读后续写改卷心得Continuationwriting课件.ppt

1、新课程标准新课程标准提出了英语学科核心素养：语提出了英语学科核心素养：语言能力、思维品质、文化品格和学习能力。言能力、思维品质、文化品格和学习能力。读后续写：要求学生在理解一篇不完整文章的读后续写：要求学生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。设计，并用英语进行续写表达。语言能力：阅读和写作语言能力：阅读和写作思维品质：想象能力和创新精神思维品质：想象能力和创新精神读后续写高档次的给分范围和要求读后续写高档次的给分范围和要求

2、对第四档对第四档(16-20)作文的描述：作文的描述：1.与所给与所给短文短文融洽度较高融洽度较高，与所提供各与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理段落开头语衔接较为合理。2.内容内容比较丰富比较丰富，应用了，应用了5个以上个以上短文中标出的关键词语。短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达；不影响意义表达；4.比较有效地使用了语句间的比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。，使所续写短文结构紧凑。对第五档对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：作文的描述：1.与所给与所给短

3、文短文融洽度高融洽度高，与所提供各与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富内容丰富，应用了，应用了5个以上个以上短文中标出的关键词语。短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的有效地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。，使所续写短文结构紧凑。语言的功能语言的功能与目的与目的 逻辑逻辑 语言语言 作者是否能顺利地表达自己的意思作者是否能顺利地表达自己的意思 这个意义是否能顺利地被接受这个意义是否能顺利地被接受 情

4、节逻辑情节逻辑 融洽度融洽度（1）原文与后续的逻辑）原文与后续的逻辑（2）后续两段间的逻辑）后续两段间的逻辑（3）段落开头与后续语句间的逻辑）段落开头与后续语句间的逻辑（1）逻辑是否严密）逻辑是否严密（2）情节是否有旁支）情节是否有旁支（1）衔接）衔接（2）语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性）语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性（3）修辞）修辞(交际交际)readingplottingwriting内容内容语言语言主题主题细节细节衔接衔接内容内容逻辑逻辑语言语言readingcontent who when where what One weekend in July,Jane and Tom deci

5、ded to camp by a lake.After a quarrel with Tom,Jane walked away angrily.Having walked too far,Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was left in their car.With night falling,Jane had to stop for the night.Feeling tired,thirsty and hungry,she missed Tom and h

6、er family very much.To her great joy,the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream.As she walked along the stream,two helicopters flew overhead one after another.But the trees blocked out the sight.Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flagging her yellow bl

7、ouse on an open area.content what One weekend in July,Jane and Tom decided to camp by a lake.After a quarrel with Tom,Jane walked away angrily.Having walked too far,Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was left in their car.With night falling,Jane had to s

8、top for the night.Feeling tired,thirsty and hungry,she missed Tom and her family very much.To her great joy,the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream.As she walked along the stream,two helicopters flew overhead one after another.But the trees blocked out the sight

9、.Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flagging her yellow blouse on an open area.Para1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Para 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Jane lake helicopter walked away at a distanceTom stream her yellow blouse climbed to her great joyTop

10、ic:survivelanguage 1.Jane was so angry that she said to Tom 2.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.3.she turned around,hoping to see the lake.4.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest 5.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.6.If only she had not left her mobi

11、le phone in that bag with Tom.7.The farther she walked,the more confused she became.8.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.separatePara1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Para 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.the paragraph topicJane suffered physically and men

12、tally.darkdaybreak the paragraph topicJane survived.reunitedJane regretted what she had done.Jane realized how much they loved.plottingseparatePara1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Para 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.whowhenwherewhat/howJane nightin the forest how Jan

13、e felt what Jane did darkdaybreakwhowhen wherewhat/howJaneTomdayin the forest or other places how Jane survived how they feltreunited disappointed tiredwalk,find,climb,stop,sleepTom,helicopter,find,tell,love,hug happyJane was very disappointed,but she didnt give up.She still kept walking,and tried h

14、er best to find the lake.She climbed to a high place and fell asleep quickly.In the end,because she was so tired that she stopped screaming.She screamed for help when she walked on the road.1 12 23 34 45 5But Toms face floated in her mind before she closed her eyes.6 6writingJane was very disappoint

15、ed,but she didnt give up.1 1She still kept walking,and tried her best to find the lake.2 2She was screamed when her walked on the road.3 3In the end,because she was too tired that she stopped to scream.4 4She climbed a high place and fall sleep quickly.5 5But Toms face crowded in her mind before she

16、 closed her eyes.6 6Tip 1:Plots should be logically connected.It was daybreak when Jane woke up.To her surprised,she found Tom was alongside her!She asked Tom why she was in there.Tom said he called the police to help him and they drived the helicopter the found her laid in a high place.Jane was so

17、moved,then she told Tom how much she loved him,and promised she will never do it again.Tom was very happy and they never have some quarrels.But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Jane was very disappointed,but she didnt give up.She still kept walking,and tried her best to find th

18、e lake.She was screamed when her walked on the road.In the end,because she was too tired that she stopped to scream.She climbed a high place and fall asleep quickly.But Toms face crowded in her mind before she closed her eyes.13 能基本完成任务。能基本完成任务。与原文关系密切，故事情节基本可信，衔接较好。与原文关系密切，故事情节基本可信，衔接较好。语言有错误，且影响意义

19、传达。语言有错误，且影响意义传达。书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求对第五档对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：作文的描述：1.与所给与所给短文短文融洽度高融洽度高，与所提供各与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富内容丰富，应用了，应用了5个以上个以上短文中标出的关键词语。短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；但完全不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的有效地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使所续写短文结构，使所续写短文结构紧凑。紧凑。logi

20、cal reasonable creative powerfulcreative writing windrainfogwild animals treeslake streamwild fruits stones/rocksgrass leaves wooden housecavesuffer survive tirednessthirsthungerloneliness fearcold matches a knife her yellow blousecigarette lighter a small torch forest JaneTip 2:Your creativity come

21、s from your direct or indirect experience.suffering:windA strong wind blowing through the forest,the shadows of trees were just like the shapes of aggressive animals.Jane was so scared that she buried her head in her arms,not daring to see anything.suffering:rainWorse still,it began to rain.Jane was

22、 getting soaked,out there in the pouring rain.Helpless,dejected,and hungry,she threw herself down on the ground and sobbed.suffering:wild animalsA tiger was roaring at a distance.Jane was too scared to open her eyes,hoping it would disappear right away.languagewordsphrasessentences narration=exposit

23、ion+description Topic:a shocking knife attackAnne Slade,mother of three,had been stabbed repeatedly with a knife.She was lying in her front garden bleeding very heavily.Her hands had almost been cut off.1.Her feet was beginning to swell up after the whole days walk.2.Sweet memories flash across/thro

24、ugh her mind.Sweet memories flooded in her mind.3.A wave of regret and fear swept over her pale face.4.The unforgettable experience,Jane strongly believed,would never fail to remind her how much she loved Tom and her family.Tip 3:Use what we have learned flexibly.1.“Tom,where are you?”Jane _.shouted

25、 yelled screamed exclaimed2.Anxiety and despair grabbed her mind.3.Overwhelmed with anxiety and tiredness,Jane failed to decide where on earth to go.4.The branches waved in the breeze as if extending its encouragement and blessing to her.Tip 4:Accumulate advanced words.1.feel hungry2.feel tired3.fee

26、l scared4.feel hopelessan empty stomachintolerable physical exhaustionher aching feetthe whistling night windthe thick darknessher trembling lipsher watery eyes Her stomach was growling.She dragged her heavy feet,more slowly and painfully than she haddone.The terrifying sounds made her hair stand on

27、 end.As everything was dissolved by the darkness,deep hopelessness set in.Tip 5:Vivid descriptions can focus on“how”and“what”.哭：泪如泉涌，泪如雨下，梨花带雨，喜极而泣哭：泪如泉涌，泪如雨下，梨花带雨，喜极而泣1.with tears in her eyes2.with tears welling up in her eyes 3.with tears rolling/streaming down her face4.Tears of excitement and re

28、lief streamed down her face.5.When Jane called up the happy and fragrant time spent with Tom,tears clouded her eyes.Tip 5:Vivid descriptions can focus on“how”and“what”.1.Jane felt overwhelmingly scared.2.Jane was ultimately saved 3.Jane thought regretfully/rationally.4.Hungry and exhausted,Jane grad

29、ually fell asleep against a huge rock.5.Dropped into despair,Jane walked aimlessly along the stream.Tip 5:Vivid descriptions can focus on“how”and“what”.1.“It was all my fault.I shouldnt have quarreled with Tom.”2.If only Tom would be here with her now!How regretful she was to quarrel with Tom and wa

30、lk away!3.Never had she missed Tom so much.“If it were not for my stubborn behavior,I would have enjoyed the beauty of nature with Tom.”She thought regretfully.Tip 6:A vivid description of ones inner thoughts adds color to writing.4.She blamed herself thousands of times that she would not leave Tom

31、again.5.“Why am I always quarrelling over trifles?Why am I always ignoring his consideration?It was Tom who came up with the idea of camping just to please me.Also,it was Tom who prepared everything for the camp.”A feeling of infinite regret swept over her.他走了很久。他走了很久。1.She kept walking.2.She walked

32、 _.3.Jane had walked _ without pausing.and walked more than five hoursTip 7:Repetition and data,if used properly,are powerful.wander漫无目的地闲逛漫无目的地闲逛 stagger 蹒跚蹒跚 pace 踱步踱步 trudge 艰难地走艰难地走 limp 跛行跛行 drag 拖，拉拖，拉1.The injured man _ away like someone drunk.2.After four hours walk,the tired soldier _ the l

33、ast two miles to the town.3.He _ the room,lost in thought.4.The runner had sprained his ankle and was _ off the field.5.What fun it is to _ through a strange city.6.Feeling tired,she _ her aching feet towards a big tree and sat down.staggeredtrudgedpacedlimpingwanderdraggedTip 8:Accumulating words o

34、f a family is necessary.Depressed and hopeless,she wandered along the stream.“If only I hadnt quarreled with Tom.”At the thought of her impulsiveness,Jane fell into deep regret.She trudged forward,more slowly and painfully than she had done.There was a big stone in the way but she didnt notice it an

35、d tripped over.Her ankle was badly sprained.When Jane bent down to rub her aching ankle,a gust of wind came,blowing away her yellow blouse.Now the only hope was lost.She broke down and wept uncontrollably.Apart from her cry,the forest was silent.No helicopter,no Tom no difference.“Weeping makes no d

36、ifference.”she thought,wiping her tears away.Then she struggled to her feet and limped toward a big tree.Too tired,she leaned against the tree and fell asleep soon.Tip 9:A vivid description should be based on the topic,for example,suffering caused by walking.language 1.Jane was so angry that she sai

37、d to Tom 2.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.3.she turned around,hoping to see the lake.4.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest 5.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.6.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.7.The farther she wal

38、ked,the more confused she became.8.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.So tired was she that she could hardly move her aching feet.With tears welling up in her eyes,she wanted to say sorry to Tom for having lost her temper.She took off her yellow blouse and began shaking it wildly,hopin

39、g someone would see her.If only Tom would be here with me now!How regretful I was to quarrel with Tom and walk away!By no means would she walk away so impulsively.The further she walked,the more tired she felt.1.Hardly had she opened her eyes when she noticed herself covered by a thick coat.Tom was

40、sitting beside her,smiling to her.2.No sooner had she risen to her feet than she heard the sound of a helicopter at a distance.3.So tired was she that she could hardly move her heavy/aching feet.4.The further she walked,the more tired she felt.5.How much she missed Tom!6.Nothing could be better than

41、 a cup of hot coffee.7.She kept flagging the yellow blouse until the day became completely dark.8.What if I cant walk out of the forest?9.She was about to continue her walk along the stream when she heard slight calls of her name at a distance.10.By no means would she walk away so impulsively.Tip 10

42、:Imitate the original language and put the sentence patterns to use flexibly and naturally.Tip 11:A good beginning is half done.But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Anxiety and desire grabbed her mind.Astonishingly she found comfort in the tale of Robinson Crusoe who was strand

43、ed on an isolated island but managed to survive in the end.Jane began to think rationally.It was obvious that her bright yellow blouse would increase the chances of survival,so wrenching off a branch,she transformed it into a big flag and climbed up to a high platform.Drowsiness overwhelmed her and

44、she fell to the ground in a dead faint.威尔伯看着它钻进地道不见了，转威尔伯看着它钻进地道不见了，转眼就见它的尖鼻子从食槽底下伸出来。眼就见它的尖鼻子从食槽底下伸出来。坦普尔顿小心翼翼地爬过食槽的边进坦普尔顿小心翼翼地爬过食槽的边进了食槽。在这可怕的下雨天，眼睁睁了食槽。在这可怕的下雨天，眼睁睁地看着自己的早饭被别人吃掉，这简地看着自己的早饭被别人吃掉，这简直叫威尔伯无法容忍。就算它知道，直叫威尔伯无法容忍。就算它知道，瓢泼大雨中，坦普尔顿在那儿浑身湿瓢泼大雨中，坦普尔顿在那儿浑身湿透了，也不能让它心里好过些。没有透了，也不能让它心里好过些。没有朋友，情绪

45、低落，饿着肚子，它不由朋友，情绪低落，饿着肚子，它不由得扑倒在肥料上抽抽搭搭哭起来。得扑倒在肥料上抽抽搭搭哭起来。夏洛的网夏洛的网 Wilbur watched him disappear into his tunnel.In a moment he saw the rats sharp nose poke out from underneath the wooden trough.Cautiously Templeton pulled himself up over the edge of the trough.This was almost more than Wilbur could s

46、tand:on this dreary,rainy day to see his breakfast being eaten by somebody else.He knew Templeton was getting soaked,out there in the pouring rain,but even that didnt comfort him.Friendless,dejected,and hungry,he threw himself down in the manure and sobbed.“Charlottes Web”suffering:rainIt began to r

47、ain.Jane was getting soaked,out there in the pouring rain.Helpless,dejected,and hungry,she threw herself down on the ground and sobbed.He knew Templeton was getting soaked,out there in the pouring rain,but even that didnt comfort him.Friendless,dejected,and hungry,he threw himself down in the manure

48、 and sobbed.Tip 12:Accumulate and imitateJanes inner thoughtThis was almost more than Jane could stand:on this dreary,stormy day to see the matches being wetted by the rain.This was almost more than Wilbur could stand:on this dreary,rainy day to see his breakfast being eaten by somebody else.Tip 12:Accumulate and imitate