有故事都应有跌宕跌宕起伏起伏，其中人物会遇到困难

2、或问题，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但但最终能解决最终能解决。02正能量原则正能量原则故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘扬社会主义，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，是言归于好，和睦相处和睦相处；犯错了，最；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。等等。1.读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清弄清大意

3、和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。依据依据情节发展和情节发展和常识，在确定常识，在确定的框架内，可按的框架内，可按“所见所见/所想，所想，所为所为/所感所感”等构思具体细节。等构思具体细节。仔细阅读所给两段的仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。尾，思考大致框架。思考再三，把修正润色后的思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。续写整洁地写入答卷。读后续写的四个步骤1.读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。人物和事件。characterwhen/wheremain

4、 ideaconflict/problemthemePART 02表达意图（表达意图（why）主题主题主题主题之重之重 读故事，最重要的是读故事，最重要的是抓住主题抓住主题。主题是作者通过主题是作者通过故事表达的思想（价值观），是故事实现社会功能的故事表达的思想（价值观），是故事实现社会功能的关键关键。明白了故事的主题，也就读懂了故事。同样，。明白了故事的主题，也就读懂了故事。同样，在写故事时，一个清晰的主题更有利于故事创作。在在写故事时，一个清晰的主题更有利于故事创作。在读故事时，需要读故事时，需要通过分析故事情节、人物形象和环境通过分析故事情节、人物形象和环境来获取主题来获取主题。在写故事

5、时，也需要。在写故事时，也需要考虑如何在主题的考虑如何在主题的引领下进行人物塑造、情节发展和环境描写引领下进行人物塑造、情节发展和环境描写。表达意图：（表达意图：（why）主题主题主题对续写的构思、取材和遣词造句起指导作用。对主题的精准把握能够使续写的故事内容与前文协同，合理发展。懂主题懂主题常见的主题包括爱恨、贫富、友谊、仁慈、智慧、勇气、欢乐等。知主题知主题故事的主题渗透在人物、情节和环境中。找主题找主题主题主题Types of the theme human and society主题的类型Categorize the theme(主题分类主题分类)human and their sel

6、fhuman and nature如何确定故事主题如何确定故事主题方法方法1：对原文标题进行分析和解读对原文标题进行分析和解读方法方法2：分析故事内容（环境、人物、情节）来确定分析故事内容（环境、人物、情节）来确定示例分析：示例分析：优化方案优化方案P134，标题，标题 Saving the Daisies(雏菊雏菊)从标题得知，该故事围绕从标题得知，该故事围绕Taylor拯救雏菊展开，但没有拯救雏菊展开，但没有明确表现出作者的情感态度，这时需要明确表现出作者的情感态度，这时需要结合故事内容结合故事内容(settings背景、背景、characters角色、角色、plots情节、情节、feel

7、ings情情感感)来确定主题。来确定主题。阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。构成一篇完整的短文。Saving the Daisies(雏菊雏菊)1Taylor aged 14 opened her sleepy eyes and looked out the window below.“NO！”she cried,now fully awake.Buttermilk the cow was in Mamas daisy garden.2“I must have forgotten to close

8、 the gate last night，”Taylor thought as she pulled a sweatshirt over her head,annoyed.Mama was planning to sell the daisies at the fair next week.But Buttermilk was eating the flowers.Taylor hurried outside and grabbed a rope.3“Why cant you stay in the field？”she called to Buttermilk as she headed a

9、cross the yard to the daisy garden.Buttermilk stood biting the tender flowers.4“When I grow up,Ill be an artist and paint pictures all day，”Taylor thought.“Ill not own a cow.Too much trouble.”Taylor was fond of painting since the day she had memory.She would like to help with family but she loved se

10、eing birds and flowers alive under her brush more.5Just as Taylor was about to throw the rope onto Buttermilks collar,the family dog barked.Buttermilk couldnt stand it and took off,tearing through the daisies.It finally ran through the open gate and into the field outside.“Thank goodness！”Taylor sai

11、d as she closed the gate and secured the lock.She turned to look at the flower garden.Only then did she realize most of the daisies were either eaten or left in pieces.6Out came Mama and Dad.“Whats going on？”Mama asked.She looked sadly at her garden.“I forgot to close the gate，”Taylor said.“Im so so

12、rry.”“I know you are，”Mama sighed and gave Taylor a hug.7Taylors heart was heavy as she went back into the house.Mama had prepared much for the fair but now half of her efforts were in vain.Taylor decided to think of a way to make it up to her mother.The problem tasked Taylors mind.Could she plant o

13、ther flowers in a week?Not enough time.Could she make use of the daisies in pieces?Not enough magic.Taylor found no way out.注意：续写词数应为注意：续写词数应为150左右左右。Suddenly,Taylor noticed a flower painting in the house and an idea jumped in._A week later,when her parents were loading the car,Taylor brought her pa

14、intings downstairs._【Settings背景背景】When&Where1Taylor aged 14 opened her sleepy eyes and looked out _1Buttermilk the cow was _the window belowin Mamas daisy garden尽量与前文一致；活动范围不过大尽量与前文一致；活动范围不过大【Characters角色角色】Who_ aged 14;Mama and Dad;Buttermilk the cow;the family dogTaylor 尽量不增加新人物；新人物不成为续写主角尽量不增加新人物

15、；新人物不成为续写主角【Plots情节】情节】What2“I must have forgotten to _ last night，”Taylor thought as she pulled a sweatshirt over her head.2But Buttermilk _4Taylor was fond of _ since the day she had memory.5Just as Taylor was about to throw the rope onto Buttermilks collar,the family dog barked.Buttermilk couldnt

16、 _ it and took off,_ the daisies.5Only then did she realize most of the daisies were either _ or left _7Taylor decided to think of a way _Why 2Mama was planning to _ next week.close the gatewas eating the flowerspaintingstandtearing througheatenin piecesto make it up to her mothersell the daisies at

17、 the fair情节发展线：情节发展线：Taylor 忘记关门忘记关门奶奶牛在妈妈的雏菊花园里吃雏菊牛在妈妈的雏菊花园里吃雏菊Taylor 喜欢画画喜欢画画雏菊雏菊遭到了破坏，无法拿到集市上卖遭到了破坏，无法拿到集市上卖Taylor 决定想办法，补偿母亲决定想办法，补偿母亲【Feelings情感】情感】How2“I must have forgotten to close the gate last night，”Taylor thought as she pulled a sweatshirt over her head,_6She looked _ at her garden.7Tayl

18、ors heart was _ as she went back into the house.7Taylor found _annoyedsadlyheavyno way out情感变化线：情感变化线：Taylor 出去赶牛（出去赶牛（生气恼怒生气恼怒）Taylor赶走牛后，返回屋里（赶走牛后，返回屋里（低落沉重低落沉重）Taylor 找不出好办法（找不出好办法（沮丧沮丧 焦虑焦虑）情节发展线：情节发展线：Taylor 忘记关门忘记关门奶奶牛在妈妈的雏菊花园里吃雏菊牛在妈妈的雏菊花园里吃雏菊Taylor 喜欢画画喜欢画画雏菊雏菊遭到了破坏，无法拿到集市上卖遭到了破坏，无法拿到集市上卖Tayl

19、or 决定想办法，补偿母亲决定想办法，补偿母亲情感变化线：情感变化线：Taylor 出去赶牛（出去赶牛（生气恼怒生气恼怒）Taylor赶走牛后，返回屋里（赶走牛后，返回屋里（低落沉重低落沉重）Taylor 找不出好办法（找不出好办法（沮丧沮丧 焦虑焦虑）结合对结合对原文脉络原文脉络和和两情线两情线（情节情节发展线发展线、情感情感变化线）的变化线）的把握，根据两段把握，根据两段所给首句中的已知所给首句中的已知（旧信息）推测新信息，（旧信息）推测新信息，合理推出合理推出故事的故事的主主题题以及续写的以及续写的框架框架。Theme(正能量正能量原则原则)Taylor made it up to he

20、r mother and helped the family by _ the daisies and _ them at the fair.paintingselling每段三个微情节每段三个微情节(Q&A策略策略)：注重衔接和冲突解决原则：注重衔接和冲突解决原则第一段段首句第一段段首句：Suddenly,Taylor noticed a flower painting in the house and an idea jumped in.Question 1What was Taylors idea?Answer_Taylor wanted to paint the daisies.Que

21、stion 2How was everything going?Answer_Question 3Was Taylor sure that the paintings would be sold out?Answer_Taylor continued painting and created a lot of paintings.No.第二段段首句第二段段首句：A week later,when her parents were loading the car,Taylor brought her paintings downstairs.Question 1Why did Taylor br

22、ing the paintings downstairs?Answer_ _ She wanted to show them to her Mama and Dad and sell them at the fair.Question 2How did her Mama feel?Answer_Question 3Did the paintings sell well at the fair?Answer_She was moved.Yes,and Taylor did help her family.One possible version：Suddenly,Taylor noticed a

23、 flower painting in the house and an idea jumped in.She raced upstairs,grabbed her art supplies and sat down at her desk.Looking at the remaining daisies below the window,she moved her brush.As her brush moved smoothly across the paper,daisies came alive.Taylor made one painting after another.The ne

24、xt few days witnessed Taylors continuing efforts and burst of creativity.She even drew the greedy Buttermilk and hot-tempered dog.She painted all the familiar scenes in her life,showing her love and care for her family.While painting,she was wondering whether her paintings could be sold out at the f

25、air.A week later,when her parents were loading the car,Taylor brought her paintings downstairs.With butterflies in stomach,she presented the paintings to Mama and Dad.Right in front of them were Taylors paintings of beautiful daisies!Mama was moved,her eyes wet for the efforts Taylor put in bringing

26、 the flowers back to life.She wrapped Taylor into her arms.At the fair,the uncertainty and doubt went away because miraculously,the paintings sold well.At the end of the day,Taylor did make it up to her mother and help the family.It turned out that it was Taylors consideration and effort that made everything back on track.