全国卷-书面表达-加细节13例子-(大熊)课件1.ppt

1、书面表达增加细节的技巧书面表达增加细节的技巧13例例作文复习作文复习（1）by 双老师双老师技巧一：列举具体的实例进行补充说明技巧一：列举具体的实例进行补充说明例例1.我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。球。（添加（添加for example）改造前：改造前：We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.改造后：改造后：We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environme

2、nt and save the earth.For example,we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags,refuse to use single-use products and save energy.例例2：我要花一些时间和父母在一起。：我要花一些时间和父母在一起。（添加（添加-ing表伴随）表伴随）改造前：改造前：Ill spend some time staying with my parents.改造后：改造后：Ill spend some time staying with my parents,chatting w

3、ith them and doing some housework.例例3：我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。：我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。（If possible,.）改造前：改造前：Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.改造后：改造后：Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.If possible,we can travel together or share traveling ex

4、periences.例例4：互联网在我们的日常生活当中变得越来越重：互联网在我们的日常生活当中变得越来越重要。要。（not only.but also.）改造前：改造前：The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.改造后：改造后：The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.Not only can we read news from home and abroad,but also send

5、emails and attend on-line courses.技巧二：增添背景信息，如：原因、结果、目的等技巧二：增添背景信息，如：原因、结果、目的等例1：我们打算设计一件属于我们班的服装。（considering）改造前：改造前：We intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.改造后：改造后：Considering that this activity is meaningful,we intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.例例2：我计划在一家外贸公司做兼职。：我

6、计划在一家外贸公司做兼职。（in order to）改造前：改造前：I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company.改造后：改造后：In order to get some practical experience,I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company.例例3：我不知道我的申请书和简历上有没有语法错：我不知道我的申请书和简历上有没有语法错误或者不当的格式。误或者不当的格式。（this is.that)改造前：改造前：I d

7、ont know if there might be some grammar mistakes or inappropriate format in my application and the personal resume.改造后：改造后：But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume,so I dont know if there might be some grammar mistakes or inappropriate format in them.例例4：

8、首先，参加中文课程很重要。：首先，参加中文课程很重要。（because）改造前：改造前：First,it is important to take a Chinese course.改造后：改造后：First,it is important to take a Chinese course,because youll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow students.例例5：我需要一个好好休息，我也会读点书。：我需要一个好好休息，我也会读点书。（for表目的）表目的）改造前：改造前：I need a

9、 good rest and Ill do some reading as well.改造后：改造后：I need a good rest because I feel tired because of the hard work.Also,Ill do some reading for fun and for knowledge as well.例例6：如果可能的话，我会参加一些社会活动。：如果可能的话，我会参加一些社会活动。（so that引导目的状语）引导目的状语）改造前：改造前：If possible,Ill take part in some social activities.改造

10、后：改造后：If possible,Ill take part in some social activities so taht I can know more about the society.例例7：我们的地球正在面临巨大的威胁。：我们的地球正在面临巨大的威胁。（with+宾语宾语+宾补）宾补）改造前：改造前：Our earth is faced with great threat.改造后：改造后：With the global climate becoming warmer and warmer,our earth is faced with great threat.例例8：我们也

11、会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。：我们也会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。（which）改造前：改造前：Well also spend some fun time together singing,dancing and playing games.改造后：改造后：Well also spend some fun time together singing,dancing and playing games,which we hope will make them happy.例例9：这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢：这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢的好机会。的好机会。（who）

12、改造前：改造前：This event is a good chance for us students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers.改造后：改造后：This event is a good chance for us students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers who have been bringing up and educating us with great efforts.练习练习 1.我们应该学会如何与他人相处。（增加具体实例）2.一些学生在考试前一晚非常担心考试。（增加结果状语）3.然而，很多人没有意识到手机的负面影响。（增加with结构）