公开课-高中英语写作课件39.pptx

1、英语书面表达英语书面表达 English Composition Writing What makes a good essay? The essay A good essay is usually made up of a topic paragraph, some supporting paragraphs and a concluding paragraph. Topic paragraph Supporting Paragraph 1 Supporting Paragraph 2 Supporting Paragraph 3 Concluding paragraph To many s

2、tudents, school life is boring and tiring. However, I find my school life meaningful and colourful. general statement topic statement Topic paragraph (Introduction paragraph) General statement Topic statement Supporting Paragraphs (Body) Paragraphs TS SS SS SS SS Firstly, .Firstly, . Secondly, .Seco

3、ndly, . Moreover, .Moreover, . Finally, . . .Finally, . . . However, .However, . In addition, In addition, Furthermore,Furthermore, Conclusion Personally, in conclusion, in brief, From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that . In summary, it is wiser . The paragraph What makes

4、 a good paragraph? A good paragraph is one that consists of a topic sentence and supporting sentences. There are different kinds of bee. Some live in large groups like the honey bee, and make their nests in trees or holes in the rocks. Other species make their nests in holes in the ground. There are

5、 also varieties that do not live in groups at all topic sentence Wherever you go in our school, you see green lawns and trees and beautiful flowers. Dotted among these trees and flowers are many buildings of different styles. A stream runs through our school and you always see everything reflected i

6、n the water. Topic sentence:_ just like a garden. Our school is just like a garden. Our school is just like a garden. Our school is A good paragraph is one that contains proper linking words. I believe English is more important than other foreign languages for many reasons. First of all, English is

7、spoken by a large number of people, and these people are the most widely spread across the world in a great many countries. Secondly, English is the most widely used language on the internet. It has become an on-line language. Thirdly, the 2008 Olympic Games will be held in our country and English w

8、ill be very useful. Lastly, 正确使用有关连接词 时间先后：时间先后： 转折关系：转折关系： but, however, on the contrary, nevertheless 因果关系：因果关系： because, since, as, thanks to, owing to, as a result of, for the reason that 让步关系：让步关系： though, although, even if, even though, in spite of the fact that 递进关系：递进关系： 条件关系：条件关系： 表表 列列 举：举

9、： 表表 总总 结：结： whats more, in addition, furthermore on the one hand on the other hand, if, unless, as long as, on condition that for example / instance, takefor example, thats to say, in other words, as follows in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a word, on the whole, as has been stated first, then,

10、 later, in the end, eventually, since then, after a while 丰富的句式：丰富的句式：( (常用到的句型结构）常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 e.g. What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was ! 感叹句感叹句 强调句强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible. A good paragraph is on

11、e with varied sentence patterns. e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There comes the police car. Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man. e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary. e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the stree

12、t with a handbag in her hand. 倒装句倒装句 省略句省略句 with短语短语 e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information. Lets come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library. 定语从句定语从句 e.g. Thats what I should do. We should do a favour to wh

13、oever needs help at present. 各种名词性从句各种名词性从句 e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, well catch up sooner or later. 各种状语从句各种状语从句 应用了较多的词汇应用了较多的词汇 这里所说的“词汇”，可以从高级词汇的使用、同义词的使用、这里所说的“词汇”，可以从高级词汇的使用、同

14、义词的使用、 短语的使用等方面去理解：短语的使用等方面去理解： （一）（一） 高级词汇的使用高级词汇的使用 评分标准第五档次的要求中提到，“词汇方面有些许错误，评分标准第五档次的要求中提到，“词汇方面有些许错误， 但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”。这里所说的但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”。这里所说的 “高级词汇”，指的是大纲中没有列入或没有识记要求，但“高级词汇”，指的是大纲中没有列入或没有识记要求，但 在实际运用中却出现比较频繁的词汇，比如在实际运用中却出现比较频繁的词汇，比如frustration, awkward, awfully, concern等词，都可以算作是“高

15、级词等词，都可以算作是“高级词 汇”。考生若能够适当地运用一些高级词汇，定会给评卷老汇”。考生若能够适当地运用一些高级词汇，定会给评卷老 师留下深刻的印象。师留下深刻的印象。 1. I cant find any way to solve the problem. (换作高级词汇：换作高级词汇： I cant find any solution to the problem .) 2. The pet dog is so lovely that almost everybody likes her. (换作换作 高级词汇：高级词汇：) The pet dog is so cute that a

16、lmost everybody likes her. 3. The question is really difficult to understand. (换作高级词汇：换作高级词汇： The question is really confusing .) 4. He had to face all the possible difficulties. (换作高级词汇：换作高级词汇： He had to cope with all the possible difficulties ) （二）（二） 同义词的使用同义词的使用 英语中有些英语中有些 词的使用频率非常高，比如词的使用频率非常高，

17、比如interesting, clever等，等， 在表达时大家都很喜欢用，这样很容易令文章入千人在表达时大家都很喜欢用，这样很容易令文章入千人 一面的窘境中。但如果我们能够使用它们相应的同义一面的窘境中。但如果我们能够使用它们相应的同义 词，就可以做到与众不同，给评卷者带来清新的感觉。词，就可以做到与众不同，给评卷者带来清新的感觉。 例如：例如： 1. It will be very interesting. (换作同义词：换作同义词：It will be a lot of fun.) 2. He was so clever that he could count all the way u

18、p to 100 at one year old. ( 换作同义词：换作同义词：He was so smart that he could count all the way up to 100 at one year old.) 3. Last summer I visited New Jersey with my parents. (换作同义词：换作同义词：Last summer I toured New Jersey with my parents.) （三）（三） 适当利用短语取代单词适当利用短语取代单词 总体而言，使用短语的难度比单词要大一些，因此适当总体而言，使用短语的难度比单词要

19、大一些，因此适当 运用短语更能显出作者的功力。例如：运用短语更能显出作者的功力。例如： 1. Suddenly I had a good idea. (换作短语：换作短语：Suddenly I came up with a good idea.) 2. Take a moment to see what is happening around you. (换作短语：换作短语：Take a moment to see what is going on around you.) 3. Everyone should do his or her best. (换作短语：换作短语：Everyone i

20、s supposed to do his or her best.) 1. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句） 2. Though Im weak, Ill make the effort. (使用倒装句) 3. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 4. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气） Wh

21、at surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things. Practice 怎样使用较丰富的句式和高级词汇怎样使用较丰富的句式和高级词汇 Weak as I am, Ill make the effort. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened. I couldnt have passed the physics exam but for your help. 5. She walked out

22、 of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分 词) 6. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式) 7.I wont believe what he says. （no matter what状语从句） 8.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （祈使句+and） Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab. Singing and l

23、aughing, they went back to school. No matter what he says, I wont believe. Study hard and youll make rapid progress. 9He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装使用倒装 句句) 10.We all think he is a great man. (think highly of) 11.As a result the plan was a failure. (turn out)

24、12. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (the morethe more) No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. We all think highly of him . The plan turned out to be a failure. The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. Summary: A good essay is usually made up of a topic par

25、agraph, some supporting paragraphs and a concluding paragraph. A good paragraph is one that consists of a topic sentence and supporting sentences. A good paragraph is one that contains proper linking words. A good paragraph is one with advanced vocabulary and varied sentence patterns. ASSESSMENT str

26、ucture Is the essay divided into parts? Does each part have a topic sentence? content Are all the details stated? Is everything to the point(切题切题)? Language Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? Is there any advanced vocabulary（高级词汇）（高级词汇）? Are there any good sentence patter

27、ns（句式）（句式）? Lets improve it: Good afternoon, everyone! The topic of my speech today is “My Attitude to Pursuit of Fashion in School”. Now in our school there is a hot pursuit of fashion. Some students live a very expensive life _. _, they hope to look smart and special. _, they want to win others ad

28、miration and respect. In addition, it makes them feel cool . _, we students should hold the right sense of values. We should practice thrift in our daily life . _ , it is advisable for us to donate some pocket money to the Hope Project so that those poor children in rural areas can return to school.

29、_, it is the inner beauty rather than our appearance that makes us respectable. Thank you for listening! A.the reasons why they do so are as follows B. firstly C. last but not least D. whats more E. as far as I am concerned F. Secondly A B C D E F 【作文答题技巧、答题方法【作文答题技巧、答题方法】 STEP1：确定文章框架，包括：时态、语态、格式、确

30、定文章框架，包括：时态、语态、格式、 展开方式、开头结尾等。展开方式、开头结尾等。 STEP2：确定内容要点，包括：主要人物、时间地点、确定内容要点，包括：主要人物、时间地点、 重要细节、合理发挥等。重要细节、合理发挥等。 STEP3：正式开始写作，整理思路成篇，行文连贯。正式开始写作，整理思路成篇，行文连贯。 STEP4：检查全文，主要检查语法以及粗心犯下的错检查全文，主要检查语法以及粗心犯下的错 误。误。 高考英语写作高分策略高考英语写作高分策略 1. 作文的卷面； -整洁的卷面 2. 文章的语言； -丰富的词汇 3. 行文的流畅； -流畅的结构 4. 文章的思想； -独到的见解 考场作文

31、考场作文TIPS 取悦评卷人取悦评卷人 有清晰的整体脉络有清晰的整体脉络 有自然的段间衔接有自然的段间衔接 经典的用词用句经典的用词用句 有整齐美观的书写有整齐美观的书写 润色文章原则润色文章原则 用词“老辣”用词“老辣” 用句经典用句经典: 倒装、强调、虚拟倒装、强调、虚拟 名人名言名人名言 苏州市苏州市2009届高三教学调研测试届高三教学调研测试 最近，国家教育部要求中小学生参加冬季长跑活动：建议小学最近，国家教育部要求中小学生参加冬季长跑活动：建议小学 生每天跑生每天跑1000米，初中生米，初中生1500米，高中生米，高中生2000米。对此，有米。对此，有 些人表示支持，有些人表示反对。

32、请你根据以下材料，写一些人表示支持，有些人表示反对。请你根据以下材料，写一 篇以“篇以“Should we give more attention to students health or grades?”为题的短文，谈谈你的看法。为题的短文，谈谈你的看法。 支持方的理由 反对方的理由 你的看法及理由 1可以促进对体育的重视； 2可以增强学生的体魄； 3更有利于提高学习效率。 1学生以学习为主，考试成绩决定个人 前途； 2过高的要求学生难以达到； 3长跑可能引起感冒或伤害。 (考生自行发挥23点) 注意：注意：1词数词数150左右。短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；左右。短文的开头已为你写

33、好，不计入总词数； 2对所给要点，逐一陈述，设当发挥，不要简单翻译。对所给要点，逐一陈述，设当发挥，不要简单翻译。 1.A good beginning makes a good ending. 2.Your composition should be divided into paragraphs. 3.Youd better use some linking words. 4.Handwriting is of great importance. Suggestions: 第一段：第一段： 1.Some people agree to NO. One, because they usual

34、ly think that .In the meantime , . In addition. 2. Some people think that A is right because . 3. Some people suggest / say that . At the same time they point out the fact that.Whats more. 4. Some people prefer NO. One. In their opinion A . In addition . 第二段：第二段： 1. On the other hand, some people ho

35、ld that B is right. They think . 2.But many more people dont agree with them. They prefer B. They say that.The reason is that. 3.On the contrary, some people hold that . 4.Some people think that B is better. It is clear that. Whats more, .Also. 在第一段和第二段中一定要用原因或列举等方式展开段落在第一段和第二段中一定要用原因或列举等方式展开段落。 第三段

36、：提出自己的见解并且加以论证第三段：提出自己的见解并且加以论证 1.In my opinion B is better than A. There is no doubt that . 2.I support A. The reason goes as follows. 3.As far as I am concerned, I agree to the latter. First.Second. Finally. 4.It is likely that people will go on arguing over these questions. I think that everythin

37、g has both its positive and negative sides. We should keep an open mind. 5.People will continue to argue over the questions, I think wed better keep an open mind because everything has two sides. It all relies on. 6.Of these two ways of .I prefer.First of all,. Second,. Should we give more attention

38、 to students health or grades? The Ministry of Education of China has urged all the students to participate in the winter long-distance running activity. It is suggested that primary school students should run 1,000 meters a day, junior school students, 1,500 and senior school students, 2,000.Differ

39、ent people always offer various views. Some people say “yes“ to this activity. They think, for one thing, it can make people pay more attention to physical education; for another, running can improve students health and help them study efficiently so they can have good grades. However, others hold o

40、pposite opinions about the activity. They believe that learning is the most important task for students and their future depends on their grades in their subjects. Meanwhile, many cant meet the high requirements. Whats worse, some will suffer cold and injuries. In my opinion, its all right for schoo

41、ls to care about students health and carry out the activity step by step. Remember a good body helps make high efficiency. What do you think about the concluding paragraph? Is it a good one? If not, how can you improve it? In my opinion, its all right for schools to pay more attention to students he

42、alth and carry out the activity step by step. Remember a good body helps make high efficiency. 全国高中英语教师群190624773 全国高中英语资料群587542205 全国高中班主任教师群 819181319 全国班主任教师总群104435893 欢迎各位同仁加入交流指导！ In my opinion, its better for schools to pay more attention to students health and carry out the activity step by step, because a good body helps make high efficiency. Whats more, it not noly helps students get relaxed, but also will benefit them in their future life.