打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型18课件.pptx

1、1.Interpretation of the“I”WomanColleagueStrangers?When?Where?Who?What?How?Why?1.Interpretation of the When?Where?Who?What?How?Why?A year ago during my fresh year in the companymy colleague and I my colleague helped me give a card with encouragementcheer me upPara.3What order is the text in?Para.Para

2、.1 1 When it was her turn to payPara.3Para.3 a year ago during my fresh year Para.5Para.5 Then I approached the woman.1.Interpretation of the Para.8Para.8 When the woman read the card,Para.9Para.9 After we embraced,Time orderWhy does the author think of the story a year ago?The author had the same e

3、xperience and feeling with the woman.1.Interpretation of the“I”ColleagueStrangersdidnt know the rulesnot familiar with the worknot feel the value of myslfcouldnt get along as my father,mother and brotherhusband lost his jobson is up to his old trickscant get through the holidaysWomansad hopeless des

4、perate frustrated helpless They had the same experience and feeling.1.Interpretation of the“I”ColleagueStrangersWoman?Given Information2.Interpretation of underlined words and given information Para.1 When the woman read the card,she began to cry.I gave her the card to cheer her up.It works.Para.2 A

5、fter we embraced,I walked back to my car and words on the card crowded into my mind again.I embraced the woman.2.Interpretation of underlined words and given information Para.1 When the woman read the card,she began to cry.New Information husband lost his job son is up to his old tricks cant get thr

6、ough the holidays I said,my voice trembling My heart pounded as this was the first time 2.Interpretation of underlined words and given information Para.1 When the woman read the card,she began to cry.New Informationcard,from which I felt the encouragement,and sensed happiness falling I,woman,get thr

7、ough,colleague,encouragement,happiness,help,purse,stranger,cardCharactersEmotionsBehaviorsObjectsI,woman,colleague,strangerhappiness,encouragementget through,helppurse,card 3.Interpretation of underlined words and given information4.Interpretation of writing ideas“I”WomanRead the cardembrace I feel

8、a warm glow spreading inside of me.decided to prepare morecard5.The Micro-skills Training in writing 在续写文本中，文字情节完整，但是表达贫乏，语言不够生动形象，没有准确描述人物的动作，传达人物的情绪，缺乏故事性。I.词的积累：词的积累：cry,weep,sob,wail,whimperCry:v.&n.to produce tears from your eyes because you are unhappy or hurt可用作动词或名词，泛指因悲伤难过甚至高兴而哭，通常都哭出声来。Wee

9、p：（formal or literary）to cry,usually because you are sad 较为正式，意指小声地哭或无声地流泪，更多侧重于哭的泪水，而不是声音。Sob：v.&n.to cry noisily,taking sudden,sharp breaths 呜咽，哭诉，啜泣，往往伴随着抽噎的声音，侧重断断续续，杂音比较多。Wail：v.&n.to make a long loud high cry because you are sad or in pain 嚎啕大哭，长号Whimper：v.&n.to make low,weak crying noises;to

10、speak in this way 低声抽抽搭搭地说，侧重声音小而弱我们可以通过架构小说人物的信息，通过细节描写，展现人物年龄、性别、状态、动作、表情等的特点，让人物更形象，文章更有血有肉，厚实感人。比如第一段中女人的哭，不仅有为生活艰难而情绪宣泄的痛哭，更有感动和感激的哭。不同年龄的人、不同性别的人和处于不同情境中的人都会有不一样的哭。在描写时，加上哭的声音、表情或动作就可以让人物更有区分度。那么，如何描绘一个长期压抑沮丧突然得以宣泄的中年女人的哭呢？让我们一起来学习哭的各种表达。5.The Micro-skills Training in writing 1.cry for/over st

11、h.,have a good cry,weep for sth.,weep at/over sth.;choke with sob,sob ones heart out,sob out ones story,sob into ones palms,a long wail,whimper in pain2.She lay on the bed,whimpering in pain.她躺在床上，痛得呜咽。3.She whimpered something inaudible.她呜咽着说了什么，听不清。4.I saw an old lady wailing with fist beating her

12、 chest in the street corner.我看见一个老太太在街角处捶胸痛痛哭。5.The child started to wail when he saw his mother walking out from behind the door.看到妈妈从门后面走出来，孩子开始嚎啕大哭。6.When he embraced me with his arms open wide,I felt my throat choke with sob.当他张开双臂拥抱我，我感觉自己的嗓子哽住了。II.词块和句的积累：词块和句的积累：7.Finally my sister broke down

13、,sobbing into her handkerchief.我姐姐终于再也控制不住自己的情绪，捂着手绢呜咽起来。8.She sobbed out the story of her sons unfortunate experience.她哭着诉说自己儿子不幸的遭遇。9.She couldnt restrained herself from weeping when she heard of the miserable story.听到这个悲惨的故事，她忍不住掉下了眼泪。10.Neither did I know how I could get through the days a year

14、ago during my fresh year in the company.在初到公司的那一年，我也不知道该怎么熬下去。11.My heart pounded as this was the first time that I had come with the idea to help a stranger.我内心紧张不已，因为这是我第一次有这样的想法，打算出手帮一个陌生人。6.牛刀小试1.她说起自己艰难的生活，失业的丈夫，不可靠的儿子，她说起自己艰难的生活，失业的丈夫，不可靠的儿子，忍不住流泪。忍不住流泪。_,her husband who was out of job,and the

15、 only son as fickle as fortune,and _ _.(and连接的并列句)_ her husband who was out of job,and the only son as fickle as fortune,_ .(运用非谓语动词结构)She sobbed out her hard lifeSobbing out her hard life couldnt restrained herself from weepingshe couldnt restrained herself from weeping2.说着说着，她终于再也控制不住自己的情绪，捂着手呜咽起来

16、。说着说着，她终于再也控制不住自己的情绪，捂着手呜咽起来。As _,she finally broke down,_.(运用As引导的状语从句和非谓语动词结构)While _ _ _,she finally broke down,_.(运用非谓语动词结构)she talked alongtalking along3.她握着我的手，呜咽着说，“谢谢！你不知道，你的话有多重要。”She _,“Thank you so much.You have no idea how much this means to me.”(运用非谓语动词结构)sobbing into her palmssobbing i

17、nto her palmsheld my hands whimpering4.她告诉我，如果没有我的卡片，她在这艰难的日子里看不到自己，更看不到希望。She told me that without my card,she _,not even _.(运用虚拟语气)wouldnt have seen herselfthe hope during the hard days5.从来没有做这样的事情，我有点不知所措，不知道自己应该做出什么样从来没有做这样的事情，我有点不知所措，不知道自己应该做出什么样的反应。的反应。_,I was at a stand and didnt know what re

18、action I might give.(As引导的状语从句)_,I was at a stand and didnt know what reaction I might give.(运用非谓语动词结构)As Ive never done this beforeHaving never done this before6.“你很重要。你很重要。”当我对自己说这话的时候，我的心里涌起一股暖流。当我对自己说这话的时候，我的心里涌起一股暖流。(现在分词作伴随状语现在分词作伴随状语)“You matter.”I said the sentence to myself,_.“You matter.”_

19、,I felt a warm glow spreading inside of me.feeling a warm glow spreading inside of meSaying the sentence to myselfPossible version 1When the woman read the card,she began to cry.She dumped out all those difficulties,sobbing about the husband who was out of job and the son who was as fickle as fortun

20、e.As a matter of fact,she couldnt restrained herself at all.After venting her emotions,she held my hands tightly and thanked me out of turn.She explained that without my card,she wouldnt have seen herself,not even had the hope for future.I was at a stand and didnt know what reaction I might give sin

21、ce Ive never come across this before.All I could think about was:“Would it be OK to give you a hug?”Possible version 1After we embraced,I walked back to my car and words on the card crowded into my mind again.“You matter.”Saying the sentence to myself,I feel a warm glow spreading inside of me.It rem

22、inded me of my colleagues encouragement and told me I was not alone.That happened again upon the strange woman through the experience,which also gave me far more happiness and fulfillment.Since then Ive decided to prepare more cards,as happiness is one thing that really deserves to be passed on from

23、 one to another.评点：评点：作者第一次以这样的方式帮助陌生人，不知该说什么，最后给了一个温暖的拥抱，这一举动与上下文衔接自然；dumping out，sobbing about，venting，out of turn等短语的运用生动地展现了一位60岁老太太感动苦闷的情绪。老人倾诉时的絮絮叨叨、语无伦次很有这一年龄和情境的特点，描写颇为生动形象；同时，卡片上的句子“You matter.”引出对这个故事的反思，最后点出本文的主旨Passing Happiness on，为文章画上圆满的句号。1.第一眼看到你会被那抢眼、近乎妖艳的色彩震撼，更会迷醉于她独特的，蕴涵巫女般迷幻魔力的风

24、格之中。2.她选择以代表强烈欲望的紫色来包装其化妆品系列，以黯紫色为主色的包装，周围布满了红艳的蔷薇，像极了年代妩媚的面粉盒；复古俏丽的化妆品系列让城中女子爱不释手。3.古琦品牌时装一向以高档、豪华、性感而闻名于世，以“身份与财富之象征”品牌形象成为富有的上流社会的消费宠儿，一向被商界人士垂青，时尚之余不失高雅。古琦现在是意大利最大的时装集团。4.继承着法国高级女装的传统，始终保持高级华丽的设计路线，迎合上流社会成熟女性的审美品味，象征着法国时装文化的最高精神。5.多年过去了，这个名字依然引领着世界的流行时尚。然而在这些辉煌的业绩后面，我们所看到的是一个活生生的，他充满着深情，极为害羞，又极为幽默，他便是永远的。6.迪奥的设计，注重的是服装的女性造型线条而并非色彩。他的时装具有鲜明的风格：裙长不再曳地，强调女性隆胸丰臀、腰肢纤细、肩形柔美的曲线，打破了战后女装保守古板的线条。这种风格轰动了巴黎乃至整个西方世界，给人留下深刻的印象。7.服装与其他名牌做法不同，它从不将任何“”或“”等明显的标志放在衣服上，而衣标上的字样，则是其唯一的辨识方法。8.推出的服装款式向顾客传递积极、开放的生活理念,倡导时尚的生活方式。专为成熟时尚的都市女性设计。她们的着装风格典雅、性感；精于对服装款式、颜色、面料及配饰的