高中英语《新题型-读后续写》公开课优秀课件(经典、完美、值得收藏).pptx

1、读后续写Continuation Writing01.题型介绍 02.评分标准03.原则方法 04.实战演练05.写作过程阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性；(细节描写：外貌、心理、语言、动作、表情、环境细节描写：外貌、心理、语言、动作、表情、环境)（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性。(与前文内容以及所给出句子的上下文连贯与前文内容以及所给出句子的上下文连贯)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使

2、所续写短文结构紧凑。第五档 （21-25分）01 原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下内容要前后衔接，上下连贯连贯,语言表达风格一致。语言表达风格一致。02 正能量原则故事内容一定要正能故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。绳之以法

3、，等等。03 曲折性原则凡是故事都应有凡是故事都应有跌宕跌宕起起伏，其中人物会遇到困伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解难或问题，但最终能解决。决。三个原则Three Principles解题步骤浅层信息获取 when,where,who,what深层文本分析Actions 动作的丰富性Feelings 情感表达的多样性Surroundings 恰当运用环境描写梳理主要情节品味写作风格Language 语言的运用分析人物特点明确故事主题深度解读语篇合理构思情节生动编写故事实战演练Writing Practice读后续写 An 80-year-old man was sitting on t

4、he sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son.Suddenly a crow(乌鸦)perched on their window.The father asked his son,“What is this?”The son replied,“It is a crow.”阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。After a few minutes,the father asked his son the second time,“What i

5、s this?”The son said,“Father,I have just now told you Its a crow”After a little while,the old father asked his son the third time,“Whats this?”At this time some expression of irritation(恼怒)was felt in the sons tone when he said to his father,“Its a crow,a crow.”A little while later,the father again

6、asked his son the fourth time,“What is this?”This time the son shouted at his father,“Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again,although I have told you so many times IT IS A CROW?Are you not able to understand this?”A little later the father went to his room and came back with an

7、old torn diary,which he had kept since his son was born.On opening a page,he asked his son to read that page.When the son read it,the following words were written in the diary：“Today my little son aged three was sitting with me on the sofa,when a crow was sitting on the window.My son asked me 23 tim

8、es what it was,and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow.I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question again and again for 23 times.I did not at all feel irritated but I had a deep affection for my innocent child.”+Paragraph 1Paragraph 1：+After reading the diary,+Paragraph

9、 2Paragraph 2：+Feeling ashamed,the son got down on his knees before his father.写作过程Writing Process1.1.读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的特别要弄清故事的人物人物，时态时态(通常是一般过通常是一般过去时去时)，事件事件(故事的起因和经过故事的起因和经过)，语言特色语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不不变变)，等等。，等等。人物时态和事件人物时态和事件语言特色不

10、要变语言特色不要变1.浅层信息获取 when：_；where:_；who：_;what:_；tense one day An 80-year-old man,45-year-old highly educated son In the house Ask the son the same question several times 深度解读语篇simple past tense events(1)梳理主要情节 An 80-year-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly ed

11、ucated son.Suddenly a crow(乌鸦乌鸦)perched on their window.A little while later,the father again asked his son the fourth time,“What is this?”This time the son shouted at his father,“Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again,A little later the father went to his room and came back wit

12、h an old torn diary.On opening a page,he asked his son to read that page.深层文本分析 2.深层文本分析(2)分析人物特点(3)明确故事主题 _(4)品味写作风格 何种细节描写为主：心理；动作；语言；表情；环境；外貌 patient lovedEverybody should respect the elderly and take care of themthe father:,_the son:_impatient 深度解读语篇读后续写语言特色1.After a few minutes,the father asked

13、 his son the second time,2.although I have told you so many times.(连接性副词连接性副词)3.A little later the father went to his room and came back with an old torn diary,which he had kept since his son was born.(定语从句定语从句)4.On opening a page,he asked his son to read that page.(介词介词+V-ing)5.When the son read it

14、,the following words were written.(状语从状语从句句)6.I did not at all feel irritated but I had a deep affection for my innocent child.(连接性副词连接性副词)两段首句定一框两段首句定一框由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量二框二首正能量第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。能量结尾来确定。2.2.细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架 合理构思情节Para.1:Aft

15、er reading the diary,（在看完日记后在看完日记后）从第一段首句和第二段首句预测：Would the sons feeling towards father change?What things did the son reflect on?What did he think to himself?逆向思维预测内容，适当增加故事曲折性注意结尾要与下段语义衔接 Para.2:Feeling ashamed,the son got down on his knees before his father.（儿子感到羞愧在父亲面前跪下。儿子感到羞愧在父亲面前跪下。）从第二段首句和正能

16、量结局预测：how to express his apology What promise did the son make?the theme of the story3.3.增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作在已定在已定框架框架范围内范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所闻、所思、所思、所说、所说、所所做等做等给给每段增加每段增加5 5至至8 8个具体细节个具体细节，我们称之为，我们称之为叫叫“58“58细节添加法细节添加法”。情感：thankful,grateful,moved 动作：lower his head（低头)

17、;touch his head(拍头)pat his shoulder（拍他的肩）说：say,speak,guess,ask,explain,argue,continue,add,deny(否认)，remark(议论)，add(接着说),murtur（低声说）be moved to tears 感动到落泪 Touched deeply/immensely,the tears welled up in the ones eyes.深受感动，热泪盈眶。Tip :借助心理描写，有效对话，动作描写，场景描写让续写内容生动形象化。读后续写写作构思Paragraph 1:After reading the

18、 diary,所 遇生气之后，阅读日记生气之后，阅读日记Paragraph 1:从所给材料结尾和本段首从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，儿子在看完了这句可知，儿子在看完了这篇日记，从下段首句得知篇日记，从下段首句得知儿子对自己的不好态度感儿子对自己的不好态度感到羞愧。所以到羞愧。所以本段应是儿本段应是儿子通过日记反思自己子通过日记反思自己。因。因此，本段可以这样构思：此，本段可以这样构思：所 想读完日记，热泪盈眶读完日记，热泪盈眶回忆过往，反思自己回忆过往，反思自己父亲耐心，儿子生气父亲耐心，儿子生气切换立场，感同身受切换立场，感同身受Paragraph 2:Feeling ashamed,the

19、 son got down on his knees before his father.Paragraph 1:After reading the diary,所 做反思自己，儿子跪下反思自己，儿子跪下Paragraph 2:从本段首句可知，儿子向父亲从本段首句可知，儿子向父亲跪下跪下道歉并求得原谅道歉并求得原谅。从正能。从正能量原则可知，作者会意识到自量原则可知，作者会意识到自己的错误行为，并己的错误行为，并告诉父亲自告诉父亲自己会如他一样耐心对待父亲己会如他一样耐心对待父亲。因此，可以这样构思：因此，可以这样构思：所 想跪下道歉，求父原谅跪下道歉，求父原谅告诉父亲，内心想法告诉父亲，内心

20、想法感谢父亲，无私的爱感谢父亲，无私的爱儿子承诺，照顾父亲儿子承诺，照顾父亲Paragraph 2:Feeling ashamed,the son got down on his knees before his father.4.4.修改润色，整齐誊写修改润色，整齐誊写审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。地誊写在答卷上。Summary:1.consistence of theme(主题)2.cons

21、istence of plot（剧情）3.consistence of logic（逻辑）4.richness of langague（语言）四个步骤四个步骤仔细仔细阅读阅读所给所给两段的两段的首首句句，结合正能量结尾，结合正能量结尾，思考思考大致框架大致框架。读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题弄清大意和主题，理清，理清故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。思考再三，把修正润色后思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地的续写整洁地写入答卷写入答卷。根据根据“所见所见/遇所想，遇所想，所为所感所为所感”等构思具体等构思具体细节。细节。新高考 新题型 新挑战 以以高高分作文为榜

22、样分作文为榜样 以以考考试评分标准为指导试评分标准为指导一一鼓作气鼓作气 限限定定时间和内容，强化训练时间和内容，强化训练 帮助学生帮助学生赢赢得信心，赢得高分得信心，赢得高分 参考范文Model EssayParagraph 1 After reading the diary,the son was filled with tears and began to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father.His father would patiently answer the same question

23、all 23 times without feeling irritated while his father asked him the same question just 4 times!The son thought to himself：If I attain old age,how will my son look at me?Will he think of me as a burden?Will he shout at me because of my poor sight,poor hearing or poor understanding?参考范文Paragraph 2 F

24、eeling ashamed,the son got down on his knees before his father.He made an apology to his father,begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior.He said this aloud,“I promise to see you happy forever,Dad.It is you who have cared for me ever since I was a little child,showing your selfless affe

25、ction for me.You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university.I will serve you in the best way.”参考范文范文评析sample commentary范文评析语言风格:使用了定语从句，目的状语从句和强调结构等1.reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father.上下连贯:注重使用连词（表承接、转折等）1.the son was filled with tears and beg

26、an to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father.2.His father would patiently answer the same question without feeling irritated while his father asked him the same question just 4 times!2.You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university.3.It is you who have cared for me ever since I was a little child,showing your selfless affection for me.(强调结构强调结构)