Unit 2 Writing Evaluation ppt课件-（2019）新人教版高中英语必修第一册.pptx

1、应用文写作M1U2 Writing Evaluation: A recommendation letter Evaluating directionsformatbasic writing elementscontenthandwritingwritten communicationrecommendation letter Rubric（量表） 1 Format and basic writing elementsRubric 1Rubric 1ExcellentExcellentGoodGoodFairFairPoorPoorFormatproper formatting(recommen

2、-dation, reasons & hopes)most parts are written correctlyall parts are present but only some are written correctlyonly some of the parts are presentBasic elementsrules of grammar, usage, capitalization, and punctuation are followed; spelling is correctrules of .are followed with minor errors that do

3、 not distract from the readabilityletter contains a few errors (grammatical, punctuation, spelling.) letter contains numerous errorsDear Mike, Glad to know that you are coming China for your summer vacation. Id like to recommend the city of Hangzhou to you. Hangzhou locates in the east of China with

4、 an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really funny place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk along the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! Its sure to enjoy your visit. You can plan your vacation today! I hope my recommendation helpful. The nice weather and conv

5、enient transportation here can make your trip more enjoyable. Yours, Li HuaWork 1Rubric 1Rubric 1ExcellenExcellent tGoodGoodFairFairFormatproper formatting(recommen-dation, reasons & hopes)most parts are written correctlyall parts are present but only some are written correctlyBasic elementsrules of

6、 grammar, usage, capitalization, and punctuation are followed; spelling is correctrules of .are followed with minor errors that do not distract from the readabilityletter contains a few errors (grammatical, punctuation, spelling.) Rubric 1 Format and basic writing elementsRubric 1Rubric 1ExcellentEx

7、cellentGoodGoodFairFairPoorPoorFormatproper formatting(recommendation, reasons & hopes)most parts are written correctlyall parts are present but only some are written correctlyonly some of the parts are presentBasic elementsrules of grammar, usage, capitalization, and punctuation are followed; spell

8、ing is correctrules of .are followed with minor errors that do not distract from the readabilityletter contains a few errors (grammatical, punctuation, spelling.) letter contains numerous errorsDear Mike, Glad to know that you are coming China for your summer vacation. Id like to recommend the city

9、of Hangzhou to you. Hangzhou locates in the east of China with an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really funny place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk along the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! Its sure to enjoy your visit. You can plan your vacation toda

10、y! I hope my recommendation helpful. The nice weather and convenient transportation here can make your trip more enjoyable. Yours love, Li Huacoming to ChinafunIm sure youllI hope my recommendation will be helpful. Polished work 1: Correct grammar and spelling are the first step to an excellent reco

11、mmendation letter. is located inHang zhou, located in the east of China, covers an area of . square kilos! Rubric 2Rubric 2ExcellentExcellentGoodGoodFairFairPoorPoorContent a meaningful letter using strong details to indicate the recommending purposewriting may wander off topic and need more details

12、basic understanding, using limited ideas or detailsdisplay no understanding/few detailsRubric 2: Contentrecommend a foreign friend to visit Hangzhou in summer vacation meaningful *located in the east of China, an area of about 17,000 square kilos!* a really fun place *walk along the West Lake .see f

13、ountain displays in the eveningDiscussing:1. Are these reasons well-functioned for the writing purpose? 2. How can you fill it with more contents?purpose aspects to state reasons your personal recommendationa travel destinationthe landscapethe weather and climatelocal history and culturetypical cust

14、oms and eventslocal delicacies the atmosphere of the local peopleactivities tourists can do what will impress the tourists most personal travel experience of the writerthe characteristic that will appeal to foreigners Content gives you a direction to list reasons for your recommendation. Rubric 3Rub

15、ric 3ExcellentExcellentGoodGoodFairFairPoorPoorwritten communicationsomewhat clear with vague statements to support main idea; uses appropriate terms in complete sentences to communicate required messagesomewhat unclear; poor and/or inaccurate word choice in incomplete sentencesoff-topic; word choic

16、e interferes with clarity; many errors in sentence structureRubric 3 Written communicationspecific statements to reinforce main idea(vivid description and appropriate words in complete and varied sentences)purpose reasons recommend a foreign friend to visit Hangzhou in summer vacation Co-work: Polis

17、h each reason following Rubric 3. Hangzhou, located in the east of China, covers an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really fun place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk along the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! You are sure to enjoy your visit. You can sch

18、edule your vacation today! Hangzhou, located in the east of China, covers an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really fun place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk along the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! You are sure to enjoy your visit. You can schedule y

19、our vacation today!Examples of how to polish the language a _ modern cityWill the language of this style attract tourists to Hangzhou? the main _ Chinese-style citya city of the _ poets in Chinese historya city _ for its historic relics and natural environmenta _ tourist destination for its history

20、and culturea beautiful city with _ heavenly attractionsa city _Hangzhou is a most picturesque modern city located in East China. with _ scenery杭州是位于中国东部的风景如画的现代城市。杭州是位于中国东部的风景如画的现代城市。 Hangzhou is the main representative Chinese-style city renowned for its historic relics and natural environment. try

21、 to combine two impressions try to combine two impressions Hangzhou is a city where headquarter of Alibaba lies, thus attracting many computer engineers like you. If Mike is a computer expert, you can tell him. If Mike is a computer expert, you can tell him. Tip 1: adj.s & clauses will make the reco

22、mmendation more attractive prosperouspicturesquerepresentativemost celebratedrenownedpopularnumerouswhere headquarter of Alibaba liesIts a really fun place with a lot to see. You can wander in the West Lake Wonderland and admire the evening fountain displays. Hangzhou, located in the east of China,

23、covers an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really fun place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk along the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! You are sure to enjoy your visit. You can schedule your vacation today!How can you improve the sentence and reinforce t

24、he main idea of the letter? Tip 2: Diversify the verbs and sentences to make the reasons more attractive. Hangzhou never fails to be a boring city. Cycling in the West Lake Wonderland and appreciating the fountain displays give you a unique experience. 杭州从来不是一个无聊的城市。骑行在西湖胜景、欣赏喷泉表演都会给你一种独特的经历。photogr

25、aph sunset views on Broken Bridgeappreciate Impression West Lake, an open night showsee well-preserved old buildingsexplore typical Chinese stores Hangzhou, located in the east of China, covers an area of about 17,000 square kilos! Its a really fun place, and there is a lot to see. You can walk alon

26、g the West Lake and even see some fountain displays in the evening! You are sure to enjoy your visit. You can schedule your vacation today!Longjing teaten tourist attractions around the West Lake; silk; Long-jing tea; ancient capital citya pan-roasted green teaproduced by handrenowned for its high q

27、ualityhas a legend behind itLongjing tea, a pan-roasted green tea, has a legend behind it.Produced by hand, Longjing tea is renowned for its high quality.With a legend behind it, Longjing tea is another attraction for you to visit Hangzhou. If you go there, I recommend you to taste Longjing tea, a s

28、ymbol of Hangzhou culture. General impression is general and recommendation of activities will be limited by seasons. Then what else makes a place impress you forever?Dear Mike, Glad to know that you are coming to China for your summer vacation. Id like to recommend the city of Hangzhou to you. Hang

29、zhou is a most picturesque city located in the east of China. It has so much to offer. You can enjoy the refreshing breeze as you bike along the world-famous West Lake. You can also experience the charm of a bustling downtown section full of historical heritages. If you prefer a quiet getaway, take

30、a stroll to its silk museum to admire the unique charm of Chinese art! I hope my recommendation helpful. The nice weather and convenient transportation here can make your trip more enjoyable. Yours, Li Hua a possible version vivid description(adj.) colorful activities(v.) unique characteristic(n.) v

31、aried sentence types What makes a good recommendation letter?Reference questions for self-evaluationDo you think Mr. James will be persuaded when the writer lists all these qualities of Wang Ming? What is needed to be a good host for an English speech contest?Is “he” the only subject to state WMs tr

32、aits? Keep the rubric in mindPractice: Work 2Your polished draft Display your polished Display your polished draft and read it aloud to the draft and read it aloud to the whole class.whole class. Highlight the improvement that Highlight the improvement that you make to the first draft. you make to t

33、he first draft. Tell us why you make such changes? Tell us why you make such changes? 02 a recommendation letter choose a persons traits appropriate for the positionspecific reasonslist the reasons making a place unique & attractiveI sincerely hope It would be highly appreciated if you could.Im grat

34、eful if you could take my recommendation. writing purpose Basic principle:vivid description(adj.)colorful activities(v.)unique characteristic(n.)varied sentence typesEvaluating summary wishes & hopesDear Mr. James, Im Li Hua, a student in your oral English class. Having known that you are looking fo

35、r a host for the coming English Speech Contest, I strongly recommend my friend Wang Ming as a qualified candidate. Humorous and outgoing, he never fails to bring laughter to the people around. Besides, his knowledge of English and English literature is a huge advantage to this position, which help i

36、nspire the participation of contestants. Most importantly, he is rich in personal experience of hosting large gatherings in junior and high school. Thank you for considering my recommentation, for he is the kind of host you are seeking.Yours sincerely, Li Hua Remember: choose traits appropriate for

37、the positionpersonalitiespersonalitiesstrengths in learning and work strengths in learning and work skills making him versatileskills making him versatileabilities to qualify for the positionabilities to qualify for the positionrelevant relevant past experiencespast experiencesachievements that meri

38、t highlightingachievements that merit highlightingwillingness to do the jobwillingness to do the jobpersonal story to stroke the feeling of personal story to stroke the feeling of the letter-receiver the letter-receiver Homework: 1Appreciate the possible version 2 attached below. 2Learn to write a s

39、econd recommendation letter, referring to the rubric we have learned today. 假如你是高三学生李华，你的英国朋友假如你是高三学生李华，你的英国朋友Jim在给你的在给你的邮件中提到他对中国文化很感兴趣，计划明年来中国邮件中提到他对中国文化很感兴趣，计划明年来中国上大学。他向你咨询相关信息，并且请你推荐一所大上大学。他向你咨询相关信息，并且请你推荐一所大学。请给他回封邮件，说明你所推荐的大学以及推荐学。请给他回封邮件，说明你所推荐的大学以及推荐理由。理由。 Rubric for a recommendation letter

40、 (see your worksheet) whole whole RubricRubricExcellentExcellentGoodGoodFairFairPoorPoorFormatwritten with proper formatting(salutation,body &closing)most parts are written correctlyall parts are present but only some are written correctlyonly some of the parts are presentGrammar, punctuation & spel

41、lingrules of grammar, usage, capitalization, and punctuation are followed; spelling is correctrules of .are followed with many minor errors that do not distract from the readabilityletter contains a few errors (grammatical, puctuation, spelling.) Letter contains numerous grammatical.errorsContent a

42、meaningful letter using strong details to indicate purposewriting may wander off topic and need more detailsbasic understanding, using limited ideas or detailsdisplay no understanding/few detailsWritten communicationclearly written with specific statements to reinforce main idea(vivid and approriate

43、 language in complete and varied sentences to convey required information)somewhat clear with vague statements to support main idea; uses appropriate terms in complete sentences to communicate required informationsomewhat unclear; poor and/or inaccurate word choice in imcomplete sentencesoff-topic; word choice interferes with clarity; many errors in sentence stucture