概要写作-Stress高考英语作文新题型-课件.pptx

1、 概要写作文本内容与结构解读写作思路解读写作思路微技能之次要信息的提炼策略表达微技能之句子花样表达篇牛刀小试参考范文欣赏体裁：主题：结构：1.文本内容与结构解读体裁：说明文主题：The stress and its impact结构：Para 1Para 1Para 3Para 3Para 2Para 2Para 4Para 4Para 5Para 51.文本内容与结构解读阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。“Stop the world,I want to get off!”This popular expression refers to a feeling of pani

2、c,or stress,which makes people want to stop whatever they are doing,try to relax,and become calm again.Stress is one of the most common causes of health problems in modern life.Too much stress results in physical,emotional and mental health problems.There are numerous physical effects of stress.Stre

3、ss can affect the heart.It can increase the pulse rate,make the heart miss beats,and can cause high blood pressure.Stress can affect the respiratory(呼吸的)system.It can lead to asthma(哮喘,气喘)and cause a person to breathe too fast,resulting in a loss of important carbon dioxide.Stress can affect the sto

4、mach.It can cause stomachaches and problems of digesting food.These are only a few examples of the wide range of illnesses and symptoms resulting from stress.Emotions are also easily affected by stress.People suffering from stress often feel anxious.They may have panic attacks and feel tired all the

5、 time.When people are under stress,they often overreact to little problems.For example,a normally gentle parent under a lot of stress at work may yell at a child for dropping a glass of juice.Stress can make people angry,moody or anxious.Long-term stress can lead to a variety of serious mental illne

6、sses.Depression,an extreme feeling of sadness and hopelessness,can be the result of continued and increasing stress.Alcoholism and other addictions often develop as a result of overuse of alcohol or drugs to try to relieve stress.If stress is allowed to continue,then ones mental health is put at ris

7、k.It is obvious that stress is a serious problem.It attacks the body.It affects the emotions.Untreated,it may eventually result in mental illness.Stress has a great influence on our health,our feelings and our minds.So,reduce stress:stop the world and rest for a while.Physical impact Physical impact

8、 phenomenonphenomenon Suggestions Suggestions Emotional impact Emotional impact Mental impact Mental impact 写作思路解读Para.1:“Stop the world,I want to get off!”This popular expression refers to a feeling of panic,or stress,which makes people want to stop whatever they are doing,try to relax,and become c

9、alm again.Stress is one of the most common causes of health problems in modern life.Too much stress results in physical,emotional and mental health problems.压力是现代生活中健康问题最常见的原因之一。太多的压力会导致身体、情绪和心理健康问题。（要点1）写作思路解读Para.2:There are numerous physical effects of stress.Stress can affect the heart.It can in

10、crease the pulse rate,make the heart miss beats,and can cause high blood pressure.Stress can affect the respiratory(呼吸的)system.It can lead to asthma(哮喘,气喘)and cause a person to breathe too fast,resulting in a loss of important carbon dioxide.Stress can affect the stomach.It can cause stomachaches an

11、d problems of digesting food.These are only a few examples of the wide range of illnesses and symptoms resulting from stress.压力有许多身体上的影响：压力会影响心脏，呼吸系统，会影响胃。（要点2）写作思路解读Para.3:Emotions are also easily affected by stress.People suffering from stress often feel anxious.They may have panic attacks and fee

12、l tired all the time.When people are under stress,they often overreact to little problems.For example,a normally gentle parent under a lot of stress at work may yell at a child for dropping a glass of juice.Stress can make people angry,moody or anxious.情绪也很容易受到压力的影响。压力会使人生气、情绪化或焦虑不安。（要点3）写作思路解读Para.

13、4:Long-term stress can lead to a variety of serious mental illnesses.Depression,an extreme feeling of sadness and hopelessness,can be the result of continued and increasing stress.Alcoholism and other addictions often develop as a result of overuse of alcohol or drugs to try to relieve stress.If str

14、ess is allowed to continue,then ones mental health is put at risk.情绪也很容易受到压力的影响。压力会使人生气、情绪化或焦虑不安。（要点3）写作思路解读Para.5:It is obvious that stress is a serious problem.It attacks the body.It affects the emotions.Untreated,it may eventually result in mental illness.Stress has a great influence on our healt

15、h,our feelings and our minds.So,reduce stress:stop the world and rest for a while.压力对我们的健康、情绪和思想都有很大的影响。所以，减少压力：停下来，休息一会儿。（要点5）写作思路解读然后，我们可以将这些要点串起来，连成一篇涵盖所有要点的概要写作：Stress,one of the most common causes of health problems,does harm to us physically and emotionally as well as mentally.Too much stress

16、is harmful to many physical organs,ranging from the heart to the stomach.Stress affects people emotionally,making us moody and nervous and even sensitive to small things.Continual stress may contribute to severe mental diseases,like depression.Since stress does harm to us,we should stop to have a re

17、st to relieve stress.点评：该概要完全覆盖了文章的全部要点，但是仔细阅读后我们会发现文章有句式表达单一，衔接不流畅等缺点。因此，在表达微技能中，我们将聚焦如何利用词性转换、短语和各种句式结构提高表达的水平，如何花样表达同一个意思。3.表达微技能之句子花样表达然后，我们可以将这些要点串起来，连成一篇涵盖所有要点的概要写作：Stress,one of the most common causes of health problems,does harm to us physically and emotionally as well as mentally.Too much s

18、tress is harmful to many physical organs,ranging from the heart to the stomach.Stress affects people emotionally,making us moody and nervous and even sensitive to small things.Continual stress may contribute to severe mental diseases,like depression.Since stress does harm to us,we should stop to hav

19、e a rest to relieve stress.点评：该概要完全覆盖了文章的全部要点，但是仔细阅读后我们会发现文章有句式表达单一，衔接不流畅等缺点。因此，在表达微技能中，我们将聚焦如何利用词性转换、短语和各种句式结构提高表达的水平，如何花样表达同一个意思。3.表达微技能之句子花样表达本章节将以此文本为例聚焦“句子花样表达”在概要写作中的运用。1.Stress is one of the most common causes of health problems in modern life.Too much stress results in physical,emotional and

20、 mental health problems.（要点1）同义替换：同义替换：results in=contributes to/leads to/gives rise to/causes/brings about/is to blame for 这样，综合整段信息，我们可以将文章主题句信息转换成以下的句子信息：Excessive/Overwhelming stress may give rise to health problems还可以改变句子的主语变成:Many health problems are mainly due to too much stress.3.表达微技能之句子花样表

21、达2.There are numerous physical effects of stress.Stress can affect the heart.Stress can affect the respiratory(呼吸的)system.Stress can affect the stomach.（要点2）同义替换：同义替换：affect=have a bad/negative effect on,put.at risk,ruin,destroy,impact,be harmful/detrimental to 这样，综合整段信息，我们可以将二段主题句信息转换成以下的句子信息：Stres

22、s affects ones physical health by impacting the heart,disturbing the respiratory system and harming the stomach.归纳多种信息还可以使用like,including,such as,range from.to Too much stress is harmful tois harmful to many physical organs,ranging from the heart to the stomach.3.表达微技能之句子花样表达3.Emotions are also easi

23、ly affected by stress.Stress can make people angry,moody or anxious.（要点3）改变词性：改变词性：emotions变成emotionallyemotionally，或者用angry,anxious的名词形式;改变语态改变语态(被动语态变主动语态被动语态变主动语态)这样，综合整段信息，我们可以将三段主题句信息转换成以下的句子信息 Stress affects people emotionally,making us moody and nervous and even sensitive to small things/irri

24、table.Stress brings about negative feelings,such as anger,anxiety and tiresomeness.3.表达微技能之句子花样表达4.Long-term stress can lead to a variety of serious mental illnesses.If stress is allowed to continue,then ones mental health is put at risk.（要点4）结合两个句子我们可以采用常见的定语从句和非谓语结构。这样，综合整段信息，我们可以将四段主题句信息转换成以下的句子信

25、息 Continual stress may contribute to depression and certain addictions,which threaten ones mental health.Lasting stress may give rise to depression and certain addictions,thus threatening ones mental health.3.表达微技能之句子花样表达5.Stress has a great influence on our health,our feelings and our minds.So,redu

26、ce stress:stop the world and rest for a while.（要点5）我们可以采用一些特殊的句式结构如强调句和倒装来我们可以采用一些特殊的句式结构如强调句和倒装来作为建议和呼吁的结尾。作为建议和呼吁的结尾。这样，综合整段信息，我们可以将五段主题句信息转换成以下的句子信息 Only by reducing stress can we keep ourselves physically,emotionally and mentally healthy Its necessary for us to take a rest to lessen it so that w

27、e can live a healthy life.一、将两个句子合并成一个句子。1.In our daily life,almost everyone has experienced procrastination.It has a greatly negative influence on our wealth and health.In our daily life,almost everyone has experienced procrastination,_ In our daily life,almost everyone has experienced procrastinat

28、ion,_.5.牛刀小试which has a great influence on our wealth and healthcausing great influence on our wealth and health5.牛刀小试2.Emotions are also easily affected by stress.Stress can make people angry,moody or anxious.Emotions are also easily affected by stress,_.Emotions are also easily affected by stress,

29、_.which can make people angry,moody or anxiousmaking people angry,moody or anxious.3.Stress is one of the most common causes of health problems in modern life.Too much stress results in physical,emotional and mental health problems.Stress,_,does harm to us physically and emotionally as well as menta

30、lly.Stress,one of the most common causes of health problems in modern life,does harm to us _.5.牛刀小试which is one of the most common causes of health problemsphysically,emotionally and mentally2.Most people consider dandelions annoying weeds but they are wrong.Dandelions _ annoying weeds,but they are

31、actually very useful.Dandelions,_,actually are very useful.二、改变主语1.Stress is one of the most common causes of physical,emotional and mental health problems.Many health problems _/_/_ too much stress.Many health problems are mainly _too much stress.People under too much stress _ many health problems.

32、5.牛刀小试result fromdue to/because of/owing toarise from/out ofare caused bysuffer fromare considered aswhich used to be described as annoying weeds四、改变词性1.Stress is one of the most common causes of physical,emotional and mental health problems.Stress,one of the most common causes of h e a l t h p r o

33、b l e m s,d o e s h a r m t o u s _.2.Traffic jams will affect the effectiveness of work.People work less _as a result of traffic jams.三、语态变化Emotions are also easily affected by stress and stress can make people angry,moody or anxious.Stress also _,makingmaking people angry,moody or anxious.5.牛刀小试af

34、fects emotionsphysically and emotionally as well as mentallyeffectively五、特殊句式We should reduce stress to keep ourselves physically,emotionally and mentally healthy._.(It is.that)_.(Only by doing)5.牛刀小试It is high time we reduced stress to keep ourselves physically,emotionally and mentally healthyOnly

35、by reducing stress can we reduce stress to keep ourselves physically,emotionally and mentally healthy.参考范文欣赏1Nowadays,stress is a major contributing factor in the occurrence of many health problems.First of First of allall,too much stress is harmful to many physical organs,ranging from the heart to

36、the stomach.EmotionallyEmotionally,people suffering from stress may feel anxious and cant control their temper.WhatsWhats worseworse,lasting stress can account for various mental illnesses like depression as well.ThereforeTherefore,onlyonly byby reducingreducing stress can we keep ourselves physical

37、ly,emotionally and mentally healthy.(74 w)参考范文欣赏2Stress is one of the most common causes of modern peoples physical,emotional,and mental health problems.InitiallyInitially,many physical organs like heart,respiratory system and stomach can not function well due to numerous stress.BesidesBesides,too m

38、uch stress can cause emotional problems like angry,moody or anxious.FinallyFinally,long-term untreated stress also contributes to various mental illnesses and addicted behaviors.ConsequentlyConsequently,it is high time to reduce stress to keep us physically,emotionally and mentally healthy.(77 w)1.第

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