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7、，另外，丰富的词语、多样的句式、恰当的修辞等，都可以为文章增色。,技法点拨,有个性的文章必然是有创意的。有创意就是让作品的内容或形式更具新意，更富有创造性，更突出、更鲜明。具体表现在五个方面：,1.思想新 思想才是文章最为重要的部分，思想的创新才最有意义，每写一篇文章，最好能有令人耳目一新的思想认识。例如：世人都说，“一个和尚挑水吃，两个和尚抬水吃，三个和尚没水吃”；我要说，三个和尚也有水吃，还能吃得更好通过招商引资拉赞助，通了自来水，这是用现代企业文化理念来重新审视传统观点。这样表达就富有创意。,2.材料新 对于涉世未深的中学生来说，思想创新很不容易。有些传统观念，比如仁爱，你没法“翻脸”新

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11、瓢盆交响曲；美术课上赤橙黄绿青蓝紫；地理课上九州方圆；历史课上从奴隶到将军。”语言幽默，形象生动。,习作例文,文题一例文：,荷塘月色推荐语,荷塘月色是一部经典作品，作者是朱自清。我之所以要推荐这篇文章，主要原因有以下几点：,开篇即点明推荐的对象，并说明自己推荐的理由，总领全文。,一是这篇文章追求的是一种诗情画意之美。作者调动一切艺术手法，着意创造一个诗意盎然、情景交融的境界。作品中,满贮诗意的是风采绮丽的荷塘月色。作者层次有序地时而以荷塘为主景，月色为背景，动静结合，运用鲜明的比喻、通感手法，由远及近、从里及外地描绘了月光下荷塘的无边风光。二是这篇文章精于构思、巧于布局。作品开头写心情颇不宁静

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18、茸的下巴，像一盆倒立的仙人掌，咧开的大嘴足足占了头部的三分之一，那就是我们的英语老师。听说他是看过加勒比海盗后，被强尼戴普的中世纪造型迷倒后,外貌描写，抓住人物的特征，并运用插叙的方式说明原因，富有创意。,蓄起胡子的，用英语讲就是“Cool and calm”(帅气又沉稳)。今天是什么事让他如此开心？原来今天一上课，英语老师就让同学们爬黑板，默写前一天学过的单词，平时我们这帮同学打的总是“无准备之仗”，但今天，一反常态改为“不打无准备之仗”，因此，刚才大获全胜，连平时学习较吃力的黄某都没有出错，他能不高兴吗？一乐起来，英语老师就露出爱理论的毛病：“毛主席说过：Modesty helps one

19、 to go forward，,whereas conceit makes one lag behind.”(谦虚使人进步，骄傲使人落后)，A victory is not successful，the last laugh is really smile. (一次胜利不算成功，笑到最后才是真笑)，孔子曰”，经典名言随口而出，文白夹杂，中英互用，劝诫之声滔滔不绝。我们只有“yes！yes！”的份了。,以语言描写展现英语老师的魅力，表达富有创意。,2号寻找目标：诗般浪漫，超爱显摆的语文老师,晚自习，同学们上得兴意正浓，忽然眼前一黑，咦？怎么回事，伸手不见五指！噢，原来停电了。可能是没经历过这种情

20、况，全体同学立刻兴奋起来，又蹦又跳，又唱又闹，一片混乱。至于老师，我们早已置之不顾(因为看不见他嘛)，显然，老师因被忽略而生气了，大喊一声：“别闹了！”雷霆之怒使同学们瞬间平静下来，老师却又温和地说：“没有电，多美好，天上有流星划过，,屋内有思维的火花闪现，让我们闭上眼睛，回味刚才学习的知识，不也有诗一般的浪漫吗？”也许是在老师面前放肆惯了，黑暗中，一位同学悠悠地说：“老师，时间还早，我们睡不着”又引来一阵哄堂大笑。老师不但不生气，还即兴赋诗：“夜里，星光在谦逊地亮着。沉思随夜色加深而饱满，有种质地在夜之博大中内敛。心脏无眠，一些身躯内炉火燃着，夜之背景中，持续煅,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元

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23、感叹语文老师才气的份了。,叙写语文老师的诗意语言，既展示了语文老师的诗意浪漫，又丰富了文章的内容，表达有创意。,3号寻找目标：面善心慈，热衷唠叨的数学老师,课堂上，面善心慈的数学老师一副无可奈何的样子，微微叹了口气说：“同学们，我们今天就探讨一下如何解,分式方程吧，对于你们，我是黔驴技穷，无计可施了。哪位天使大姐能指点迷津，自告奋勇？”说实话，也不能怪老师，十道计算，错误率竟达80，黑板上的五个人，全军覆没没有一个全对的，要是换了你，肯定也能急白了头。同学们一个个都知错地低下了头，脸涨得像个红苹果，神情像霜打的茄子蔫,比喻贴切，生动形象，把同学们做错题的情绪写出来，表达富有创意。,了。毕竟我们

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27、这篇写老师的作品，小作者写出了创意，是一篇不错的习作。,文题三例文：,春天的色彩,阳春三月，春风从田野、从山岗、从树梢间悠悠地吹来，它像一支跳动的画笔，舞到哪里，就把七彩的颜色涂抹到哪里。红的是郊外的樱花，橙的是天边的彩霞，黄的是田野里大片的油菜花，绿的是山丘上满目的草地，青的是,把春风比作画笔，涂抹颜色，紧扣文题的“色彩”，表达有创意。,小溪边迎风飘舞的杨柳，蓝的是天空中快乐游走的云朵，紫的是田野里开得正艳的紫云英。,运用排比句式展示春天的色彩，五颜六色，写出了春天色彩的斑驳美丽。,乘着春的翅膀，抓着风的艳衣，走出家门去呼吸清新的空气。田野里涌动着新翻泥土的气息，带着淡淡的香气，乡村小道上飘

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35、都没有缺席，向人们展露春天的痕迹，富有创意；二是在结构上，文章由景到人，以景衬人，画面富有灵性；三是作品语言表达生动，大量排比句式的运用，也使文章语言的表达富有创意。,中考真题,1.(2018贵州遵义)以“初三，和_一起走过”为题目写一篇作文。(作文55分，书写5分) 要求：在横线上把题目补充完整，角度自选，立意自定。不少于600字。除诗歌外，文体不限。不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名。不得抄袭和套作。,【真题解说】这是一道半命题作文，话题寻常。要想写出有创意的作品，必须学会不走寻常路。想做到这一点，要从多个方面入手。如补题，一般同学多补写人物、物件；有创意地表达可以补写某一本书，某一个自然之景

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