概要写作113-School-Uniform(课件)-高考英语作文新题型.pptx

1、 概要写作 文本内容与结构解读 写作思路解读 写作思路微技能之要点信息提炼策略 表达微技能之信息抓取训练篇 牛刀小试 参考范文欣赏体裁：主题：结构：1.文本内容与结构解读体裁：说明文主题：students different attitudes to the school uniform结构：Para 1Para 3Para 2Para 41.文本内容与结构解读阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。词左右的内容概要。School uniforms are becoming more and more popular across the U.S.A.

2、Thats no surprise,because they offer many benefits.They immediately end the powerful social sorting and labeling(标记)that come from clothing.If all students are dressed in the same way,they will not pay too much attention to their clothing,and some of them will not be laughed at for wearing the“wrong

3、”clothes.Some people are against the strict rule of school uniforms,but they do not realize that students already accept a kind of rule wanting to look just like their friends.The difference is that the clothing students choose for themselves creates social barriers(障碍);school uniforms tear those ba

4、rriers down.As in other places,uniforms remind the wearers of their purposes and duties.For example,when a man or woman puts on a police uniform,he or she becomes,for a time,the symbol(象征)of law and order.The uniform means to the wearer his or her special duties and sends the same message to everyon

5、e the wearer meets.People with different jobs wear uniforms of one kind or another.For students,the school uniform reminds them that their task for the six or seven hours they are in school is to get an education.Some parents are unhappy about uniforms,saying that school uniforms will affect their c

6、hildrens“creativity”.First,as noted above,the clothes students choose to wear do not necessarily express their individuality.They just copy their classmates.Second,students have the rest of the day to be as creative as they like.While theyre in school,their job is to master reading,writing,and math;

7、this should take up all the creativity they have.Mastery of those skills will be good for the students to build up their creativity in every way.demonstration thesisarguments arguments Para.1:School uniforms are becoming more and more popular across the U.S.A.Thats no surprise,because they offer man

8、y benefits.They immediately end the powerful social sorting and labeling(标记)that come from clothing.If all students are dressed in the same way,they will not pay too much attention to their clothing,and some of them will not be laughed at for wearing the“wrong”clothes.写作思路解读校服的流行得益于优点众多。（要点1）Para.2:

9、Some people are against the strict rule of school uniforms,but they do not realize that students already accept a kind of rule wanting to look just like their friends.The difference is that the clothing students choose for themselves creates social barriers(障碍);school uniforms tear those barriers do

10、wn.写作思路解读对于校服持异议的人给予理由反驳。（要点2）Para.3:As in other places,uniforms remind the wearers of their purposes and duties.For example,when a man or woman puts on a police uniform,he or she becomes,for a time,the symbol(象征)of law and order.The uniform means to the wearer his or her special duties and sends th

11、e same message to everyone the wearer meets.People with different jobs wear uniforms of one kind or another.For students,the school uniform reminds them that their task for the six or seven hours they are in school is to get an education.写作思路解读对于制服的功能给予阐释，并提出校服的主要功能。（要点3）Para.4:Some parents are unha

12、ppy about uniforms,saying that school uniforms will affect their childrens“creativity”.First,as noted above,the clothes students choose to wear do not necessarily express their individuality.They just copy their classmates.Second,students have the rest of the day to be as creative as they like.While

13、 theyre in school,their job is to master reading,writing,and maths;this should take up all the creativity they have.Mastery of those skills will be good for the students to build up their creativity in every way.写作思路解读对于提出校服影响创造力的家长，给予反驳。（要点4）若将上述的所有要点连句成文，便得到了这样一段概要：School uniforms are popular in A

14、merica for many advantages.(point 1)Although some people disagree with the rule of wearing uniforms,doing such can remove social barriers.(point 2)Besides,the uniform is a symbol of responsibility and school uniforms help students focus on schoolwork.(point 3)However,some parents think uniforms will

15、 discourage childrens creativity.In fact it is not the case.(point 4)写作思路解读评点：评点：这篇概要总体来说涵盖了篇章的所有主要点，但句子比较干瘪，也并未完全使用自己的语言。语言索然无味，未能体现出语言能力。列举的一些次要点，也没有在字数允许的范围内做一些补充，因此字数仅在57词。3.表达微技能之信息抓去训练 寻找关键信息的时候，首先抓住实词名词，动词或者有重点形容词修饰的名词：School uniforms,becoming,benefits,end social sorting,labeling,are dressed,

16、pay attention to,clothing,students,attention 第一段提出校服日趋流行因为优点众多，因此school uniforms和benefits两个词很好地概括了主要信息。social sorting,labeling,clothing,students,attention都是举例证明校服的实际功用，进而促使其流行。If引导的是条件状语从句，在论证的时候，属于具体例子，因此可以作为次要信息处理。而段落中的次要信息，可根据篇幅长度，做适当添加或者删除。3.表达微技能之信息抓去训练第二段的主要信息点落在people,are against,school unifo

17、rms,realize,accept,rule,difference,clothing,choose,create,social barriers,tear down.破折号后面的内容，作为一种解释说明的插入语，可以省略。因此，第二段可以把主要信息整合为：Some people are against school uniforms,but they do not realize a rule The difference is that the clothing creates social barriers(障碍);school uniforms tear those barriers d

18、own.3.表达微技能之信息抓去训练 第三段的主要信息点落在 uniforms,remind,wearers,purposes and duties,students,task,hours,school,get an education.中间信息for example引出的制服自身的功能，并列举了警察制服的功能，因此可以省略。所以第三段可以把主要信息整合为 Uniforms remind the wears of the purposes and duties.Students tasks in school are to get an education.3.表达微技能之信息抓去训练第四段的

19、主要信息点落在parents,affect,creativity,their job,master,take up,mastery,skills,build up.段落中的first 和second引导的两个句子，是举例论证前面某些家长的观点，可以直接省去。后面while引导的转折句，论述了学生在学校的主要任务，也侧面论证创造性这一能力到底是源自什么。因此，第四段可以把主要信息整合为：Some parents think uniforms affect creativity,but students jobs are to master skills,which are to build up

20、 creativity.2.Taking a shower is relaxing.You can hum a song,daydream or think about nothing,leaving the real world behind you.But do you know that showering can also benefit your mind?_一、根据句意，删除细节或者具体例子。一、根据句意，删除细节或者具体例子。1.Clay character making has long been our childhood game.Once my brother and I

21、 spared no effort to make the best ever Captain Cook.To give him more details,we gave him a large hat,a fake telescope,a white paper-made teeth and a pair of leather gloves._5.牛刀小试My brother and I made a vivid clay Captain Cook when we were young.Showing is relaxing and beneficial.参考范文欣赏1School unif

22、orms are gaining increasing popularity in the U.S.A owing to many advantages.(要点1)For one thing,wearing uniforms brings social barriers and classification to an end,which results from individual clothing.(要点2)For another,it helps students concentrate on study as a reminder of their responsibilities.

23、(要点3)However,some parents think it discouraging for children to develop creativity,which isnt quite true,since what actually benefits creativity and life is the mastery of skills learnt at school.(要点4)(75w)评点：评点：该篇章语言流畅、地道，语法结构丰富，使用了现在分词，过去分词以及强调句等句型整合文章。论点与论点之间用for one thing,for another等罗列，清晰直观，一目了

24、然。最后用however引出异议要点，衔接自然连贯。综上，这篇文章能抓住主题的深刻意义，主题大意明确，切点，每个主要点都细致到位，并且几乎完全使用了自己的语言。概要写作1.13 School Uniform（课件）-高考英语作文新题型概要写作1.13 School Uniform（课件）-高考英语作文新题型参考范文欣赏2School uniforms prevail throughout the U.S.A and benefit students.(要点1)Opposed though some people are,the uniforms are popular with their m

25、eeting students clothes similarity and annihilating social barriers.(要点2)It is known that uniforms function as a reminder of purposes and responsibilities,and for students,receiving an education is the prior task.(要点3)Meanwhile,some parents blame kids being less creative on wearing uniforms,but the

26、real creativity consists in their mastery of knowledge through schooling.(要点4)(74w)评点：评点：该文章用词较高级，例如prevail,annihilate,prior等等。在词性转化上，熟练应用名词动词化，形容词动词化等相关变形，使词汇丰富程度趋高。在句式结构上，运用非谓语动词，主语从句，半倒装结构等连句成篇。在衔接上，使用though,meanwhile等等在内部逻辑的连贯上，达到串联文章的效果。总得来说语言丰富，要点全面，衔接合理，遣词造句能力强。概要写作1.13 School Uniform（课件）-高考英语作文新题型概要写作1.13 School Uniform（课件）-高考英语作文新题型