江苏省某中学书面表达专题指导之-读后续写写作指导课件.pptx

1、 Mostly,the novel cure will reaffirm literatures ability to distract and transport,to resonate and reassure,to change the way we see the world and our place in it.consistency in logic and expression阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our g

2、ratitude.Growing up,I wanted to be just like my mom.Kind and caring,she always seemed to make people comfortable in her presence.For years she was a volunteer in our community.I loved going to the local nursing home to help with her until I hit my preteen years.Suddenly,I was too caught up in my ado

3、lescent world to worry about helping others.One particular summer day when I was twelve,Mom came into my room and told me to get up and meet her at the car.I had planned to spend the day at the lake with friends.Why did she have to ruin everything?Eventually,I made my way outside.I imagined the lake

4、 water cooling my skin.Annoyed,I climbed into the car and slammed the door shut.I sat in silence,too upset to make a conversation.“Tasha,would you like to know where we are going?”Mom asked calmly.“I guess.”I murmured under my breath.“Sweetheart,we are going to a childrens shelter,I have been there

5、before and I think it would benefit you,”she explained.I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach.How was I supposed to help there?When we reached the shelter,I was rather surprised.It was a large white Victorian home.As we approached the large front porch,wind bells played a calming tune while trees a

6、nd blossoms(花朵)welcomed us.Maybe this wasnt going to be so bad.Mom rang the doorbell.The door flew open and we were led to the front room,where all of the children were playing.Toys were spread out across the floor.I noticed a baby whose body was scarred with wounds.The majority of the children had

7、noticeable physical scars such as cuts and scratches.What a terrible life they had had before they moved here!My heart sank.注意注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Step one:thorough readingStep two:logical plottingStep three:accurate and vivid writing (when;where;who;why;how;what)(personal character,

8、the plot,the given two sentences,reasonable ending)(linking words,details,sentence structures)What/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy the nursing homehit my preteen yearswas caught up in my adolescent worldunder my breath I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach.when,whereone particular summer daythe childrens shel

9、terTense Tense:_Simple past tense Simple past tense who(relationships,personalities etc.)PersonalitiesCharacter AnalysisMomDetails Kind and caring,she always seemed to make people comfortable in her presence.For years she was a volunteer in our community.Sweetheart,we are going to a childrens sheler

10、,I have been there before and I think it would benefit you.kind,caring,considerate devoted to helping others clever at educating her child PersonalitiesCharacter AnalysisI(Tasha)Details I loved going to the local nursing home to help with her.Growing up,I wanted to be just like my mom.kind,caring wi

11、lling to help others what,howexpect.caught up in.had intended to.asked me to go to.reached the shelter.noticeable physical scars.The change of my feelingsTashajoyfulloved to.loved to.annoyedupsetcaught up incaught up insurprisedheavy-heartedseeing the seeing the scars.scars.theme Why did Mom took me

12、 there?We often take for granted the We often take for granted the very things that most deserve very things that most deserve our gratitude.our gratitude.the original plotthe personality of the characterthe given sentencesAs I was looking around,I felt a gentle pull As I was looking around,I felt a

13、 gentle pull on my shirt.on my shirt.I returned to the shelter with Mom several I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.times.Who pulled me?Mom or somebody else?What was my reaction to the pull?Did I enjoy the time spent there?Did we play together?What did the child say and do to me?Feeling

14、s:Actions:What was my reaction to the child?Feelings:Actions:As I was looking around,I felt a gentle pull As I was looking around,I felt a gentle pull on my shirt.on my shirt.Let“body language”speak!curious,cheerfulcurious,cheerfultake/grasp take/grasp my hand,bounce/bound my hand,bounce/bound towar

15、dstowardsfrightened,embarrassed,delighted frightened,embarrassed,delighted join,join,enjoyenjoyI returned to the shelter with Mom several I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.times.Why did I often go there?How did I get along with the children？What did we do together?What did I benefit f

16、rom visiting the children?What did we do together？What did I benefit from visiting the children?I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.play,share,communicateplay,share,communicatebe grateful to,cherish,have a deep be grateful to,cherish,have

17、 a deep gratitude towardsgratitude towardsaccurate and vivid expressionaccurate and vivid expressionlogical plotlogical plotPara 1 Para 1 beam at sb.(beam at sb.(对对眉开眼笑眉开眼笑)bring bring sb.great sb.great joyjoy shake ones hands warmly shake ones hands warmlybounce/bound towardsbounce/bound towards ma

18、ke make ones ones day(make sb.happy)day(make sb.happy)take/grasp ones hand take/grasp ones hand greet sb.cheerfullygreet sb.cheerfullyPara 2Para 2 sharewith sharewithin detailin detail feel sorry for feel sorry for deserve our gratitudedeserve our gratitude do everything in my power to do everything

19、 in my power to As I was looking around,I felt a gentle pull on my As I was looking around,I felt a gentle pull on my shirt.shirt.I looked down to see a little girl with a deep cut on her forehead beaming at me.Before I could look away from her scarred face,she greeted me cheerfully,“Are you Tasha?I

20、m Ashley.”Embarrassed and puzzled,I managed a nod.She leaped to grasp my hand and shook it warmly.“Auntie,I love your beloved Tasha!”She declared to my mom.Her serious look but sweet voice amused us.Our time together brought her great joy and fun and she also made my day.Appreciate a possible versio

21、nAppreciate a possible version I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.During those visits,some of the children including Ashley shared their troubled pasts with me in great detail.I felt sorry for what had happened to them and held dear a bo

22、nd of relationship between us.I would like to do everything in my power to help the children there.Meanwhile,I learned to be grateful that I was born to such a kind and caring mother.It was Mom who taught me we should never take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude.Appreciate

23、a possible versionAppreciate a possible version在回家的路上，我陷入了沉思，脑子里不断闪现他在回家的路上，我陷入了沉思，脑子里不断闪现他们明亮的笑容。们明亮的笑容。(独立结构独立结构)尽管他们很不幸，但是他们对生活有着乐观积极的尽管他们很不幸，但是他们对生活有着乐观积极的态度。态度。(as conj.)(as conj.)I was lost in thought on the way home,their bright I was lost in thought on the way home,their bright smiles flashi

24、ng in my mindsmiles flashing in my mind.Unlucky as they were,they had an Unlucky as they were,they had an optimistic optimistic and and positive attitude towards lifepositive attitude towards life.他的眼睛里闪烁着期待的光芒，我没有办法拒绝他的他的眼睛里闪烁着期待的光芒，我没有办法拒绝他的请求。（独立结构）请求。（独立结构）看到这些带着伤疤的孩子们一起开心地玩耍着，我被看到这些带着伤疤的孩子们一起开心

25、地玩耍着，我被深深地打动了，感觉心都要融化了。深深地打动了，感觉心都要融化了。HHis is eyes sparkling with great expectation,I couldnt eyes sparkling with great expectation,I couldnt refuse his request.refuse his request.When I saw these children with scars playing When I saw these children with scars playing happily together,I was so tou

26、ched that my heart happily together,I was so touched that my heart melted.melted.是我的妈妈让我感受到我是多么的幸运，我应该感是我的妈妈让我感受到我是多么的幸运，我应该感恩并珍惜我所拥有的一切。（强调句）恩并珍惜我所拥有的一切。（强调句）It It was was my mother who my mother who made made me me felt felt how lucky I how lucky I was was and that I and that I was supposed to was

27、 supposed to cherish everything cherish everything I I had.had.A story is A story is,which begins with,which begins with and ends with and ends with.A good story often has A good story often has.A great story A great story.Tips for writingTips for writingAssignment Assignment Read your writing again.Share your writing with your classmates.Try to learn from your classmate and meantime give some advice on improving their writing.