打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型3课件.pptx

1、Mothers giftInterpretation of the Text 文本解读A storyhowwherewhenwhywhowhat“I”MotherInterpretation of the TextwhoInterpretation of the Text1.1.One lunchtime when I was in the third grade.(para 2)在作者介绍完日常母女在作者介绍完日常母女之间的亲密关系之间的亲密关系尽尽管学校很近，每天放学管学校很近，每天放学我会第一时间回家，而我会第一时间回家，而母亲也会等在家门口。母亲也会等在家门口。这篇文章就出现在作这篇文

2、章就出现在作者三年级某天我回家的者三年级某天我回家的时间点。之后进入整个时间点。之后进入整个故事主要情节的发展。故事主要情节的发展。2.2.when I went home for lunch that day.(para 3)whenInterpretation of the Texthow情节线我扮演主角“公主”我被换角成“旁白”母亲觉察我的“失落”在花园中，给我类比两种花母亲言语对我的启迪情感线我依赖母亲我信任母亲我感激母亲我更爱母亲Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）1.Int

3、erpretation of given information首句解读：Para.1“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said,Given Information1.I had been picked to be the princess in the school play,and for weeks my mother had rehearsed my lines so hard with me.(Para 2)2.She explained that she had written a narrators part to the pl

4、ay,and asked me to change roles.(Para 2)Interpretation of underlined words and given informationNew Information What else did authors mother say to her?What did mother do to comfort her?What thing did mother give to her?What did the author herself think after moms words?1.Interpretation of given inf

5、ormation首句解读：Para.1“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said,Interpretation of underlined words and given information 1.Interpretation of given information首句解读：Para.2 After the play,I took home the flower.My mother looked at me seriously.“Yes,every flower gives pleasure in its own way,doesnt i

6、t?”She asked thoughtfully.(para.6)Given InformationInterpretation of underlined words and given informationNew Information What did the writer do with the flower?Where did the author put this dandelion?What did mother say and do to the writer?What life lesson did the author learn from this experienc

7、e?1.Interpretation of given information 首句解读：Para.2 After the play,I took home the flower.2.Interpretation of underlined words下划线词解读：I，mother，kindly，sense，lovely，bend down，dandelions，beautiful，flower，smileCharacterObjectsBehaviorDescriptionI;motherdandelions;flowerInterpretation of underlined words

8、and given informationsense;bend down;smilekindly;lovely;beautiful;“I”MotherEncourage and comfort metook home the dandelion,recall our precious lunchtimes being togetherclinging to each otherInterpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：动作、语言描写：安慰的肢体动作和语言篇Para.2:Her

9、 word,kindly expressed,still hurt,especially when I saw my part go to another girl.安慰，指的是安顿抚慰，用欢娱、希望、保证以及同情心减轻、安抚或鼓励。在该动作神态描写中，可以侧重手掌的动作，手臂的动作，手指的动作；也可以侧重眼神的信息传递；也可以在言语上进行安抚或者鼓励等等。I.词、词块和句的积累词、词块和句的积累1.动词 pat:to touch sb./sth.gently several times with your hand flat,especially as a sign of affection

10、)stroke:1)to move your hand gently and slowly over a surface,sbs hair,etc;2)to move something somewhere with a gentle movement 2.短语 pat sb.on the shoulder;hold/hugged sb.in ones arms;throw ones arms around sb tightly without hesitation look sb.gently in the eye cast comforting glance at sbThe Micro-

11、skills Training in writing在原文中，侧重安慰的肢体动作跟语言信息不多，只有“Yes,every flower gives pleasure in its own way,doesnt it?”She asked thoughtfully.“Not everyone can be a princess,but there is no shame in that.”She listened and smiled reassuringly.两句话和几个动词与副词的组合用法体现出母亲对我的安慰，因此，在这一部分，侧重提供补充信息，丰富“安慰”这一动作的描写。II.词块和句子的

12、积累在安慰、鼓励型直接引语中，可以积累一些名言谚语，增加安慰行为的力度。在安慰、鼓励型直接引语中，可以积累一些名言谚语，增加安慰行为的力度。例如：1.Dont aim for success if you want it;just do what you love and believe in,and it will come naturally.如果你想要成功，不要去追求成功；尽管做你自己热爱的事情并且相信它，成功自然到来。2.Let bygones be bygones.过去的就让它过去吧。3.Life is not all roses.人生并不是康庄大道。4.All things com

13、e to those who wait.苍天不负有心人5.We must accept finite disappointment,but we must never lose infinite hope.Martin Luther King 我们必须接受失望，因为它是有限的，但千万不可失去希望，因为它是无穷的。马丁 路德 金。6.I am a slow walker,but I never walk backwards.Abraham Lincoln 我走得很慢，但是我从来不会后退。亚伯拉罕.林肯II.词块和句子的积累7.Cease to struggle and you cease to

14、live.-Thomas Carlyle生命不止，奋斗不息。8.Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.心之所愿，无所不成。9.Constant dropping wears the stone.滴水穿石。10.Better to light one candle than to curse the darkness.与其诅咒黑暗，不如燃起蜡烛。11.Please enjoy the pain which is unable to avoid.请享受无法避免的痛苦。12.Dare and the world always yield.If it be

15、ats you sometimes,dare it again and again and it will succumb.大胆挑战，世界总会让步。如果有时候你被它打败了，不断地挑战，它总会屈服的。3.起先，我十分紧张，但是正是在那个时候，我摸到了口袋中的一朵蒲公英。起先，我十分紧张，但是正是在那个时候，我摸到了口袋中的一朵蒲公英。At first I was still nervous,but _ I found a dandelion in my pocket.(运用强调句运用强调句)2.因为她的鼓励，我逐渐冷静下来，也接受了旁白也是一种重要的角色。因为她的鼓励，我逐渐冷静下来，也接受了旁

16、白也是一种重要的角色。Thanks to her encouragement,_,I began to accept narrator part is _.(运用定语从句，运用定语从句，be+of+n.表表示形容词示形容词)Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换 My mom,_,encourages me always.(运用非谓语动词运用非谓语动词)My _ mom,wearing a _ smile on her _ face,encourages me always from the early age.it was at that very m

17、oment thatwhich calmed me down graduallywearing a smile on her facebelovedshiningscarletof great value6.我妈妈我妈妈仔细端详着仔细端详着这多蒲公英，这多蒲公英，轻轻轻轻把它压进词典里，然后跟往常一样把它压进词典里，然后跟往常一样开心地开心地笑笑。(添加副词，替换高级动词添加副词，替换高级动词)Mom _ the dandelion,_ pressed it into the dictionary and _ as she did.4.我知道妈妈把它给我，是让它代替她陪伴我。我知道妈妈把它给我

18、，是让它代替她陪伴我。I knew my mom passed the flower to me,_.(运用定语从句运用定语从句)which means to be in company with me5.我妈妈看着这多蒲公英，把它压进词典里，然后跟往常一样笑开。我妈妈看着这多蒲公英，把它压进词典里，然后跟往常一样笑开。Mom _ the dandelion,_ it into the dictionary and _ as she did.watched/gazed atcarefully gazed atpressedlaughedgentlygrinned happilyPossible

19、 version 1 Para.1“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said,encouraging and comforting me as always as she does.My beloved mom,wearing a shining smile on her scarlet face,added.“The narrators part is important,too.”Thanks to her encouragement,which calmed me down gradually,and I began to accept

20、 narrator part is of vital significance.Time went so fast that it reached to the performance day.At first I was still nervous,but it was at that very moment that I find a dandelion in my pocket.I knew my mom passed the flower to me,which means to be in company with me.Possible version 1Para.2After t

21、he play,I took home the flower.Mom carefully gazed at the dandelion,gently pressed it into the dictionary and grinned happily as she did.“We were perhaps the only people who would press such a sorry-looking weed.”Though decades pass,I constantly recall our precious lunchtimes being together,clinging

22、 to each other,bathed in the soft midday light.For this,I am forever grateful,because smiles on mothers face and her kind act foster a man like me now!And all those inspiring words like“Cease to struggle and you cease to live.”has been echoing in my mind as fresh as a daisy.评点：全文叙述温情，感人，发挥自然、到位。首先在情

23、节上，本文评点：全文叙述温情，感人，发挥自然、到位。首先在情节上，本文中的中的“信物信物”蒲公英一直贯穿于文章中，很好地体现了该意象的重要蒲公英一直贯穿于文章中，很好地体现了该意象的重要性，在传递这朵花的同时，也深深地传递着母女情。第一段对于人物性，在传递这朵花的同时，也深深地传递着母女情。第一段对于人物的面部表情描写细致入微，在形容词的选用上，细致到位，例如的面部表情描写细致入微，在形容词的选用上，细致到位，例如beloved,shining,scarlet；在副词的选择上，也比较丰富地体现了动词；在副词的选择上，也比较丰富地体现了动词的性质与意义，例如的性质与意义，例如gradually,

24、carefully,happily，constantly等等。等等。在安慰女儿的话语中，文章用了在安慰女儿的话语中，文章用了“Cease to struggle and you cease to live.”，体现出母亲对女儿的鼓励与期望。总的来说，文章语言丰，体现出母亲对女儿的鼓励与期望。总的来说，文章语言丰富，句型多样，体现出了作者语言运用的灵活性与扎实的英语语言能富，句型多样，体现出了作者语言运用的灵活性与扎实的英语语言能力。力。Possible version 1 Para.1“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said,remindi

25、ng me of how much I loved to read stories aloud to her.“The narrators part is every bit as important as the part of a princess.”Her constant encouragement filled me with pride but before the night of the performance,I suddenly felt nervous backstage.My teacher came over to me.“Your mother asked me t

26、o give this to you,”she said,handing me a dandelion.Looking at it,I knew my mother was out there.Possible version 2Para.2After the play,I took home the flower and my mother pressed it between two sheets of paper in a dictionary,laughing as she did it that,“we were perhaps the only people who would p

27、ress such a sorry-looking weed.”After all these years,I often look back on our lunchtimes together,bathed in the soft midday light.For this,I am forever grateful,because smiles on mothers face and her kind act foster a man like me now！评点：该作文截取自原文，语言基调一直，衔接自然，内容连贯，读评点：该作文截取自原文，语言基调一直，衔接自然，内容连贯，读起来颇有一

28、番味道。全文情节发展合理，在第一段中，引进老师的角起来颇有一番味道。全文情节发展合理，在第一段中，引进老师的角色，从第三方的角度，侧面体现出母亲这一深情而温暖的形象，把母色，从第三方的角度，侧面体现出母亲这一深情而温暖的形象，把母爱的传递用一朵蒲公英体现出来，简单又深刻。在语言方面，虽然没爱的传递用一朵蒲公英体现出来，简单又深刻。在语言方面，虽然没有太多的高级词汇与句式的应用，但情节的推进引人入胜。在最后一有太多的高级词汇与句式的应用，但情节的推进引人入胜。在最后一句话对于母亲的点滴言行，对自己成长的塑造，体现出作者对于母亲句话对于母亲的点滴言行，对自己成长的塑造，体现出作者对于母亲的感激之情

29、。的感激之情。1.第一眼看到你会被那抢眼、近乎妖艳的色彩震撼，更会迷醉于她独特的，蕴涵巫女般迷幻魔力的风格之中。2.她选择以代表强烈欲望的紫色来包装其化妆品系列，以黯紫色为主色的包装，周围布满了红艳的蔷薇，像极了年代妩媚的面粉盒；复古俏丽的化妆品系列让城中女子爱不释手。3.古琦品牌时装一向以高档、豪华、性感而闻名于世，以“身份与财富之象征”品牌形象成为富有的上流社会的消费宠儿，一向被商界人士垂青，时尚之余不失高雅。古琦现在是意大利最大的时装集团。4.继承着法国高级女装的传统，始终保持高级华丽的设计路线，迎合上流社会成熟女性的审美品味，象征着法国时装文化的最高精神。5.多年过去了，这个名字依然引

30、领着世界的流行时尚。然而在这些辉煌的业绩后面，我们所看到的是一个活生生的，他充满着深情，极为害羞，又极为幽默，他便是永远的。6.迪奥的设计，注重的是服装的女性造型线条而并非色彩。他的时装具有鲜明的风格：裙长不再曳地，强调女性隆胸丰臀、腰肢纤细、肩形柔美的曲线，打破了战后女装保守古板的线条。这种风格轰动了巴黎乃至整个西方世界，给人留下深刻的印象。7.服装与其他名牌做法不同，它从不将任何“”或“”等明显的标志放在衣服上，而衣标上的字样，则是其唯一的辨识方法。8.推出的服装款式向顾客传递积极、开放的生活理念,倡导时尚的生活方式。专为成熟时尚的都市女性设计。她们的着装风格典雅、性感；精于对服装款式、颜色、面料及配饰的