读后续写练习：爱是奇迹 -2023届高考英语一轮复习写作备考.docx

1、读后续写：爱是奇迹 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Price of a Miracle Tess was an eight-year-old girl when she heard her mom and dad talking about her little brother，Andrew. All she knew was that he was very sick and they were completely out of money. Only a very costly operation could save him now and

2、 it was looking like there was no one to lend them the money. She heard Dad say to her tearful mom with desperation, Only a miracle can save him now.” Tess went to her bedroom and poured all the change she had saved out on the floor and counted it carefully:47 cents. She slipped out of home and made

3、 her way to Rexalls Drug Store. She waited patiently for the pharmacist to give her some attention but he was too busy at this moment. Finally，she took a quarter from her pocket and banged it on the glass counter. That did it ! “And what do you want? the pharmacist asked in an annoyed tone of voice.

4、 Im talking to my brother from Chicago Medical University whom I havent seen in ages, he said without waiting for a reply to his question. “Well, I want to talk to you about my brother,” Tess answered back in the same annoyed tone. Hes really, really sick and I want to buy a miracle.” “We dont sell

5、miracles here, little girl. Im sorry but I cant help you,” the pharmacist said, softening a little.“Listen，I have the money to pay for it. If it isnt enough，I will get the rest. Just tell me how much it costs.”Tess answered with a blind faith. The pharmacists brother was a well-dressed man. He stoop

6、ed down and asked the little girl“What kind of a miracle does your brother need?” l dont know,” Tess replied with hereyes welling up. “I just know hes really sick and Mom says he needs an operation. But my dad cant pay for it，so I want to use my money.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式作答。“How much do you hav

7、e?” asked the man from Chicago.The operation was completed.首句分析：第一段：来自芝加哥的男人没有戳破孩子天真的想法，顺着问多少钱，可见男人还是想呵护孩子的那一份天真与赤诚。那么我们在后面写的时候要注意语言上符合人物的性格。另外从这一段上可以确定人物有男人还有小女孩第二段：手术完成。因为这个是第二段的开头，但是我们由此可以推断出第一段的结尾：在男人的帮助下，弟弟动了手术。那么问题来了，男人是怎么样帮助弟弟的？文章中是否有线索？由于这是第一段开头，那么接下来的故事就需要我们朝着积极的方向，展开合理的想象，弟弟手术完成之后，男人跟这一家人又

8、会发生什么样的故事呢？另外要注意标题：Price of a Miracle，要紧扣题目。人物性格分析Tess：1. an eight-year-old girl，注意孩子神态口吻都要有孩子的天真。2. Tess poured all the change she had saved out on the floor and counted it carefully:47 cents. 为了救弟弟，把辛苦挣下来的小钱钱一分不差地都拿出来。3. She waited patiently for the pharmacist to give her some attention。耐心等候说明苔丝是个

9、懂事有礼貌的孩子。4. “Well, I want to talk to you about my brother,” Tess answered back in the same annoyed tone. 面对药剂师粗鲁的回复，苔丝也毫无怯场。5.“Listen，I have the money to pay for it. If it isnt enough，I will get the rest. Just tell me how much it costs.” Tess answered with a blind faith.年幼的苔丝因为天真而以为自己能够筹钱救弟弟。这份感情令人动

10、容，也为后面芝加哥男人帮助小女孩而做了铺垫。Pharmacist1.he pharmacist asked in an annoyed tone of voice. Im talking to my brother from Chicago Medical University whom I havent seen in ages, he said without waiting for a reply to his question.说明药剂师对小孩子没那么耐心。2.“We dont sell miracles here, little girl. Im sorry but I cant h

11、elp you,” the pharmacist said, softening a little.语气变柔和说明药剂师也因为孩子的善良而有了恻隐之心。但是他帮不了苔丝，或者可以说他不愿惹上麻烦，言行当中透出冷漠。算是有那么一点反派的意味。面对这种人物，我们可以后面写一下他态度的转变。当然也可以不写。芝加哥男人：1.Im talking to my brother from Chicago Medical University whom I havent seen in ages,从药剂师言语可以侧面看出：第一他们是兄弟关系。第二：男人是从芝加哥医科大学回来，那么他的身份我们可以推测一是：医科

12、大学的教师。二是：医科大学的学生。但是无论怎么样都说明了他可以帮助小女孩的弟弟。2.The pharmacists brother was a well-dressed man. He stooped down and asked the little girl“What kind of a miracle does your brother need?”第一：衣着亮丽，说明男人生活条件不错，帮助小女孩一家应该不是为了钱。也可以合理想象一下，如果他是医科大学的学生，那么他会请他的老师来动手术，那么动手术的钱很有可能是男人帮小女孩付了。第二：stooddown：弯下腰，说明关爱孩子，并对孩子耐心

13、询问。父母：She heard Dad say to her tearful mom with desperation, Only a miracle can save him now.”父母伤心不已，但又因为没钱治病而绝望。说明父母关爱孩子。答案 “How much do you have?”asked the man from Chicago. “47 cents!” Tess replied withavoice as crisp as a bell(用清脆的声音来体现女孩的年龄与心情，与前面的blindfaith感情基调一致). “47 cents are enough, little

14、 girl!” the man reached out his hand and tenderly fingered her long and shiny hair(这些词语上课都讲过，要学会运用). “I am a teacher from Chicago Medical University and maybe I could save your brother. So would you like to lead me to your home to check your brother?”Hearingthat, Tess jumped up like a happy deer and

15、 grasped his handtightly，leading him to her home(用动作来体现出孩子的快乐，还把孩子比喻成欢快的小鹿). After the check, the man declared that he would perform an operation on the boy and promised it wouldnt be long before he could pick himself up. His words broughtwhole family into the air. The operation was completed.And it

16、 was a huge success. As soon as Andrew recovered from illness, his parents went to thank the doctor with Tess（要体现出感恩）.They hugged the man with tears rolling down and said “you are our miracle”.And mom and dad promised to save enough money to pay for the bill but only to be told that Tess had paid for it. Tess bought a miracle with her 47 cents but actually, it is her love for her little brother brings the miracle. Love is priceless. the doctor explained to the parents，and then looked into Tesss eyes，smiling.