高中英语读后续写贝壳公开课课件.pptx

1、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Peter,a 5-year-old boy,showed such great interest in sea shells that he would rush to pick them up with his 3-year-old sister,Shirley.They screamed out their joy as Peter collected his treasure into his pockets.For Peter,sea s

2、hells lay shinning on the peaceful beach,waiting for him,just like stars twinkling(闪烁)in the sky.As waves touched them,they seemed to be flowers blooming(绽放)in gentle wind.One day,Peter was wandering through market with Shirley,win some shells in his pocket.Suddenly Peter found his younger sister wa

3、s lagging(落后)behind.He stopped and looked back,finding Shirley was standing in front of a toy shop and was staring at something with great interest.The boy went back to her and asked,What do you want?Shirley pointed at the doll,wearing a smile on her innocent face.Peter held his younger sisters tiny

4、 hand,walking into the shop.He tiptoed(踮起脚尖)to reach for the doll，and like a responsible elder brother,gave the precious doll to Shirley.Holding tightly the doll,the sister was very very happy.The shopkeeper was watching everything and getting amused to see the matured(成熟的)behavior of the boy.Now th

5、e boy came to the counter and asked the shopkeeper,How much does this doll cost,Sir?”The shopkeeper was a cool man,who had suffered from something in his life.So he asked the boy with love and affection,Well,what can you pay?Peter reached into his clothes for money that was intended for these two li

6、ttle guys break fast.Having counted the money,Peter put it carefully on the counter,asking again,Sir,is it enough for my little sisters doll?”The amusing scene just in front of the shopkeeper eventually brought a smile on his face.Shaking his head slightly,he replied,My boy,I am afraid it seems not

7、to be enough.”Paragraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he wondered what Peter would do.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leaving happily with his sister holding the doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.CONTENTSPART 1PART 2PART 3PART 4Reading for settingReading for plotInferring the deve

8、lopmentHow to develop the plot?PART 5Possible version考场作文PART 6Reading for settingReading for settingWhoWhenWhereOne dayPeter-a 5-year-old boy;Shirley-a 3-year-old girl;Peters sister;shopkeeper-a cool/amused man;has a toy shopThrough market;in front of a toy shop;in the shopReading for plotThey were

9、 happy when picking up the sea shellsPeter,a 5-year-old boy,picked up sea shells at the seaside with his 3-year-old sister,Shirley.Peter was a responsible brother,and Shirley was interested and happyShirley stopped in front of the shop on the way to having breakfast,because she liked the doll.Peter

10、entered the shop and got the doll for his sister.The shopkeeper was cool and amused.The shopkeeper watched everything and decided to amuse the boy.He said his money wasnt enough for the doll on purpose.Reading for plotClimaxBeginningRising actionEndingFalling actionPicking up sea shellsInciting acci

11、dentWhen Shirley stared at somethingPeter gave the doll to ShirleyPeter paid for the doll,and the shopkeeper said it was not enoghhappy;excitedinterestedhappyPeter:responsible but sadShopkeeper:amusedInferring the developmentInferring the developmentParagraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he

12、 wondered what Peter would do.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leaving happily with his sister holding the doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.Infer the ending of two Paragraphs.Peter bought the doll for his sister.Peter bought the doll with his sea shells.上文：上文：Shaking his head slightly,he

13、replied,My boy,I am afraid it seems not to be enough”.Peter was sad and Shirley was disappointed.The shopkeeper explained why he only charged sea shells.Paragraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he wondered what Peter would do.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leaving happily with his sister holding the

14、 doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.Inferring the developmentRaise several questions to be answered in the following two paragraphs.Tips:the plot should be made reasonable and complete.What was the reaction of Peter when the shopkeeper said the money was not enough?How did Peter pa

15、y for the doll?How did the shopkeeper agree?Paragraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he wondered what Peter would do.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leaving happily with his sister holding the doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.Inferring the developmentRaise three questions to be an

16、swered in the following two paragraphs.Tips:the plot should be made reasonable and complete.How did the shopkeeper explain to the surprised assistant?How to sublimate the theme of the passage?Paragraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he wondered what Peter would do.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leav

17、ing happily with his sister holding the doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.Inferring the development1.Peter took out the seashells to pay for the doll.2.The shopkeeper agreed.3.They left with the doll happily.(为什么Peter开心）4.The shopkeeper explained to the assistant.5.Love is the mos

18、t precious.第五点是正能量结尾，可以有其它升华How to develop the plot?What was the reaction of Peter when the shopkeeper said the money was not enough?Show more than tell!Tip 1:Show emotion by action.How to develop the plot?How did Peter pay for the doll?How to develop the plot?Show more than tell!Tip 2:Consecutive a

19、ction can tell!How did the shopkeeper agree?How to develop the plot?Tip 3:Indirect description matters!Show more than tell!How to develop the plot?How did the shopkeeper explain to the surprised assistant?Show more than tell!Tip 4:Dialogue can also tell!How to develop the plot?How to sublimate the t

20、heme of the passage?How to develop the plot?Tip 5:Surroundings and simile are also significant.Show more than tell!Conclusion Tip 1:Show emotion by action.Tip 2:Consecutive action can tell!Tip 3:Indirect description matters!Tip 4:Dialogue can also tell!Tip 5:Surroundings and simile are also signific

21、ant.Possible versionParagraph1：With his eyes fixed on Peters pocket,he wondered what Peter would do.Possible version1.Peter took out the seashells to pay for the doll.Watching Shirleys smile fading away,Peter frowned.After a while,he seemed to make up his mind.He took out all the shells from his poc

22、ket,giving them to the shopkeeper,who took them and started to count as if he had been counting the money.2.The shopkeeper agreed.Then he looked at Peter.Peter asked him,“Is it enough now?”The shopkeeper replied,These are more than the cost,Saying so,he kept only two shells and returned the remainin

23、g and the money.3.They left with the doll happily.(为什么Peter开心）Peter put these shells back into his pocket very happily,leaving with Shirley holding the doll tightly.Paragraph2：Seeing Peter leaving happily with his sister holding the doll tightly,an assistant in that shop got surprised.Inferring the

24、development4.The shopkeeper explained to the assistant.5.Love is the most precious.第五点是正能量结尾，可以有其它升华 He asked the shopkeeper,Sir!You only charge them for 2 shells?!”The shopkeeper said with a smile,For us these are shells,but for the boy they are treasures.His love for his sister is the most preciou

25、s.Watching the lovely kids until they were out of sight,he continued,When he grows up,he will remember he purchased a doll for his sister with the shells from a shopkeeper.He will cherish love and warmth in life-cherish every little shining sea shell in his heart.PS：本次监测续写，大多数同学反应第二段写得不好，其实就是正能量结尾，可

26、以有其它升华，以下选取几个角度供参考店主店主也有喜欢贝壳的也有喜欢贝壳的妹妹妹妹，看到这个男孩对妹妹的爱，让他，看到这个男孩对妹妹的爱，让他想起了自己的妹妹。因此想起了自己的妹妹。因此店主帮助店主帮助Peter妹妹达成愿望妹妹达成愿望。店主想起了自己童年店主想起了自己童年时一样的处境，时一样的处境，得到陌生人的成全，因得到陌生人的成全，因此愿意回报兄妹俩此愿意回报兄妹俩。店主对助手解释，贝壳不值钱，但哥哥对妹妹的爱是店主对助手解释，贝壳不值钱，但哥哥对妹妹的爱是无无价价的的。考场作文考场作文11.内容合理性方面内容合理性方面第一段第一段故事线故事线和情感线非常好和情感线非常好，可可惜惜第一段结

27、尾没有写出第一段结尾没有写出Peter 和妹和妹妹拿到玩具后的快乐心情和离开商妹拿到玩具后的快乐心情和离开商店的动作，与下文第一段首句衔接店的动作，与下文第一段首句衔接度度稍稍差。第二段升华差。第二段升华了了主题，主题，还有还有意外的是结尾意外的是结尾Peter出现出现。2.语言准确性方面语言准确性方面 语言基本流畅，表达清楚，较为语言基本流畅，表达清楚，较为丰富的词汇。有适当的对话描写、丰富的词汇。有适当的对话描写、心理描写。心理描写。3.衔接和连贯性方面衔接和连贯性方面 衔接基本合理衔接基本合理；语言连贯。；语言连贯。考场作文21.内容合理性方面内容合理性方面第一段第一段故事线故事线和情感线非常好和情感线非常好，第第一段一段与下文第一段首句衔接度与下文第一段首句衔接度完美完美。第二段升华第二段升华了了主题，主题，还有意外的是还有意外的是结尾结尾Peter出现出现。2.语言准确性方面语言准确性方面 语言基本流畅，表达清楚语言基本流畅，表达清楚，运用，运用丰丰富的词汇富的词汇 多样性的表达多样性的表达。非谓语非谓语动词，感叹句，从句，动词，感叹句，从句，with复合结复合结构等，构等，有适当的对话描写、心理描有适当的对话描写、心理描写。写。3.衔接和连贯性方面衔接和连贯性方面 衔接基本合理衔接基本合理；语言连贯。；语言连贯。Thanks!