专题10-2021新高考英语读后续写典例分析10-My-Own-Violin.pptx

1、专题10-2021新高考英语读后续写典例分析10-My-Own-Violin目录01表达积累02原文分析03续写扩展04续写赏析01表达积累表达积累1.分类广告分类广告2.把报纸放在我腿上把报纸放在我腿上3.大大萧条萧条4.谋生谋生5.爸爸哼爸爸哼着小曲着小曲the classified advertisementslaid the paper on my lapthe Great Depressionmake a livingDaddy hummed表达积累6.妈妈妈妈吹着口哨吹着口哨7.这是不可能的这是不可能的8.学校学校管弦乐队管弦乐队9.紧紧地闭上紧紧地闭上眼睛眼睛10.这幅画面牢牢地

2、这幅画面牢牢地记在脑海里记在脑海里Mother whistledit was out of the questionthe school orchestraclosed my eyes tightcapture the picture firmly in my mind表达积累11.我默默地我默默地发誓发誓12.尽管日子尽管日子不好过不好过13.随后的许多随后的许多夜晚夜晚14.围着桌子坐着围着桌子坐着15.热情地握手热情地握手I vowed silentlyYet even though times were hardmany following nightssit round the ta

3、bleheartily shook hands表达积累16.两人同时两人同时交谈交谈17.拿起一个箱子，打开拿起一个箱子，打开，18.拿出拿出小提琴小提琴19.旋律旋律汹涌澎湃汹涌澎湃20.如瀑布般流畅如瀑布般流畅both talking at oncepicked up a case,opened itlifted out a violinThe melody surgedspoke like waterfalls02原文分析My Own Violin“Wanted:Violin.Cant pay much.Contact”I rarely read the classified adver

4、tisements,so why did I notice that one?I laid the paper on my lap and closed my eyes,remembering what had happened many years before,during the Great Depression when my family struggled to make a living on our farm.I,too,had wanted a violin.原文分析原文分析注意细节表达的积累注意细节表达的积累When my older twin sisters began

5、showing an interest in music,Harriet Anne learned to play Grandmas piano,while Suzanne turned to Daddys violin.Simple tunes became lovely melodies.My baby brother danced;Daddy hummed and Mother whistled.I just listened.When my arms grew long enough,I tried to play Suzannes violin.Oh,how I wanted one

6、!But I knew it was out of the question.原文分析原文分析我太想要一把属于自己的小提我太想要一把属于自己的小提琴了。琴了。While 表示对比表示对比 One evening as the twins played in the school orchestra.I closed my eyes tight to capture the picture firmly in my mind.Someday,Ill sit up there,I vowed silently.It was not a good year.At harvest the crops

7、didnt bring as much as we had hoped.Yet even though times were hard,I couldnt wait any longer to ask,“Daddy,may I have a violin of my own?”“Cant you use Suzannes?”原文分析原文分析日子在艰难，日子在艰难，我还是骨气勇气问爸爸我还是骨气勇气问爸爸要了小提琴。要了小提琴。“Id like to be in the orchestra too,and we cant both use the same violin at the same

8、time.”Daddys face looked sad.That night,and many following nights,I heard him remind God in our family prayers,“and Lord,Mary Lou wants her own violin.”One evening we all sat round the table.The twins and I studied.Mother sewed and Daddy wrote a letter to his friend,George Finkle,in Columbus,Ohio.Mr

9、 Finkle,Daddy said,was a fine violinist.原文分析原文分析父亲写信给朋友父亲写信给朋友When Daddy received a letter from Columbus a few weeks later,he asked me,“Mary Lou,do you want to go with me to visit Mr Finkle?”He drove us to Columbus and we came to a fine,old house.A tall man opened the door.He and Daddy heartily shoo

10、k hands,both talking at once.原文分析原文分析父亲带我见了他的小提琴家的那位朋友。父亲带我见了他的小提琴家的那位朋友。“Mary Lou,Ive been hearing things about you.Your Daddy has arranged a surprise for you!”He picked up a case,opened it,lifted out a violin and started to play.The melody surged and spoke like waterfalls.Oh,to play like him,I tho

11、ught.Finishing the piece,he turned to Daddy.“I found it in a pawnshop（当铺）for seven dollars.Its a good violin.Mary Lou should be able to make a beautiful music with it.”Then he handed the violin to me.原文分析原文分析我见到了新的小提琴。我见到了新的小提琴。Paragraph 1：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended

12、.It was mine!_Paragraph 2：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement._原文分析原文分析父亲的朋友吧小提琴送给了我，父亲的朋友吧小提琴送给了我，后面续写应该是我很感后面续写应该是我很感动，动，也很努力练习，也很努力练习，也参加了梦寐以求的校园演奏会。也参加了梦寐以求的校园演奏会。我回到了现实，结局应该是正能量。所以后面我回到了现实，结局应该是正能量。所以后面续写应该是我把我的小提琴卖给了这个人。续写应该是我把我的小提琴卖给了这个人。03续写扩展Paragraph 1Parag

13、raph 1：I noticed the tears in Daddys eyes as I finally comprehended.It was mine!I liked it very much I practice playing with violinAnd take part in the school orchestra Paragraph 2Paragraph 2：I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement.I decide to sell my violin The advertis

14、er and I met The father bought the violin for her daughter 句子润色“真漂亮。”我说，几乎喘不过气来。“Its beautiful.”I said,barely breathing.barely breathing句子润色我知道爸爸和我的祈祷都得到了回应。had been answeredI knew Daddys prayer,and mine,had been answered.I knew Daddys and my prayer had been answered.句式提升句式提升句子润色回到家里，我每天都在练习，一点也不累。B

15、ack home,I practiced daily,feeling no tiredness.句式的提升句式的提升feel no tirednessWhen I was back home,I practiced daily,and felt no tiredness.句子润色当我准备加入学校管弦乐队时，我激动得浑身发抖。When I was ready to join the school orchestra,I trembled with excitement.school orchestratrembled with excitement句子润色在观众席上，爸爸妈妈骄傲地笑了笑，他们的

16、小女儿拿着她心爱的小提琴，让全世界都钦佩她。in the audienceDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire.held her cherished violinDaddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience at their little girl，and she held her cherished violin for th

17、e whole world to admire.句子润色那时的岁月似乎过得更快。The years seemed to run more swiftly then.run more swiftly句子润色我把小提琴装进箱子里，走进了成年人的世界。packed my violin in its caseI packed my violin in its case and stepped into the grown-up world.the grown-up world句子润色护士的训练，婚姻，工作，抚养四个女儿，这些都是我的年华。bringing up four daughtersNurses

18、 training,marriage,working,bringing up four daughters filled my years.此句表达很精美，摘抄积累。此句表达很精美，摘抄积累。句子润色但我的孩子们都不喜欢小提琴。高层次表达高层次表达Yet none of my children cared about the violin.But all my children did not like violin.句子润色 我把报纸放在一边，去找我的小提琴。Laying the paper aside,I went to find my violin.Lay the paper aside

19、句子润色我拨了号码。那天下午晚些时候，一辆旧车停在我的车道上。in my drivewayAnd I dialed the number.Later that afternoon,an old car stopped in my driveway.dialed the number句子润色一个三十多岁的男人和一个年轻女孩敲门。A man in his thirtiesA man in his thirties with a young girl knocked on the door.knocked on the door句子润色“我一直在祈祷有人能回应我的广告。我女儿非常想要一把小提琴ans

20、wer my advertisement“Ive been praying someone would answer my advertisement.My daughter wants a violin so badly.”wants a violin so badly句子润色他说，“你要价多少？“七美元，”我说。He said,“How much are you asking?”“Seven dollars,”I said.句子润色我把箱子交给了那个女孩。她打开箱子，轻轻地碰了碰小提琴，小提琴被傍晚的阳光照得发亮。handed the case toI handed the case to

21、 the girl.She opened the case and touched the violin lightly as it caught the glow of the late-afternoon sun.touched the violin lightlythe glow of the late-afternoon sun句子润色然后，她伸出双臂搂住微笑的父亲。threw her arms roundThen she threw her arms round her smiling father.04续写赏析续写赏析I noticed the tears in Daddys ey

22、es as I finally comprehended.It was mine!“Its beautiful.”I said,barely breathing.I knew Daddys prayer,and mine,had been answered.Back home,I practiced daily,feeling no tiredness.When I was ready to join the school orchestra,I trembled with excitement.Daddy and Mother smiled proudly in the audience a

23、t their little girl who held her cherished violin for the whole world to admire.The years seemed to run more swiftly then.I packed my violin in its case and stepped into the grown-up world.Nurses training,marriage,working,bringing up four daughters filled my years.Yet none of my children cared about

24、 the violin.注意句式的多变续写赏析I forced my thoughts to the present and read again the advertisement.Laying the paper aside,I went to find my violin.And I dialed the number.Later that afternoon,an old car stopped in my driveway.A man in his thirties with a young girl knocked on the door.“Ive been praying som

25、eone would answer my advertisement.My daughter wants a violin so badly.”He said,“How much are you asking?”“Seven dollars,”I said.I handed the case to the girl.She opened the case and touched the violin lightly as it caught the glow of the late-afternoon sun.Then she threw her arms round her smiling father.非谓语动词的运用 作业1.积累细节描写的词汇和短语。2.摘抄默写本节课所有高级表达。专 题 1 0 2 0 2 1 新 高 考 英 语 读 后 续 写 典 例 分 析 1 02021新高考英语Thank You!