2020年山东高考复习9-专题九读后续写课件.pptx

1、Writing 1(2018浙江6月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。It was summer,and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in the state of New Mexico.We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle Paul,m

2、y dads friend,picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.Very e

3、arly in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chick-五年高考ens,while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They

4、 looked really cool.In the afternoon,I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long as my dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be late f

5、or supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks,the deep green pine trees,and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a mag

6、ic scene.It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it

7、 got dark.答案答案写作提示根据续写第一段所给的段首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.可知,本段应该主要描写突然出现一只小兔子之后的故事。按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让马受惊。故本段应该描写马受惊后发生的事。从第二段的段首句We had no idea where we were and it got dark.可以看出,作者和父亲迷路了。那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开。本段的主要内容应该是从迷路到回家的故事。写作时一定要注意以下两点:第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二

8、段是迷路之后的故事,因此要注意人物心理和情感的描写。第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。要注意第一段的内容,尤其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句之间的衔接要合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。One possible version:Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.This unexpected appearance frightened my horse,which made it run wildly.I tried my best to control it,but in vain.Frig

9、htened as I was,I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off.Fortunately,minutes later,the horse stopped before a river,out of breath,and so did I.At that moment,my dad also came up.Seeing I was OK,he was quite relieved.But it was clear that we got lost.Paragraph 2:We had no idea wh

10、ere we were and it got dark.We didnt know where the farm house was.What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly.But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation.Just as we were at the point of desperation,we heard a faint voice from the distance.“It must be Uncle Paul,”

11、I said.So we cried back with excitement.Finally,Uncle Paul safely brought us back home.What an amazing ride!高级语块高级语块1.in vain白费力气2.out of breath上气不接下气3.relieved rlivd adj.放心的4.track trk n.小路,小道5.at the point of desperation在快绝望的时候6.a faint voice 微弱的声音精彩语句精彩语句原句:Frightened as I was,I tried to keep my

12、balance to prevent myself from falling off.分析:本句话的主干是I tried to keep my balance。后面跟的动词不定式作目的状语。前面为as引导的让步状语从句。译文:虽然我很害怕,但我还是努力保持身体的平衡,以防自己掉下来。Writing 2(2017浙江11月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。A Vacation with My MotherI had an interesting childhood.It was filled with surprises and amusements,all beca

13、use of my motherloving,sweet,yet absent-minded and forgetful.One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota,and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the

14、way.As the first day of our trip approached,David,my eight-year-old brother,and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends.Who knew if wed ever see them again?Finally,the moment of our departure arrived,and we loaded suitcases,books,games,camping equipment,and a tent into the car and bravely

15、drove off.We bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and trav-elers checks Mom had forgotten.David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept:“You stand outside the door and play lookout(放哨)while I g

16、o,and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.”I had terrible pictures in my mind:“Honey,where are the kids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh.I thought they were being awfully quiet.”We were never actually left behind in a strange city,but we werent about to take any chances.On the fourth or fifth ni

17、ght,we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy.After driving in vain for some time,Mom suddenly got a great idea:Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there?David and I became nervous.To our great relief,Dad turned down the idea.Mom never could u

18、nderstand our objections(反对).If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep,Mom would have been delighted.She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is.We finally found a vacancy in the next town.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

19、Paragraph 1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.答案答案写作提示原文讲述了作者的母亲很健忘,一家四口去祖父母所在的州自驾旅游,途中发生了有趣的事情,比如爸爸叫我盯住妈妈,以防她开车的时候睡着等。根据上面语境后续的文章要注意把握原文的基调,合理的后续发展。根据续写第一段开头句:第二天,我们想起新买的帐篷。接下来肯

20、定要和原文的内容联系起来:妈妈丢三落四,是个健忘的(forgetful)人。这为下文埋下伏笔。续写第二段开头句又说我们愉快地欣赏路边的景色。此处可以用一些描述景色的表达来烘托氛围,但是第二段不能仅仅只有景色描述。这里可以用实写和虚写结合的方式,看到景色(同时回忆往事),最终把故事的落脚点放在“亲情”“生活的乐趣”等角度。应和原文的主题联系起来,合理发展。当然,本篇续写的话题比较开放,情节可以写的角度比较多。关键词:Mom,Dad,David(弟弟),trip,tent,camping,nice,trouble,forgetful,absent-minded。One possible versi

21、on:Paragraph 1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.We decided to camp a-long the river.The views there were surpassingly beautifulthe warm sunshine,the fresh air,the clean water.We sat on the grass,enjoying the splendid nature.However,when Dad was about to put up our

22、 tent,he was disappointed to find that it had been left in the hotel.Well,Dad had to go back to fetch it to continue our camping.Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.Every time we got to a new place,Mom would cheer up like a child.She would get off t

23、he car excitedly,laughing and dancing around.Together we enjoyed the modern sights in the big cities,the historic buildings in the small towns and the amazing scenery in nature.When we came back to the hotel after the tiring but excellent visit,Mom would hug us and kiss us on our faces.How sweet she

24、 was!Absent-minded and forgetful as she was,she never forgot to express her love to us.高级语块高级语块1.splendid splendd adj.壮观的2.put up搭建3.fetch fet vt.去取来4.cheer up振奋起来5.historic hstrk adj.历史上著名的6.absent-minded adj.心不在焉的7.forgetful fetfl adj.健忘的;好忘事的精彩语句精彩语句原句:However,when Dad was about to put up our ten

25、t,he was disappointed to find that it had been left in the hotel.分析:本句话的主干是he was disappointed to find.。后面的that引导宾语从句。主句前面是由when引导的时间状语从句,句中使用了be about to do结构。译文:然而,当爸爸准备给我们搭帐篷时,他发现帐篷落在了旅馆里,感到很失望。Writing 3(2017浙江6月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright,warm July afternoon,Mac Hollan,a primary s

26、chool teacher,was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends.One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair,but they had encouraged Mac to carry on,and they would catch up with him soon.As Mac pedaled(骑行)a-long alone,he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home.He hop

27、ed to show them this beautiful place someday.Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him.“Man,thats a big dog!”he thought.But when he looked to the side,he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all,but a wolf,quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumped.He found out his can of bear spray.Wit

28、h one hand on the bars,he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal,and to Macs relief,it fell back,shak-ing its head.But a minute later,it was by his side again.Then it attacked the back of Macs bike,tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time,and again,it

29、 fell back only to quickly restart the chase(追赶).Mac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down.He saw a steep uphill climb before him.He knew that once he hit the hill,hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh.At this m

30、oment,Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska.They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road.A bit later,they spotted what they,too,assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike.As they got closer,they realized that the

31、dog was a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast,just a dozen yards away now.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paragraph 2:A few

32、 minutes later,the other cyclists arrived.答案答案写作提示解题思路可从以下几步入手:1.通读全文通读全文首先要解决好五个W和一个H的问题,即理清人物who、地点where、时间when、事件what、原因why及怎样发展how。本文的大意就是,Mac与好友一起骑行去阿拉斯加,路上同伴因修自行车落后,Mac独自一人前行,遇到狼的突袭,经过了一番搏斗。幸亏此时Paul和Becky两人开车经过,出手相救。如何发展(how)?这里考查学生的批判性思维能力。在通读全文时,考生应将影响理解的词句进行仔细揣摩,结合上下文推测出它的准确含义。比如:A bright r

33、ed cloud enveloped the animal中的enveloped可以结合上下文,猜出它的含义大致为surround sb.or pletely。2.构思情节,谋篇布局按照原文中事件发生的逻辑性,构思好情节发展。这个发展必须符合故事情节内在的逻辑。因为这不是写科幻小说,不是写神话,因此应该符合现实发生的真实性。所以这个环节的主要任务是谋篇布局。布局谋篇应利用好两方面的信息:10个标有下划线的关键词语:Mac,friends,bicycle,pedaled,home,jumped,wolf,cars,climb,Paul;续写部分所给的两个段落的首句。第一段第一句是“The car

34、 abruptly stopped in front of him.”,第二段的第一句是“A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived.”。这两句话起到很关键的作用,无论从时间的先后、情节的发展都要以这两句话作为内在逻辑关系。很多考生认为two cyclists指Paul and Becky,说明没有读懂原文。因此在情节的安排中,必须按照叙述的顺序,继续紧密结合原材料中五个W的逻辑顺序发展下去。第一段写什么?应围绕Paul and Becky如何救助Mac展开;第二段写什么?搞清开头的这两个人是谁很重要,然后依照符合故事情节发展的内在逻辑

35、推进下去。第一段和第二段要衔接紧密,相互关联,不能独立存在。3.理清逻辑,优化语言续写的语言逻辑、词句结构都必须符合当时人狼大战的情景。写作不必追求高大上的词汇。相反,朴实、自然、地道、贴切的词语便是好的词语。杨柳的美体现在纤细婀娜,樟树的美体现在挺拔繁茂。不同的写作对象应采用不同的语言风格。这个读后续写题,建议以动作描写为主,可以参考电影速度与激情中的画面风格,采用令人眼花缭乱的动作描写,以超快节奏描写场景。One possible version:Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Mac rushed down fro

36、m his bicycle and waved at the peo-ple inside the car for help.Paul and Becky inside the car got out immediately to help him climb in-to the car,in spite of the danger that the fierce wolf was running near.They quickly pushed Mac into their car and closed all the doors as hard as possible,legs tremb

37、ling and breathless.Seeing this,the wolf still howled outside the car for some time and then left unwillingly.Paragraph 2:A few minutes later,the other cyclists arrived.Macs friends were shocked to hear the story and very grateful to the young couple.Mac invited all of them back to his home for dinn

38、er and he in-troduced his wife and daughters to his two new friends who saved his life.During the dinner they recalled the adventure and talked about the ways to deal with such dangerous situations.高级语块高级语块1.abruptly brptl adv.突然2.rush down冲下去3.tremble trembl v.发抖4.howl hal vi.嚎叫,咆哮5.deal with 处理,应付

39、精彩语句精彩语句原句:Mac invited all of them back to his home for dinner and he introduced his wife and daughters to his two new friends who saved his life.分析:本句话的主干是Mac invited.and he introduced.。and为并列连词,连接前后两个并列分句。who引导定语从句,修饰先行词his two new friends。译文:Mac邀请他们所有人回家吃饭。他把妻子和女儿介绍给两个救了他命的新朋友。Writing 4(2016浙江10月

40、)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。One weekend in July,Jane and her husband,Tom,had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest.Unfortunately,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel.By the time they reached the lake,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im

41、 going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned around,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly

42、 realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.Jane kept moving,but the farther she walked,the more confused she became.As night was beginning to fall,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night.Lying awake in the d

43、ark,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some

44、berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter.Is that for me?Unfortu-nately,the tre

45、es made it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下

46、划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.答案答案写作提示本文的梗概是:Jane与丈夫Tom去森林中的湖边野营。发生了争吵后,Jane独自进入森林,结果迷了路,露宿一宿,第二天仅以溪水野果为食,并沿溪而行。有直升机飞过,Jane准备以黄色衬衣吸引直升机注意。短文中所画的关键词语基本涵盖短文和续写所必须涉及的要素,包括人物、环境、行为动作、器物和情绪。这些关键词对续写部分的内容作

47、了大致的限制,使续写的故事不至于偏离短文太远。同时,这些词语大多数是故事续写所必需用到的。因此,按要求使用5个以上很容易。第一段开头语为:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again。表明应该续写第二天晚上Jane的经历。第二段开头语为:It was daybreak when Jane woke up。表明应续写第三天所发生的事情。两句开头语都是从Jane的视角来描写的,因此所接续的语句也应从Jane的视角来描写。文章的体裁是记叙文,重在讲故事,应避免议论。结构分两段,150词。两段词数最好能基本平衡。每段开头语已经限制

48、了条件和情境,因此每一段的故事发展逻辑应与短文和每段开头语相符。一般来说,故事的内容以Jane在林中经历曲折,最终与Tom相见,两人和好为宜,以形成一个完整的故事链。人物关系比较简单,以Jane为主,Tom次之,若有其他人物则更次之。时态上,短文叙述发生在过去的一件事情,采用过去时。除总结性的语句外,应注意多使用注重细节的描述性的语言,注意心理描写。要恰当使用语句连接成分。除此之外,还有其他手段,如代词、某些修饰手法或句式变换等。One possible version:Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting da

49、rk again.She had to stay alone in the forest for another cold night.Jane was so tired and disappointed,but she didnt lose heart.She knew Tom must be trying his best to search for her.She believed that the helicopter must have been called by Tom and was sure it would come back again tomorrow.She foun

50、d a place near thestream and slept.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Shewalked along the stream,hoping to find a suitable place so that the helicopter could find her.She was so lucky that before long a big rock appeared,which was high above the trees.There she climbed and waited with her