高考英语作文专题读后续写一课件.pptx

1、读后续读后续写专题写专题一一Continuation Writing读后续写读后续写 提供一段提供一段350350词以内的语言材料，要词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料所给段落求考生依据该材料所给段落开头语开头语和所标和所标示示关键词关键词进行续写（进行续写（150150词左右），将其词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。和结构完整的短文。-考试说明考试说明01 读后续写高考评分标准读后续写高考评分标准一一.评分原则：评分原则：1.1.本题总分为本题总分为2525分，按分，按5 5个档次给分。个档次给分。2.2.评分时，先根据

2、所续写短文的评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容内容和和语言语言初步确定其所属档次，初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。3.3.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：（1 1）与所给）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2 2）内容的）内容的丰富性丰富性和对所标出和对所标出关键词语关键词语的应用情况；的应用情况；（3 3）应用语法结构和词汇的）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性丰富性和准确性；（4 4）上下文的）上下文的连贯性连贯性；4.4.拼写与标点符号是

3、语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。对交际的影响程度予以考虑。5.5.如书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次如书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。6.6.词数少于词数少于130130的，从总分中减去的，从总分中减去2 2分。分。第五档第五档（2125）与所给短文与所给短文融洽度高融洽度高，与所提供，与所提供各段落开头语各段落开头语衔接合理衔接合理。内容丰富内容丰富，应用了，应用了5个以上短文个以上短文中标出的关键词语。中标出的关键词语。所使用所使用语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇丰富、准丰富、准

4、确，可能有些许错误，但完全不确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。影响意义表达。有效使用了有效使用了语句间的连接成分语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文使所续写短文结构紧凑结构紧凑。二二.评分标准评分标准内容（丰富合理）语言（准确生动）思维（严密连贯）02续写体裁：记叙文续写体裁：记叙文记叙文怎么读记叙文怎么读一一.读记叙文要素读记叙文要素5W和和1H“who,what,where,when,why,how”Who is it about?What happens?Where does it happen?When does it happen?Why does it happen?How do

5、es it happen?案例案例1 1：2019 2019期末考读后续写期末考读后续写 5W和和1H A light drizzle(毛毛雨毛毛雨)was falling as my sister Jill and I ran out of the Church,eager to get home and play with the presents that Santa Claus had left for us and our baby sister,Sharon.Across the street was a gas station where the bus would stop.I

6、t was closed for Christmas,but I noticed a family standing in the rain,huddled(挤挤)together.I wondered briefly why they were there,but soon forgot about them.When we got home,there was hardly time to enjoy our presents because we had to go off to our grandparents house for our big dinner.As we drove

7、by the closed gas station,I noticed the family were still there.My father was driving very slowly.Suddenly,he U-turned in the middle of the road and said,“Those people at the gas station have got children.Its Christmas!I cant stand it!”When my father pulled into the gas station,I saw there were five

8、 of them:the parents and three children-two girls and a small boy.Jill,Sharon,and I stared at the children.and they stared back at us.“You waiting for the bus?”my father asked.The man said that they were going to Birmingham,where he had a brother and prospects(希望希望)of a job.“Well,youre getting wet.T

9、here is a cover and some benches(长长凳凳)in the next bus stop in Winborn,”my father said,“Ill drive you up there.”They climbed into the car.They had no luggage,only the clothes they were wearing.My father asked the children if Santa Claus had found them yet.Three sad faces gave him the answer.“Well,”my

10、 father said,winking(眨眼眨眼)at my mother,“when I saw Santa this morning,he told me he was having trouble finding all kids and he asked me if he could leave your presents at my house.Well just go and get them before I take you to Winborn.”WhoWhoWhenWhenWhereWhereWhatWhatWhyWhyHowHow案例案例1 1：2019 2019期末考

11、读后续写期末考读后续写 5W和和1H We&a familyWe&a family-My father&the man-My father&the manChristmasChristmasat the gas station;at our house;in the carat the gas station;at our house;in the carstopped to help the familystopped to help the familyParagraph 1:When we stopped at our house,the three children ran throu

12、gh the front door.Paragraph 2:Back in the car,on the way to Winborn,my father asked the man if he had money for the bus to Birmingham.themetheme?02续写体裁：记叙文续写体裁：记叙文二二.读情读情节节BeginningClimaxEndingDevelopmentInciting incident：引起故事矛盾或冲突引起故事矛盾或冲突(conflict)的事件的事件;Rising action：围绕冲突故事主人公采取一系列的行动围绕冲突故事主人公采取一

13、系列的行动;Falling action：冲突向得以解决的方向发展冲突向得以解决的方向发展;Resolution：冲突得到了解决冲突得到了解决;Development:案例案例2 2：During a bullfight,a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring.The crowd began to shout,but the drunk was unaware of the danger.The bull was busy with the matador at the time,but it suddenly caught

14、sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap.Apparently sensitive to criticism,the bull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk.The crowd suddenly grew quiet.The drunk,however,seemed quite sure of himself.When the bull got close to him,he clumsily stepped aside

15、 to let it pass.The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed.By this time,however,three men had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety.Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him,for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning i

16、ts attention to the matador.During a bullfight,a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring.The crowd began to shout,but the drunk was unaware of the danger.The bull was busy with the matador at the time,but it suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a re

17、d cap.Apparently sensitive to criticism,the bull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk.The crowd suddenly grew quiet.The drunk,however,seemed quite sure of himself.When the bull got close to him,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass.The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed.

18、By this time,however,three men had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety.Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him,for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador.BeginningBeginning During a bullfigh

19、t,a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring.The crowd began to shout,but the drunk was unaware of the danger.The bull was busy with the matador at the time,but it suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap.Apparently sensitive to criticism,the b

20、ull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk.The crowd suddenly grew quiet.The drunk,however,seemed quite sure of himself.When the bull got close to him,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass.The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed.By this time,however,three men had come into

21、the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety.Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him,for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador.developmentdevelopment During a bullfight,a drunk suddenly wandered into the midd

22、le of the ring.The crowd began to shout,but the drunk was unaware of the danger.The bull was busy with the matador at the time,but it suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap.Apparently sensitive to criticism,the bull forgot all about the matador and char

23、ged at the drunk.The crowd suddenly grew quiet.The drunk,however,seemed quite sure of himself.When the bull got close to him,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass.The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed.By this time,however,three men had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the dru

24、nk to safety.Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him,for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador.climaxclimax During a bullfight,a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring.The crowd began to shout,but the dru

25、nk was unaware of the danger.The bull was busy with the matador at the time,but it suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap.Apparently sensitive to criticism,the bull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk.The crowd suddenly grew quiet.The

26、drunk,however,seemed quite sure of himself.When the bull got close to him,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass.The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed.By this time,however,three men had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety.Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for

27、 him,for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador.endingending03情节的构思情节的构思一一.根据记叙文要素根据记叙文要素二二.根据故事线索根据故事线索三三.根据中心矛盾根据中心矛盾案例三案例三：It was one of the hottest days of the dry season.We had not seen rain in almost a month.The cro

28、ps were dying.Cows had stopped giving milk.The streams were long gone back into the earth.If we didnt see some rain soon,we would lose everything.It was on this day that I learned the true lesson of sharing and witnessed the only miracle(奇迹奇迹)I have ever seen in my life.I was making lunch for the fa

29、mily in the kitchen when I saw my six-year old son,Billy,walking toward the woods.I could only see his back.He wasnt walking in his usual way.He was obviously walking with a great effort,trying to be as still as possible.Minutes after he disappeared into the woods,he came running out again toward th

30、e house.I went back to making sandwiches,thinking that whatever he had been doing was completed.Moments later,however,he was once again walking in that unusual way toward the woods.This activity went on for an hour.Finally,my curiosity got the best of me.I crept out of the house and followed him on

31、his journey.He was cupping both hands in front of him as he walked,being very careful not to spill the water he carried.I followed him secretly as he went into the woods.Branches slapped(拍打拍打)his little face but he did not try to avoid them.He might have a much higher purpose,I thought.As I came clo

32、ser,I saw the most amazing sight.Several large deer stood in front of him.Billy walked right up to them,at the sight of which I almost screamed for him to get away.A huge buck(雄鹿雄鹿)was dangerously close.But the buck didnt threaten him nor even move as Billy knelt down.And then I saw a tiny baby deer

33、 lying on the ground,obviously suffering from thirst and heat,lift its head with great effort to drink the water in my boys hands.Para.1 When the water was gone,Billy jumped up to run back to the house._Para.2 Instead of lecturing him like his father,I decided to help him._注意注意:1.1.所续写短文的词数应为所续写短文的词

34、数应为150150词左右；词左右；2.2.应使用应使用5 5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键短语个以上短文中标有下划线的关键短语;3.3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4.4.请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Continue the story with the beginning of the first sentence of the following paragraphs.When&WhereWhoWhat/howWhyPara.4When the water was gone,Billy jum

35、ped up to run back to the house._Para.5Instead of lecturing him like his father,I decided to help him._ I Billyhot day without rain for a long timekitchen woods make lunch,see Billyfollow himcuriouswalk towardscupped waterfeed baby deersuffering from thirst and heat一一.要素分要素分析析PlotStory beginningdeve

36、lopmentclimax(When the water was gone,Billy jumped up to run back to the house.)ending(Instead of lecturing him like his father,I decided to help him.)One of the hottest days of the dry season，I saw Billy walk towards the woods.I followed Billy and saw how Billy overcome difficulty to feed water to

37、baby deer.二二.情节分析情节分析 What did Billy run back to the house?What happened next?How did his father lecture him?How did Billy feel?Central conflict How did I comfort and help Billy?Whats the final ending?Did it rain in the end?Why?Para.When&WhereWhoWhat/howWhyPara 4Para.4When the water was gone,Billy j

38、umped up to run back to the house._Para.5Instead of lecturing him like his father,I decided to help him._ father Billyhot day without rain for a long timekitchenlecture Billyblame Billylack water,waste water,annoyedhang his head,crysad三三.情节构思情节构思Para.When&WhereWhoWhat/howWhyPara 5Para.4When the wate

39、r was gone,Billy jumped up to run back to the house._Para.5Instead of lecturing him like his father,I decided to help him._hot day without rain for a long timekitchenwoods I Billycomfort Billy,find a bucketgo into woodsfeed deer/When the water was gone,Billy jumped up to run back to the house.I foll

40、owed him back to a tap.He knelt there,letting the drip slowly fill up his cup.Just at that moment his father entered the kitchen.What are you doing here?His father asked,frowning.I want to save a baby deer in the woods and need more water.As soon as Billys voice died down,came a louder voice of his

41、father,Ridiculous!The deer can find the water by themselves.Dont waste water!Without looking at Billy,his father walked out angrily,leaving Billy tearing in the kitchen.四四.范文赏析范文赏析THANKS 1.沈从文的创作风格趋向浪漫主义，他要求小说的诗意效果，融写实、纪梦、象征于一体，语言格调古朴，句式简峭、主干突出，单纯而又厚实，朴讷而又传神，具有浓郁的地方色彩，凸现出乡村人性特有的风韵与神采。2.沈从文创作的小说主要有两类

42、，一种是以湘西生活为题材，一种是以都市生活为题材，前者通过描写湘西人原始、自然的生命形式，赞美人性美；后者通过都市生活的腐化堕落，揭示都市自然人性的丧失。3.从作者的描述看，作者的观察敏锐，记忆超强，对现象世界十分倾心，对大自然的声音、气味，社会上的人与事怀有浓厚的兴趣。他把大自然与社会生活称为一本“大书”，他从这本“大书”中学到了许多书本上没有的东西，他在自然和社会中倾心体验，尊重生命本真的做法，并非不爱学习，而是为了更好的学习。4.不少评论家觉得沈从文擅长写景，且晴朗明澈，但是缺少深度。也有评论家认为好就好在没有深度，因为没有深度的“看”风景，其实就不为一般的社会价值所局限，这样也就抛弃了

43、自以为是的优越感和置身事外的位置，而是在宇宙万汇的动静之中“看”。5.一次眼光看风景万物，多了一份包涵和宽容，看到的历史也就不是战争、王朝更迭之类的东西，而是千百年来凡夫俗子们的哀乐、努力和命运。它们代表了更为现实逼真的生存和价值。6.抒发的感情真诚感人，不写自己的品学兼优、勤奋用功，而是如实地展现自己的天生的野性，充满了阅读和学习“生活”这本大书所得到的欢欣鼓舞的生命体验，表现了对自然和生命无比好奇和热爱以及泰然面对一切残忍和苦难的生活观。7.学习了这篇传记让我们了解到了沈从文从小如何“读社会这本大书”，感受到他青春期的悲欢得失。由于传主生活经历的太多苦难，加上作者在回忆中不时融入淳厚的情感，让我们读来有某种沉重与辛酸，也让我们学生受到启发：对于强者，生活中的风霜雨雪也和阳光雨露一样，都从不同侧面或者以不同的方式滋润着我们的生命，现实中的曲折、坎坷、苦难可能拓展人的精神空间，让人能更加以阔大的心胸与坚强的意志，去感受生命，理解生活的意义。