中考英语作文叙事记叙文专题复习指导课件.ppt

1、-记叙文(叙事篇)中考作文指导中考作文指导主要特点主要特点：记叙文记叙文用于记叙过去发生的事件或经历，以写人、叙事为主要记叙文用于记叙过去发生的事件或经历，以写人、叙事为主要内容。它可以包括历史，游记，报道，回忆，故事，琐事等。内容。它可以包括历史，游记，报道，回忆，故事，琐事等。这样的文章也要有中心。一般从第一或第三人称角度出发，表这样的文章也要有中心。一般从第一或第三人称角度出发，表达自己或他人的经历或感受，使读者对事情十分明了以获得强达自己或他人的经历或感受，使读者对事情十分明了以获得强烈感受。烈感受。记叙文通常以一般过去时为主，根据上下文用各种时态。记叙文通常以一般过去时为主，根据上下

2、文用各种时态。写好记叙文的基本要领写好记叙文的基本要领1.头绪分明，脉络清楚头绪分明，脉络清楚2.突出中心，详略得当突出中心，详略得当3.用活语言，准确生动用活语言，准确生动记叙文写作的注意事项记叙文写作的注意事项一、交代背景一、交代背景文章的开头应概括地介绍事件发生的文章的开头应概括地介绍事件发生的 时间、地点、人物以及事件等时间、地点、人物以及事件等二、详略得当二、详略得当过多不必要的细节会冲淡文章的主题。过多不必要的细节会冲淡文章的主题。因此，在细节的选择上应注意选择与主题密切相关因此，在细节的选择上应注意选择与主题密切相关 的内容，从而点明文章中心。的内容，从而点明文章中心。三、条理清

3、晰三、条理清晰记叙文一般按照时间顺序或空间顺序来描述，记叙文一般按照时间顺序或空间顺序来描述，要求层次清晰、条理清楚。要求层次清晰、条理清楚。中考英语写作评分标准中考英语写作评分标准 一档文（一档文（17-2017-20分）分）写出全部内容要点，层次清楚，写出全部内容要点，层次清楚，语言流畅，有句式变化，语言流畅，有句式变化，有复杂结构，至少有复杂结构，至少2-32-3个，个，基本无语法错误，只有基本无语法错误，只有1-21-2个，个，或有少量由于使用复杂结构或有少量由于使用复杂结构而引起的语法或拼写错误，而引起的语法或拼写错误，但不影响意义理解。但不影响意义理解。How can we wri

4、te a good composition(作文作文)?第一步：第一步：都要都要认真审题认真审题，明确写作，明确写作体裁体裁、要求要求和提示和提示要点要点How can we write a good composition?(Have a discussion!)具体做法：具体做法：用笔勾画用笔勾画 假如你是王林。你所在学校的假如你是王林。你所在学校的“爱心俱乐部爱心俱乐部(Helping Hands Club)”将吸收新会员。你想加入该俱乐部，请根据下将吸收新会员。你想加入该俱乐部，请根据下面表格和图片的内容，用英语写一封自荐信。面表格和图片的内容，用英语写一封自荐信。姓名姓名王林王林性别

5、性别男男本人特点本人特点身体健康；学习刻苦；乐于助人；与身体健康；学习刻苦；乐于助人；与同学友好相处同学友好相处“爱心爱心”表现表现（见图片）（见图片）加入目的加入目的 1.2.例例要求：要求：1.表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯；表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯；2.要点须包括表格和四幅图片中的信息，但要点须包括表格和四幅图片中的信息，但不得使用真实姓名和校名等；不得使用真实姓名和校名等；3.表格中表格中“加入目的加入目的”一栏内容由考生自拟；一栏内容由考生自拟；4.词数：词数：70左右。左右。第二步：第二步：列出写作提纲（列出写作提纲（Outline）。）。具体做法：具体做法：根据段落整理写作要点

6、根据段落整理写作要点不要遗漏要点！不要遗漏要点！Write an OutlineIntroduction Main bodyConclusionI want to join 本人特点本人特点“爱心爱心”表现表现加入目的加入目的 看表格看表格看表格看表格看图看图自拟自拟I hope you will agree with me.可以用英文或中文可以用英文或中文姓名姓名/性别性别易漏掉的要易漏掉的要点！点！自荐信自荐信What will you write？王林王林Who are you in this letter?人称人称:IWhats your purpose?加入该俱乐部加入该俱乐部时态：

7、时态：一般现在时为主一般现在时为主Thinking:Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to join the Helping Hands Club.I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates.If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.And I can also do more for oth

8、ers.扣分原因一扣分原因一词数不够！词数不够！Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to join the Helping Hands Club.I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates.If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.And I can also do more for other

9、s.Introduction本人特点本人特点加入目的加入目的扣分原因二扣分原因二遗漏要点！遗漏要点！Write an OutlineIntroduction Main bodyConclusionI am a boy Id like to join 本人特点本人特点“爱心爱心”表现表现加入目的加入目的I hope you will agree with me.无法拿满分！无法拿满分！Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club.I

10、am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others.I get on well with my classmates If I join the club,I will be able to make more friends.Besides,I can do more for others.Yours Wang Lin少了少了两个两个重要部分，扣重要部分，扣5-6分，只得分，只得11-12分！分！缺少缺少“爱心爱心”表现表现也缺少也缺少Conclusion“爱心爱心”表现表现(examples)Picture 1 helpwi

11、thhelp classmates with lessons我的我的I often help classmates with lessons.看图看图Picture 2helpcross“爱心爱心”表现表现(examples)看图看图 help old people cross the road I help old people cross the road on my way home.Picture 3“爱心爱心”表现表现(examples)看图看图give my seat to give my seat to people in need I often give my seat to

12、 people in need on a bus.“爱心爱心”表现表现(examples)看图看图Picture 4clean up the park help clean up the park I often help clean up the park.“爱心爱心”表现表现(examples)1.I often help classmates with lessons.2.I help old people cross the road on my way home.3.I often give my seat to people in need on a bus.4.I often h

13、elp clean up the park.ConclusionIll be glad if I can join the club.I hope you will agree with me.Dear Chairperson,I am a boy student from Class1 Grade 9.Id like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club.I am healthy.I work hard at my lessons.I like helping others I get on well with my classmates.If I

14、 join the club,I will be able to make more friends.Besides,I can do more for others.Yours Wang LinIll be glad if I can join the club.I hope you will agree with me.and often help classmates with their lessons.On my way home,I often help old people cross the road.On a bus,I always give my seat to peop

15、le in need.Sometimes,I help to clean up the park.不但要点完整了，词数也够了。不但要点完整了，词数也够了。写作：写作：第一步就是要第一步就是要认真审题认真审题，明确写作，明确写作体裁体裁、要求要求和和提示提示要点要点第二步就是要第二步就是要列出写作提纲列出写作提纲，根据，根据段落整理段落整理写写作作要点要点。写作前：写作前：确定确定人称、时态人称、时态写作后：写作后：？作文中作文中应避免应避免的几种常见的几种常见语言错误语言错误：1.时态错误（扣分多，一个时态错误扣分在时态错误（扣分多，一个时态错误扣分在1分左分左右）。右）。2.中国式的英语（不

16、正确的英文表达会让中国式的英语（不正确的英文表达会让整句不整句不得分得分）。）。3.单词拼写错误及大小写（单词拼写一定单词拼写错误及大小写（单词拼写一定要过关要过关）。）。4.介词介词,代词，非谓语动词或形容词副词的不正确代词，非谓语动词或形容词副词的不正确使用（对单词的使用（对单词的词性词性要要熟悉熟悉）。）。5.名词单复数（名词单复数（细心细心就可以避免的错）。就可以避免的错）。写作：写作：第一步就是要第一步就是要认真审题认真审题，明确写作，明确写作体裁体裁、要求要求和和提示提示要点要点第二步就是要第二步就是要列出写作提纲列出写作提纲，根据，根据段落整理段落整理写写作作要点要点。写作前：写

17、作前：确定确定人称、时态人称、时态写作后：写作后：检查检查另外另外作文中书写不规范，卷面不整洁也作文中书写不规范，卷面不整洁也是要失分的（中考中有是要失分的（中考中有0.5-1分的卷面整分的卷面整洁分洁分，不能丢！不能丢！）。）。方法一方法一:善用词汇善用词汇 甚至善用甚至善用高级词汇高级词汇Which is better?A They listened to the music on the beach.B They enjoyed the music on the beach.Which is better?我希望你能帮助我。我希望你能帮助我。A I wish you can help m

18、e.B Im looking forward to your help.Which is better?他们很早就到了。他们很早就到了。A They arrived early.B They arrived as early as they could.Which is better?最后，他的狗得救了，他感到很惊讶。最后，他的狗得救了，他感到很惊讶。A His dog was saved at last.He was very surprised.B To his surprise,his dog was saved at last.A I think learning English is

19、 interesting.B I find it really fun to learn English.A We should protect the environment.B Its our duty to protect the environment.方法二方法二:活用多种句型活用多种句型方法三方法三:妙用关联词妙用关联词1.表示并列或递进表示并列或递进:and,as well as,bothand,whats more not onlybut also,neithernor2.表示选择表示选择:or,eitheror3.表示转折表示转折:but,however,althoughth

20、ough,after all,anyway4.表示因果表示因果:because,so,therefore,since,for,as a result5.表示条件表示条件:if,unless6.表示对比表示对比:instead,notbut,while,in the same way,on the one handon the other hand7.表示解释表示解释:for example,for instance,such as,that is to say,in other words,to tell the truth8.表示顺序表示顺序:to begin with,firstly,fi

21、rst(of all),second(ly),next,later,since then,from then on,finally,in the end9.表示强调表示强调:also,besides,especially,actually,in fact10.表示结论表示结论:all in all,altogether,in a word,generally speaking,in short_ I am tired,I keep on working till midnight.He didnt go to movies,he went to the concert _.We like do

22、ing kinds of sports _ swimming,running and hiking._,he stood up.Then he got out._,he went back._,he smiled.ThoughAlthoughinsteadlikeFirstNextFinallyAt lastHow do people spend their vacation?We made a survey and here is our report.According to it,a lot of people travel.And some people stay at home.Th

23、ey watch TV or surf the Internet.Also some other people visit friends or parents.However,a few people work.Come and enjoy your vacation.People who relax well work well.连连(connect)According to it,most people choose to travel to get away from the busy world during the holidays.Then some people like to

24、 stay at home,watching TV or surfing the Internet to have a good rest.However,a few people have to work.As the saying goes,“All work and no play makesJack a dull boy.”Come and enjoy your vacation.Peoplewho relax well work well.美美(beautify)And to visit friends or parents also makes them relaxed.Prove

25、rb（谚语）（谚语）/saying方法四方法四:妙用引文和例子妙用引文和例子（多用于（多用于“the bodythe body”）青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.For example,we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags,stop using napkins,plant more trees and save water and

26、energy.加例子加例子加例子加例子在家里，我经常帮助父母亲干家务活。在家里，我经常帮助父母亲干家务活。I often help my parents do housework,such as washing dishes,folding the clothes,taking out the trash and so on.LetLets practice!s practice!例：请以例：请以“”为题，根据提示写一次愉快的参观为题，根据提示写一次愉快的参观 Today we visited a farm.Early in the morning we met Today we visite

27、d a farm.Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.The farm at the school gate and went there together.The farm workers gave us a warm welcome.Then the head of the farm workers gave us a warm welcome.Then the head of the farm showed us aroundshowed us around.How glad we

28、were to.How glad we were to seesee the crops and the crops and vegetables vegetables growinggrowing well well！At noon we had a picnic lunch in At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine.After a short rest,we the sunshine.After a short rest,we had great funhad great fun singing singing and dancing

29、,telling jokes or stories.Two of us even and dancing,telling jokes or stories.Two of us even played a game of chess.We played a game of chess.We enjoyed ourselvesenjoyed ourselves.The time.The time passed quickly.Before we knew it,we had to say good-bye passed quickly.Before we knew it,we had to say

30、 good-bye to the workers.to the workers.范文范文A Visit to a Farm例 A traffic accident首段：首段：首段概括交代事件发生的时间、地点、人物等信息首段概括交代事件发生的时间、地点、人物等信息 A week ago,I witnessed a traffic accident in a rainy day on my way to school,which still sticks in my mind.例 A traffic accident中心段：中心段：交待细节，注重在交待细节，注重在how;how;交待细节时应注意的

31、事项？交待细节时应注意的事项？过多不必要的细节会冲淡文章的主题。例 A traffic accident中心段赏析 It was about 7:00 on Friday morning,(Oct.31st).（补充说明时间补充说明时间）I was walking through the pedestrian overpass near my school when I was shocked by the screech of a car.（事情的起因事情的起因）I saw a man knocked down by a black car.Soon many cars were jamme

32、d there.I got there and found that beside a black BenzBenz lay a middle-agedmiddle-aged man in a pool of blood.（交代一些细节交代一些细节）The street turned chaotic.（事情的大致经过事情的大致经过）After a moment,the police and an ambulance arrived.The victim was instantly sent to the hospital.（事情的结果事情的结果）注意空间的移动：注意空间的移动：I got th

33、ere例 A traffic accident结尾段赏析 结尾段：结尾段：可可适当适当发表一点议论发表一点议论In my opinion,the pedestrian should have taken the In my opinion,the pedestrian should have taken the overpass when crossing the street.Besides,the driver overpass when crossing the street.Besides,the driver might have driven too fast,regardless

34、 of such bad might have driven too fast,regardless of such bad weather.Anyway,I believe accidents may be avoided if we weather.Anyway,I believe accidents may be avoided if we become aware of the importance of safety.become aware of the importance of safety.（结尾）（结尾）一档作文鉴赏一档作文鉴赏Last year,a terrible fl

35、u spread across the whole school.Last year,a terrible flu spread across the whole school.One ofOne ofmy classmate,John/Jane Doe,became a victim of it.my classmate,John/Jane Doe,became a victim of it.He/She ran a high fever,and ordinary medicine didnt work onHe/She ran a high fever,and ordinary medic

36、ine didnt work onhim.him.The news quickly reached everybody in our class.SomeThe news quickly reached everybody in our class.Someclassmates recorded the English lessons for him so that classmates recorded the English lessons for him so that he/she could keep up with his/her studies.Our English teach

37、er he/she could keep up with his/her studies.Our English teacher called on him/her at the weekends sometimes.With care and called on him/her at the weekends sometimes.With care and help,he/she was soon able to be up and about and finally help,he/she was soon able to be up and about and finally came

38、back to the class.came back to the class.From this event,I learn two things.One is that with love,noFrom this event,I learn two things.One is that with love,noillness or difficulty is terrible.The other is that love and help illness or difficulty is terrible.The other is that love and help are two-w

39、ay streets.Our classmates offered John/Jane Doe are two-way streets.Our classmates offered John/Jane Doe kind help partly because he/she himself/herself had always kind help partly because he/she himself/herself had always been a helpful person.So I realize that when we help others,been a helpful pe

40、rson.So I realize that when we help others,we are helping ourselves.we are helping ourselves.In the summer sports meeting last year,one of my In the summer sports meeting last year,one of my classmates,John/Jane Doe,suddenly fell to the ground and classmates,John/Jane Doe,suddenly fell to the ground

41、 and hurt her left foot when he/she was practicing high jump.hurt her left foot when he/she was practicing high jump.His/Her face turned pale and showed great pain.His/Her face turned pale and showed great pain.Seeing this,our classmates immediately came to her aid.Seeing this,our classmates immedia

42、tely came to her aid.They struggled to take her to the temporary emergency room.They struggled to take her to the temporary emergency room.One boy untied his/her shoe and applied ice rocks to his/her One boy untied his/her shoe and applied ice rocks to his/her wound.Meanwhile,girls comforted her in

43、a soft voice.Soon wound.Meanwhile,girls comforted her in a soft voice.Soon the P.E.teacher came.He checked his/her sound and took the P.E.teacher came.He checked his/her sound and took some emergency measures to lessen her pain.Fifteen minutes some emergency measures to lessen her pain.Fifteen minut

44、es later,the ambulance arrived and she was sent to hospital.later,the ambulance arrived and she was sent to hospital.Luckily enough,with our care and concern,John/Jane Doe Luckily enough,with our care and concern,John/Jane Doe recovered quickly.recovered quickly.Such an incident impressed everyone p

45、resent.I realizeSuch an incident impressed everyone present.I realizethat love and care are the best medicine for an injured personthat love and care are the best medicine for an injured person Last Friday,my classmate John was absent because he Last Friday,my classmate John was absent because he su

46、ddenly caught a heavy flu and ran a high fever.suddenly caught a heavy flu and ran a high fever.（时间、人（时间、人物、事件交代清晰）物、事件交代清晰）After school,we three volunteer students,together with After school,we three volunteer students,together with our class teacher went to see him.John stayed in bed and had our c

47、lass teacher went to see him.John stayed in bed and had a running nose.He told us that he was anxious about his a running nose.He told us that he was anxious about his studies.On hearing that,we promised him we would try our studies.On hearing that,we promised him we would try our best to help.There

48、fore,in the following days,we arranged best to help.Therefore,in the following days,we arranged ourselves to teach him every day in turn,hoping to ensure that ourselves to teach him every day in turn,hoping to ensure that he would catch up with us when he came back to school.he would catch up with u

49、s when he came back to school.（条理（条理清楚，因果关系合乎逻辑，细节描写恰到好处）清楚，因果关系合乎逻辑，细节描写恰到好处）In my opinion,no one is born to live alone.We should love,In my opinion,no one is born to live alone.We should love,care and help each other.Moreover,friendship can help defeat care and help each other.Moreover,friendship

50、can help defeat difficulties more easily.difficulties more easily.As old saying goes,“A friend in need is a friend indeed.”It was As old saying goes,“A friend in need is a friend indeed.”It was such a group of true friends who melted my heart gently and deeply such a group of true friends who melted