中考英语高分作文攻略写事-课件.pptx

1、云南师大附中呈贡校区云南师大附中呈贡校区英语作文怎么写？不会啊！记的单词都忘了！奥利给！胡诌吧！我是有原则的！新冠疫情下，老师扮演主播角色 -表象化、片面化立意标新（社会层面）-对复合型人才的需求（个人影响）广度深度怎样写好英语中考作文怎样写好英语中考作文-叙事叙事一、分析去年中考英语作文二、总结英语作文写作思路及流程三、评讲作文“Everyone needs help”四、作文拓展延申及赏析一、分析去年中考作文分析去年中考作文 分析云南近分析云南近6年中考真题的书面表达可知，针对年中考真题的书面表达可知，针对“经历与感受经历与感受”这这一话题共涉及过一话题共涉及过6次，次，2017省卷省卷“

2、A Special Day”、2019昆明昆明“On my parents birthday”、2018昆明昆明“A small thing”、2017昆明昆明A“One day in my childhood”、2015昆明昆明A“The good old days”、2014昆明昆明A“A happy time”；全国近年中考真题也针对自己或者他人的经历和感受；全国近年中考真题也针对自己或者他人的经历和感受进行考查。进行考查。命题探索命题探索(2019(2019昆明昆明)On my parents birthday某英文网站正在面向全国中学生开展以某英文网站正在面向全国中学生开展以“感恩父

3、母感恩父母”为主题为主题的征文活动，请你用英文以的征文活动，请你用英文以 “On my parents birthday”为题目写为题目写一篇记叙文投稿，内容为某次你为妈妈或爸爸庆祝生日的经历。一篇记叙文投稿，内容为某次你为妈妈或爸爸庆祝生日的经历。要求：要求：1.1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于6060个；个；2.2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。3.3.书面表达必须写在答题卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律书面表达必须写在答题卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分。不得分。范文范文点评点评On my

4、 parents birthday August 8th was my mothers birthday.My father and I wanted to give her surprising birthday presents.文章采用文章采用“总总分分总总”的结的结构展开叙述。构展开叙述。范文范文点评点评 In the morning，my father and I went shopping and bought a very nice cake.Then we went to the market and bought some food.When we got home，my f

5、ather cooked some nice food in the kitchen.I went to my room to make a birthday card.I wanted to tell my mother that I loved her very much.Then I wrote in the card，“I love you，my dear mother！”I put it on her pillow，then we cleaned the room.We felt very tired，but we were very happy.When my mother got

6、 home，we said，“Happy Birthday！”My mother smiled.We had supper together.My mother said，“Thank you，my daughter！”How happy we were！灵活运用多种句型：时灵活运用多种句型：时间状语从句和宾语从句等，间状语从句和宾语从句等，讲述事情的经过。讲述事情的经过。结尾用感叹句表达一家结尾用感叹句表达一家人的幸福。人的幸福。二、英语作文写作思路及流程（五个步骤）1.审题（文体、时态、人称、题目内容）文体：记叙文、说明文、议论文和应用文。时态：一般现在时、一般过去时、一般将来时、现在进行

7、时、过去进行时、现在完成时、人称：第一、第二、第三人称 题目内容：写人、叙事2.标新立意 写作的方向、意图和动机。（广度和深度）3.搭脚手架 框架（总-分-总）提纲挈领-每段主旨 首段 点题 中间 描述事情经过（人物、事件、影响）结尾 呼题、升华情感4.细节处理、润色 准确地遣词造句-好词好句（语言能力）词法（词性、词义）句法 句子用法分类 句子结构分类 句子成分 (主谓宾 定状补）定语从句4.细节处理、润色思维品质（中英文化差异）1.中英表达差异 -中文含蓄，英文直白You are so handsome.你好帅！陌上人如玉，公子世无双。You are so beautiful.你好漂亮！回

8、眸一笑百媚生，六宫粉黛无颜色。2.状语的习惯用法有些不同 在北京大家都喜欢吃烤鸭。（地点状语）Everyone likes roast duck in Beijing.为了取得好成绩，她每天都熬夜。（目的状语）She stays up late everyday to get a better grade.everyone likes roast duck.To get a better grade,she stays up late everyday.3.定语的位置有差异（形容词、数量词、名词、代词充当）平静的湖面 一个故事 今天的报纸 我的衣服 英文 （形容词、名词、代词、数词、介词短语、

9、动词不定式、分词、定语从句）calm lake a story todays newspaper my clothes 前置定语 后置定语英语后置定语的用法：1.复合不定代词要用后置定语修饰 something interesting （interesting something）2.动词不定式作后置定语Do you have anything to say?3.分词作后置定语 现在分词表主动；过去分词表被动The man lying on the ground is my father.（主动）The pen bought by her is made in china.（被动）4.介词短语

10、作后置定语The boy in blue is Tom.The people around the world are fighting with disease.5.定语从句作后置定语The boy who is strong is Tom.Is he the man who wants to see you?4.动词用法的差异中文：我要去爬山。英文：I always climb mountains.I am climbing the mountain now.I climbed the mountain yesterday.I was climbming the mountain at e

11、ight yesterday morning.I will climb the mountain next Friday.中文可以有不用动词的情况，但英文不能省略动词。我累了。I tired.（错)I am tired.5.一词多性多形的正确使用happy （adj.)开心的，高兴的happiness （n.)开心，幸福happily （adv.)开心地happier （adj.)更开心的happiest （adj.)最开心的more happily (adv.)更开心地most happily (adv.)最开心地eg.I am so happy today.She sings a song

12、 happily.I think Gina is the happiest person in her family.4.巧用过渡词起：开始承：承接，并列转：转折合：整合，总结过渡词分类：文章结构（4类）句子间的逻辑关系（10类）表示顺序：first(ly);second(ly);to begin with;to start with;at first;at last;in the end;next;then;after that;finally表示对比：while;on the one hand on the other hand表示转折：but;however;on the other h

13、and;though;although;after all;unluckily;unfortunately表示让步：though;although;even if/though表示举例：for example;for instance;such as;like表示并列:eitheror;neithernor;bothand;not onlybut also;as well as表示递进：besides;whats more;whats worse;in addition表示原因：because;because of;for;since;thanks to;for the reason that

14、;as表示结果：so;therefore;as a result;sothat表示目的：so that;in order that/to;so as to5.评审书面表达评分标准一档（12-15分）：内容切题、层次清楚、语言流畅、基本无语言表 达错误。二档(8-11分)：内容切题、层次比较清楚、语言比较流畅、语言表达错误较少。三档（5-7分）：内容基本切题、层次不够分明、语言表达错误较多。四档（1-4分）：有一定内容、但语言表达错误很多。（注意：书面表达语法错误全卷扣分不得超过2分；单词拼写错误扣分不得超过2分；抄袭卷中阅读材料的，抄袭部分不给分。）在生活中你帮助过别人吗？或者得到过别人的帮助

15、吗？请以“Everyone needs help”为题，写一个你自己的故事。要求：1.注意紧扣主题，语言流畅，此数不少于80个；2.不得使用真实姓名和校名，如需使用名字，请用Mike,Gina等英文名，校名统一用Guangming Middle School;三、评讲作文 “Everyone needs help”（At the beginning of 2020,I first realized that peoples lives are in great danger and weak.Lots of danger will leave peoples lives.Such as ear

16、thquake,bore,rainstorm and so on.So to live healthy and better,everyone needs help.）By watching news,we could know that people all of the world are fighting with NCP-a pneumonia.Wu Han is the centrality of this epidemic situation.We must thank the nurses and doctors who are fighting with NCP.They he

17、lp the patients get out of illness,but didnt think about themselves.How great the nurses and doctors are!And they also received lots of help.Such as the medicine and mask from every countries,the doctor from every provinces,the medical material from people.Because of this help.Wu Han became better j

18、ust within one month.Everything is just like that saying“Wherever needs help,the others sides will give.”I think we will pass this time soon.In our daily lives,everyone needs help,because of this help，we can pass these unexpected accidents in the world,although we are small and weak.At the beginning

19、 of 2020,I first realize that people are very weak in the face of disaster,so I think everyone cant live better in the world without others help.点题要简明扼要，直击话题but didnt care about themselves.differentbelieve(重新立意）Helping others is helping ourselves.Although all Chinese people are fighting with NCP now

20、,I believe we can overcome all difficulties if we unite together to help each other.Flowers grow with sunshines help,and animals need the shelter of trees to survive,so do humans.I still remember the day that Mike helped to cheer me up.The senior high school entrance examination is coming soon.Unluc

21、kily,my grade dropped in a short time.Although teachers expected me to be more excellent,I just felt nervous,increasingly lacking in confidence about myself.However,a shinning star lighted my lifeMike came to help me.He stayed with me when I was almost completely disappointed in myself.“I still reme

22、mber youve got first place many times before,you are always incredible,and it still is.Come on,pick yourself up!You can get it!”After that,I was gradually confident and worked harder,because I know they expect a lot from me,I have no excuse to let them down.Im really getting better because of Mike.E

23、veryone needs help,because everyone faces problems.What we can do is to help others and thanks for help,being a positive and helpful person to light othershearts.juniorof删除，累赘atcheerexpected me a lotthank 开头出彩，从物联系到人，且点题 结尾呼题，且升华合理得当 All people live together on the earth from ancient times to the pr

24、esent.And no one could deal with everything well without others help so far.Ancient people lived together to help each other,so they created many things for humans because they pulled together.Now,our parents,teachers and friends help us when we have difficulties.I still remember I had a fight with

25、my mother and we didnt talk for a long time.I felt helpless and didnt know how to do.So I asked my friends for help.They came up with a good idea for me and also cheered me up.That moved me a lot.I suddenly realized help is a kind of love between people,it spreads warmth in our life.From then on,I f

26、elt happier and more excited than I did before when I help others because everyone needs help and should help others.I decided to make our life warmer.写作手法独特，反向点题 标点应用不当，导致句子不完整 From then on,I feel happier and more excited than I did before when I help others.At the same time,in order to make our li

27、fe better and warmer,everyone needs help.Nowadays,most of people are kind,but there still someone is selfish,they even never help others.For this,I just want to say,everyone needs help.In the past,I thought that I could do everything just by myself,but one thing had changed my idea,About two years a

28、go,I found my English had not improved.At first,I just wanted to solve it by myself,but after that,my performance still didnt improve,even slowly dropped.At that time,my friend Amy helped with me.She not only told me a good way to study English,but also studied with me.With her help,my English perfo

29、rmance has improved a lot.Everyone has different abilities.To solve problems,we have to pull together.No matter how excellent a person is,he cant solve everything only by himself.Everyone needs help,only depending on the strength of the team can help us achieve the goal.Everyone has different abilit

30、ies to solve problem,so we have to pull together.especially描述细腻到位常见错误类型：1.审题不清 2.拼写错误3.表达混乱4.名词单复数的问题5.句子逻辑不清，缺少成分6.代词误用7.缺少动词8.前后不一致（数、时态、代词、主谓）9.搭配不当10.标点使用不当 语义表达不清，句子不流畅Once a time,I do not know to ask for help that I can not always solve problem.Once upon a time,I don t know how to ask for help

31、,so I can not solve problems easily.短语搭配不当动词+介词短语 hear from(收到.来信）hear of/about 听说 eg.I often hear from my parents.take care of 照顾 take care 当心，小心介词短语 在那时 in that time（错)在某天 in one day(错）at that timeon one day动词+名词短语do homework 做家庭作业make a cake 制作蛋糕receive a letter 收到一封信accept invitation 接受邀请四、四、作文拓

32、展延申及赏析作文拓展延申及赏析The Greatest Help提示：初中三年马上就要结束了，三年的时光一定给你留下了很多挥之不去的记忆。什么人给了你最大的帮助？你取得了哪些进步？有什么感想或受到了哪些启发？请以“The Greatest Help”为题，写一篇英语短文。要求：1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。The Greatest Help I have got lots of help in my life，and my father gives me the greatest help of all.I still rem

33、ember one thing that happened between my father and me.Once,we climbed the mountain on a sunny day.On the halfway,I felt that the weather was so hot that I didnt want to continue.Then my father told me life is like climbing the mountain.No matter what difficulties we meet，we should face them bravely

34、 instead of running away.Hearing these words,I decided to keep going on.From then on,I realized that courage could beat difficulties.My Happiness提示：幸福是什么？幸福可能是同学间互相帮助的感动，幸福提示：幸福是什么？幸福可能是同学间互相帮助的感动，幸福也可能是老师赞扬时内心的激动，幸福也可能是父母一也可能是老师赞扬时内心的激动，幸福也可能是父母一个细微的举动。请你以个细微的举动。请你以“My Happiness”为题，叙述一件为题，叙述一件发生在你生

35、活中的令你感到幸福的事。发生在你生活中的令你感到幸福的事。要求：要求：1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；个；2.文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。1.第一眼看到你会被那抢眼、近乎妖艳的色彩震撼，更会迷醉于她独特的，蕴涵巫女般迷幻魔力的风格之中。2.她选择以代表强烈欲望的紫色来包装其化妆品系列，以黯紫色为主色的包装，周围布满了红艳的蔷薇，像极了年代妩媚的面粉盒；复古俏丽的化妆品系列让城中女子爱不释手。3.古琦品牌时装一向以高档、豪华、性感而闻名于世，以“身份与财富之象征”品牌形象成为富有的

36、上流社会的消费宠儿，一向被商界人士垂青，时尚之余不失高雅。古琦现在是意大利最大的时装集团。4.继承着法国高级女装的传统，始终保持高级华丽的设计路线，迎合上流社会成熟女性的审美品味，象征着法国时装文化的最高精神。5.多年过去了，这个名字依然引领着世界的流行时尚。然而在这些辉煌的业绩后面，我们所看到的是一个活生生的，他充满着深情，极为害羞，又极为幽默，他便是永远的。6.迪奥的设计，注重的是服装的女性造型线条而并非色彩。他的时装具有鲜明的风格：裙长不再曳地，强调女性隆胸丰臀、腰肢纤细、肩形柔美的曲线，打破了战后女装保守古板的线条。这种风格轰动了巴黎乃至整个西方世界，给人留下深刻的印象。7.服装与其他名牌做法不同，它从不将任何“”或“”等明显的标志放在衣服上，而衣标上的字样，则是其唯一的辨识方法。8.推出的服装款式向顾客传递积极、开放的生活理念,倡导时尚的生活方式。专为成熟时尚的都市女性设计。她们的着装风格典雅、性感；精于对服装款式、颜色、面料及配饰的