2020年7月山东高考卷读后续写 邻里关爱教学课件.ppt

1、读后续写01内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯语言表达语言表达风格一致风格一致。03凡是凡是故事都应有故事都应有跌宕跌宕起起伏伏，其中人物会遇到困，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但难或问题，但最终能解最终能解决决。02故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘扬社会主义，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，是言归于好，和睦相处和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定犯错了，最后一定会改过

2、自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，是绳之以法，等等。等等。三大原则写作指导四个步骤四个步骤仔细阅读仔细阅读所给所给两段的首两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。思考大致框架。读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。思考再三，把修正润色后思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。的续写整洁地写入答卷。根据根据“所见所见/遇所想，遇所想，所为所感所为所感”等构思具体等构思具体细节。细节。+The Meredith family lived in a small community

3、.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.n.社区n.经济在衰退中v.奋斗，挣扎使收支相抵迎接挑战阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为成一篇完整的短文。续

4、写的词数应为150左右。左右。+Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.adj.体贴的+One morning she told her children about a family she had

5、 visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy his name was Bernard had interested her very much.+“I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his

6、 mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I dont see what he can do.”+After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money.”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”+“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist

7、them.”v.受苦v.帮助，协助+For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完成）.”+The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.“I tell you what we can do

8、,”said John.“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us？Well,we can make popcorn（爆米花）,and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”突然站起来n.解决办法全神贯注跳起来+Paragraph 1Paragraph 1：+When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.+Paragra

9、ph 2Paragraph 2：+With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.1读懂大意，读懂大意，理清脉络理清脉络 主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的特别要弄清故事的人物人物，时态时态(通常是一般通常是一般过去时过去时)，事件事件(故事的起因和经过故事的起因和经过)，语言语言特色特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持持不变不变)，等等。，等等。人物时态和事件人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变语言特色不要变1The econom

10、y was bad,people lost their jobs and they were trying to help each other.Mrs.Meredith,John,Harry,Clara,Bernard.the sick man and his wife.Mrs.Meredith was warm-hearted and helping people in need.Mrs.Meredith told her children about Bernard and his family.All the three children wanted to help Bernard

11、and John thought up the popcorn plan.Love among the neighbors.语言特色语言特色(language styles)(language styles)1.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.(语言特色是：语言特色

12、是：)When引导的时间状语从句语言特色语言特色(language styles)(language styles)1.After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money.”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.”For some mome

13、nts,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完成）（完成）.”(语言特色是：语言特色是：)对话 两段首句定一框两段首句定一框 由续写的第一段首句与第由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。首句与正能量结尾来确定。细读首句，细读首句，构思

14、框架构思框架Para.1When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.Para.2With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.构思框架由第由第1段首句段首句“Mrs.Meredith.thought it was a good one”及第及第2段首句段首句“With everything ready.Bernard”可知，本段应写可知，本段应写“爆米花计划爆米花计划”的准备过程并告知的准备过程并告知Bernard该计

15、划。该计划。01.两段首句定一框两段首句定一框。Paragraph 1Paragraph 1：注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。构思框架由续写的第二段首句由续写的第二段首句“Bernard started.Bernard started.”可知，可知，本段主要描述本段主要描述BernardBernard实施实施“爆米花计划爆米花计划”的过程以的过程以及邻居对此的反应及邻居对此的反应01.由正能量结尾，可知，最终爆米花都卖出去了，由正能量结尾，可知，最终爆米花都卖出去了，BernardBernard赚到钱补贴家用。赚到钱补贴家用。02.Paragraph Paragraph 2

16、 2：二框二首正能量二框二首正能量。构思框架how to make popcornhow to make popcorn01.when to tell the plan to Bernard and his when to tell the plan to Bernard and his parentsparents02.Paragraph Paragraph 1 1：根据以上分析，列出每段的根据以上分析，列出每段的3 3个问题个问题Bernard and his parents response to the Bernard and his parents response to the p

17、lanplan03.构思框架where to sell the popcornwhere to sell the popcorn01.peoples response to Bernardpeoples response to Bernard02.Paragraph Paragraph 2 2：根据以上分析，列出每段的根据以上分析，列出每段的3 3个问题个问题how Bernard feelshow Bernard feels03.3增加细节，增加细节，开始写作开始写作 在已定在已定框架框架范围内范围内，依据依据情节发展和生活常识，情节发展和生活常识，推断故事推断故事中人物所见、中人物所见、所

18、闻、所遇、所闻、所遇、所思、所思、所说、所说、所做等所做等给给每段增加每段增加5 5至至8 8个个具体细节具体细节，我们称之为叫，我们称之为叫“58“58细细节添加法节添加法”。3构思Paragraph 1Paragraph 1:When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.Paragraph 2:With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.所做网购机器，告知计划机器到货，学习使用所想感动不已，终能赚钱构思Paragr

19、aph 2Paragraph 1:When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.Paragraph 2:With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.日子虽苦，人心却暖挨家售卖，都帮一二所想邻里大爱，衷心感知 4修改润色，修改润色，整洁誊写整洁誊写 审读初稿，注意语义是审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润是否与前文一致

20、。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。答卷上。4Paragraph 1 When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.Then,Mrs.Meredith searched the Internet and ordered a household popcorn machine.After that,Mrs.Meredith,together with her three children,paid another visit to the family and told

21、 them about the popcorn plan.Needless to say,they were deeply moved,especially Bernard who finally found a way to make money for his family.A few days later,the machine was delivered to Mrs.Merediths doorstep.And it wasnt long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn.Paragraph 2

22、 With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.Although it was a hard time and things were tight for everybody,Bernards business worked out quite well.He carried the popcorn on his small bike,going from door to door to sell it.People were surprised to see such a little,poorly-dressed

23、 boy selling popcorn at their doors,but eventually almost all of them would buy a bag or two.It is love that makes the world go round and Bernard felt it deep in his little heart.每个人的日子都不好过THANKS1.1.史铁生虽然自身残疾史铁生虽然自身残疾,可是对生活的热爱却无时不流露于笔端。如果没有爱可是对生活的热爱却无时不流露于笔端。如果没有爱,他不会发现地坛的内在他不会发现地坛的内在;2.2.如果没有博爱如果没有

24、博爱,他就无法观察数年来地坛的变迁他就无法观察数年来地坛的变迁,以及每一位进出地坛的人的特点以及每一位进出地坛的人的特点,只有对生活充满热爱只有对生活充满热爱,情感升华到博爱的人情感升华到博爱的人,才能那么细致地观察一切才能那么细致地观察一切,精心地记载一切精心地记载一切,用美丽的文字描述一切用美丽的文字描述一切;3.3.只有心底有爱的人只有心底有爱的人,才能感悟出人生的意义才能感悟出人生的意义,从痛苦境地爬过从痛苦境地爬过,走向光明走向光明;只有心底有爱的人只有心底有爱的人,他才会如此懂得感恩他才会如此懂得感恩,知道忏悔知道忏悔,才能勇敢面对自己年轻时犯下的错才能勇敢面对自己年轻时犯下的错,

25、才能把一切写出来才能把一切写出来,让世人得到教育与启迪。让世人得到教育与启迪。4.4.人的一生会遇到很多事很多人人的一生会遇到很多事很多人,不可能事事称心不可能事事称心,处处如意处处如意,需要我们坚强需要我们坚强,需要我们都有一颗平常心需要我们都有一颗平常心,一种平和的心态一种平和的心态,学会面对学会面对,懂得感恩。懂得感恩。5.5.记得有句禅语道记得有句禅语道，当你抱怨自己的鞋不好时当你抱怨自己的鞋不好时,却发现有人竟没有脚。所以却发现有人竟没有脚。所以,不管你是谁不管你是谁,不管你在做什么不管你在做什么,都有存在的理由都有存在的理由,都要尽心尽力地去付出都要尽心尽力地去付出,这样才可以拥有

26、无怨无悔的快乐人生这样才可以拥有无怨无悔的快乐人生6.6.作者曾这样解释自己的名字-心血倾注过的地方不容丢弃,我常常觉得这是我的姓名的昭示,让历史铁一样地生着,以便不断地去看它,不是不断地去看这些文字,而是借助这些蹒跚的脚印不断看那一向都在写作着的灵魂,看这灵魂的可能与去向。这也可以看作是对他作品的最好的诠释。7.7.因为这个故事体现了中华民族的优良传统因为这个故事体现了中华民族的优良传统,是地坛成就了一位卓越的作家是地坛成就了一位卓越的作家,在他身上体现了我们这个民族的自强不息的精神在他身上体现了我们这个民族的自强不息的精神;也是地坛成就了一位伟大的中国母亲也是地坛成就了一位伟大的中国母亲,

27、她身上散发着母爱的光芒。她身上散发着母爱的光芒。8.8.不会讲述。史铁生的故事只是我们生活中的一个个例不会讲述。史铁生的故事只是我们生活中的一个个例,与地坛传统的文化风格不相符合与地坛传统的文化风格不相符合,参观地坛的人参观地坛的人,大多只是想了解中国丰厚的文化底蕴和历史知识大多只是想了解中国丰厚的文化底蕴和历史知识,讲史铁生的故事与地坛本身所代表的旅游文化出入太大。讲史铁生的故事与地坛本身所代表的旅游文化出入太大。9.9.会讲述会讲述,但不会讲得太多。毕竟史铁生的故事与地坛本身的文化、历史结合不太大但不会讲得太多。毕竟史铁生的故事与地坛本身的文化、历史结合不太大,只是借史铁生的故事提高一下地坛的知名度只是借史铁生的故事提高一下地坛的知名度,并借此表现自己知识的丰富并借此表现自己知识的丰富,以引起游客的兴趣以引起游客的兴趣,使自己的导游工作做得更好。使自己的导游工作做得更好。10.10.散文中的物象,就是倾注了作者的思想与主观情感的生动鲜明的形象,它是作者抒怀言志的凭借与依据,命题者常常从散文的物象入手设题,常见的提问方式有联系全文,指出某物象的含义和它在结构上的作用。