写作指导之读后续写课件.ppt

1、Continuation-writing 读后续写读后续写The major problems in your writing u软伤软伤：u 情节或不合理，与所给上文不契合；情节或不合理，与所给上文不契合；u 情节或太简单，寥寥数语，缺乏必要的人物情节或太简单，寥寥数语，缺乏必要的人物活动和内心的描绘；活动和内心的描绘；u 情节或太阴暗，动辄流产情节或太阴暗，动辄流产/摔死摔死/夭折等夭折等;u 没有结局；没有结局；u 语言不够生动语言不够生动;u 字迹潦草，卷面不整洁等。字迹潦草，卷面不整洁等。u 硬伤：硬伤：u拼写错误、语法错误拼写错误、语法错误(时态时态/词汇词汇/句子结构等句子结构等

2、).).A lack of accurate understanding of the given passage A lack of accurate understanding of the given passage and reasonable imagination.and reasonable imagination.（缺乏对原文的精确理解和合理的想象力）（缺乏对原文的精确理解和合理的想象力）1.Eventually,he dragged his toy tractors and trucks up to his garage with his little brother.Car

3、elessly,the baby couldnt sit by himself and fell down.He died.2.It was saying that always walk near the sea,finally you will wet your shoes.One day,Justin dropped from the plum tree and was injured severely.3.Unfortunately,my baby miscarried by accident.I was afraid to tell him this bad news feared

4、of hurting his feelings.Plots and sentences in your writing 4.But as the time I was sent to hospital to deliver my baby.Justin was taken illhe was got pneumonia.When he is dying,he said me,“Mommy,I will go to heavenDont be said,the baby will replace me”5.Finally,Justin was so excited that the coming

5、 sister.At last,her dear sister was born with great disabilityshe had no legs.6.I was sent to the hospital but the doctors told me my baby was dead.Justin cried wildly when he knew this.7.He picked a plum and squeezed it into juice to feed the baby.But it was poisonous.The baby died immediately afte

6、r drinking the juice.I was scared and angry so I killed Justin and cried out,“What a f*thing you have done!”8.Maybe had listened her brothers words,the baby was eager to come out to see the world.9.He hug me and asked,“Why the plum tree grows so slow?Mommy,Im so eager to see the bady!”10.Except slee

7、ping and eating,he spent every time of his there.11.Justin cried hardly,he didnt know the time his sister would come.12.Justin was shouting on the roof of the house,then he picked it up and ran to my side,“You will bore soon,wont you?”In the June,the little baby was bore.13.I was angry about it and

8、worried about him,he was not a professional climber after all.14.I always hear his delight voice.He also touched my tummy which was became biger and biger.15.Usually I could see him asking to the plum tree that when the plums would be ripe on the roof of the house.16.He was hard to wait this tree ri

9、pen its plums.Day by day,plums still there with Justin eager expectation.17.He was hard to wait this tree ripen its plums.Day by day,plums still there with Justin eager expectation.18.The first thing he woke up to do was to have a look of his special schesual the plum tree.The day after the day,Just

10、in still had persistently watched it and waited.19.Justin kept silent,watching the little brother,say nothing but ran out of the house.20.One day,he asked me if the little baby would born to play with him soon.21.My husband told me Justin was disappeared neither in the house nor in the tree.22.One d

11、ay,he burst into the house,shouting,“The plums are ripe now!where is my sister?”But the only one he found was his grandma.She said,23.Justin always standed on the roof of house all the day expecting the ripe of pumps.24.The baby arrived but he was a boy.I afraid Justin will be sad when he know about

12、 it.But to my surprise,he just said,“My sister will not arrive until the plums taste sweet.They taste soul now.”To make Justin happy,my tummy became big again.Key to a piece of good writing You should understand the passage accurately(like characters,plot,feelings,etc.)and find out the useful clues

13、to continue the passage with reasonable imagination.（阅读-审题-构思）The Language should be vivid by using the proper expressions and sentence structures.Justins story2.Plot/Main ideaUnderstanding:Justin,a three-year-old boy,likes to play in the plum Justin,a three-year-old boy,likes to play in the plum tr

14、ee in the backyard.One day his mother told him she tree in the backyard.One day his mother told him she was going to have a baby to play with him in June.was going to have a baby to play with him in June.Justin was very excited but Justin was very excited but too young to have an idea too young to h

15、ave an idea aboutabout when June was.when June was.To explain it toTo explain it to him,the mother him,the mother told him it was when the plums were ripe and asked the told him it was when the plums were ripe and asked the boy to boy to keep her postedkeep her posted when it would come.when it woul

16、d come.1.Characters Justin,I/mother,the plum tree,the coming babyJustin,I/mother,the plum tree,the coming babyThe clues(线索线索)to continue the passage:1.Analysis of the characters Justin was lovely,innocentJustin was lovely,innocent（天真无邪的）（天真无邪的）and full ofand full of love.love.Mother was smart.Mother

17、 was smart.2.The last paragraph of the passage “Justin,the baby is going to be born when the plums Justin,the baby is going to be born when the plums are ripe,you can keep me posted when that will be,are ripe,you can keep me posted when that will be,okay?”I wasnt completely sure if I was on the targ

18、et,okay?”I wasnt completely sure if I was on the target,but but the gardenerthe gardener in me was confident Im close enough.in me was confident Im close enough.Oh,he was excited!Now Justin had a way to know Oh,he was excited!Now Justin had a way to know when his new baby sister would come to play.w

19、hen his new baby sister would come to play.Keep me posted:let me knowKeep me posted:let me know3.The underlined words Justin,Justin,the plum tree,the plum tree,his toy tractors and trucks,his toy tractors and trucks,in the tree,in the tree,on the roof of the house,on the roof of the house,his plasti

20、c basket,his plastic basket,my tummy,my tummy,the baby,the baby,a better explanation,a better explanation,the gardener the gardener4.The given beginning of each continued paragraphPara.1:Para.1:From that moment on,From that moment on,Para.2:Para.2:June finally arrived,and the plums would be ripe Jun

21、e finally arrived,and the plums would be ripe soon.soon.Figure out the possible plot （构思可能的情节）（构思可能的情节）keep me posted when that will be.keep me posted when that will be.He was excited!He was excited!From that moment on,From that moment on,1.1.Justin kept his mother posted by Justin kept his mother p

22、osted by watching the plum tree.watching the plum tree.2.2.As time went by,there must have As time went by,there must have been some changes to the tree.been some changes to the tree.3.3.Add some feelings.Add some feelings.Para.1:June finally arrived,and the plums would be ripeJune finally arrived,a

23、nd the plums would be ripe soon soon.The baby wasnt arriving until the end of June.The baby wasnt arriving until the end of June.1.1.Justin thought his baby sister would Justin thought his baby sister would be ripe soon.be ripe soon.2.2.How he kept his mother posted that How he kept his mother poste

24、d that June came.June came.3.3.The ending The ending Para.2:One possible version:One possible version:Para.1:Para.1:From that moment on,From that moment on,JustinJustin checkedchecked the plum treethe plum tree several times a day and several times a day and reported reported his findings to me.Of h

25、is findings to me.Of course,he course,he was quite concernedwas quite concerned in November when all the in November when all the leaves fell off the tree.By January,with the cold and leaves fell off the tree.By January,with the cold and rains,he rains,he was truly worriedwas truly worried whether w

26、hether the babythe baby would be would be cold and wet like his tree.He cold and wet like his tree.He whispered towhispered to my tummymy tummy that the tree was strong and that she had to be strong too,that the tree was strong and that she had to be strong too,and make it through the winter.and mak

27、e it through the winter.Para.2:June finally arrived,and the plums would be ripe June finally arrived,and the plums would be ripe soon.soon.Our gardener Justin Our gardener Justin became very excitedbecame very excited.He.He climbed his treeclimbed his tree anyway with anyway with his plastic basketh

28、is plastic basket to pick to pick some plumssome plums off the branches where the sun shone off the branches where the sun shone warmest.warmest.He brought them to me to let me know the He brought them to me to let me know the baby would also be ripe soon.baby would also be ripe soon.He even took He

29、 even took his tractors his tractors and trucksand trucks for his baby sister.for his baby sister.At last,he won.He had a At last,he won.He had a beautiful sister!beautiful sister!How to understand the given passage accuratelyand reasonably continue the story:Analyze the characters.Analyze the chara

30、cters.Know about the plot.Know about the plot.Pay special attention to the underlined words,the last Pay special attention to the underlined words,the last paragraphs of the given passage,and the given paragraphs of the given passage,and the given beginning of each continued paragraph.beginning of e

31、ach continued paragraph.Mind you:dont miss any character in your Mind you:dont miss any character in your continued writing.continued writing.Practice2.Plot/Main ideaUnderstanding:Jack and his wife Jack and his wife were sailingwere sailing around Africa with their friends around Africa with their f

32、riends Max and Sasha Max and Sasha whenwhen they saw a trapped baby killer whale.they saw a trapped baby killer whale.Afraid though they wereAfraid though they were,Jack and Tonya,Jack and Tonya managed to helpmanaged to help it.it.Unluckily,Unluckily,due todue to the bad weather,Tonya dropped into

33、the cold the bad weather,Tonya dropped into the cold water and disappeared.Though they were worried about her,water and disappeared.Though they were worried about her,Jack and his friends had to find a shelter,the beach,to avoid the Jack and his friends had to find a shelter,the beach,to avoid the d

34、anger.danger.AnywayAnyway,Jack was thinking about Tonya.,Jack was thinking about Tonya.1.Characters Jack,Tonya(husband and wife),Jack,Tonya(husband and wife),Max and Sasha(their friends),Max and Sasha(their friends),Lucky(the baby killer whale),Lucky(the baby killer whale),other killer whales other

35、killer whalesThe clues to continue the passage:1.Analysis of the characters Jack and Tonya were Jack and Tonya were kind kind/caringcaring （有爱心的）（有爱心的）.The baby killer whale was The baby killer whale was in dangerin danger.2.The last paragraphs of the passage “Jack,do you want us all to die?”said Ma

36、x.“We cant do“Jack,do you want us all to die?”said Max.“We cant do any more.Tonya is wearing aany more.Tonya is wearing a life jacket life jacket and she can swim very and she can swim very well.Lets sail to the town.”well.Lets sail to the town.”Moments later the boat hit a beach.They went out.Max a

37、nd Moments later the boat hit a beach.They went out.Max and Sasha slept Sasha slept on the beachon the beach.Jack sat near the water,looking at.Jack sat near the water,looking at the sea and thought about Tonya.the sea and thought about Tonya.3.The underlined words shouted,shouted,killer whale,kille

38、r whale,help,help,Lucky,Lucky,the waves,the waves,in the water,in the water,the wind,the wind,a life jacket,a life jacket,on the beach,on the beach,4.The given beginning of each continued paragraph Para.1:Para.1:At that time,Tonya was five hundred meters away At that time,Tonya was five hundred mete

39、rs away out in the sea.out in the sea.Para.2:Para.2:Jack was walking along the beach and suddenly heJack was walking along the beach and suddenly he Figure out the possible plotFigure out the possible plotThe wind got stronger Another big waveThe wind got stronger Another big waveTonya is Tonya is w

40、earing a life jacketwearing a life jacket and she and she can swim wellcan swim well.At that time,Tonya was five hundred meters away out At that time,Tonya was five hundred meters away out in the sea.in the sea.1.1.Tonya was still alive and in the water.Tonya was still alive and in the water.2.2.Wha

41、t may happen to her in the water?What may happen to her in the water?the weather,killer whales,the weather,killer whales,Para.1:Jack was walking along the beach and suddenly heJack was walking along the beach and suddenly he 1.1.Suddenly he saw somethingSuddenly he saw something2.2.Tonya must have s

42、urvived.Tonya must have survived.How?/Who helped her?How?/Who helped her?3.The ending 3.The ending Para.2:Complete your writing first Complete your writing first and then polish your writing and then polish your writing with the help of the possible with the help of the possible version.version.Assignment A good continued writing should beA good continued writing should bea a completecomplete reasonablereasonable story/passage story/passage with proper language in neat with proper language in neat handwriting.handwriting.1.1.词数不少于词数不少于150150；2.2.共共2 2段；段；3.3.文体一致文体一致,但慎用直接引语。但慎用直接引语。Mind you