高一英语-：读后续写实践指南课件.pptx

1、高一年级英语学科课题：读后续写实践指南Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(顽童顽童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this your car, sir? he asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The

2、boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “I wish,” the boy went on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in s

3、urprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driving in front of my house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He w

4、anted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. Writing style: narration Tense: past tenseJack, the urchinChristmas EveIn the streetJacks brother gave Jack a car.The urchin wished to be such a broth

5、erThe urchin wished to be a great brother.THE FIVE WsWhoWhereWhyWhenWhatJack invited the urchin to take a ride.Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(顽童顽童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this

6、 your car, sir? he asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “

7、I wish,” the boy went on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in surprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driv

8、ing in front of my house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He wanted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. JackThe urchinJack thought the urchin admired him very muc

9、h and wanted to get a big gift like him.“I wish I could be the brother like that.”Jack thought the urchin wanted to show off to his neighbors.But Jack was wrong againThe urchinBrainstormkind, considerate, unselfish, responsibleJacks reaction/feelingmoved, surprised, misunderstand,impressive,The sett

10、ing or placejoyous, simple,ordinary,The storyrelationship, gift, unexpected, heartfelt, sincere,Jack received a car as the Christmas gift from his brother. He came across a little boy when he was off work.From the conversation between them, Jack thought the boy must have admired him very much.The bo

11、y wished that he could be the brother like that.What the boy said surprised Jack.The boy asked Jack to drive in front of his house. Jack thought that the boy wanted to show off to his neighbors.But he was wrong again. 原文 续写He got out and ran up to the steps.Jack got out and lifted the boy to the fro

12、nt seat of his car.He went back home hurriedly and what would he do?Whos the boy?Why should Jack lift the boy to the from seat of his car?But Jack was wrong.What can we conclude from the sentence?续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的部分。简言之，第一段的内容设计要成功搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁。续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文

13、章开头的遥相呼应，根据具体语境弘扬感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美，从而凸显主题，升华精神。考虑利用抒情和议论等表达方式使得画龙点睛之处能够表露文章深处蕴涵的主题意蕴、思想感情或人生哲理。Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(顽童顽童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this your car, sir? he

14、asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “I wish,” the boy we

15、nt on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in surprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driving in front of my

16、house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He wanted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. 分析原文语言表达方面的显著特征，观察有无直接引语、各类从句、特殊句型、非谓语动词等。通过模仿和创造，尽量提高与原文的协同，力求在各个语言层次（关键词、短语

17、和句型等）的表达风格上和原文保持一致。Paragraph 1:He got out and ran up to the steps. After a while, the boy pushed a wheelchair with a younger boy sitting in it. Its clear that the younger boy was his brother, who was unable to walk. As his brother saw the car, his eyes were shining.“The car belongs to this gentleman

18、. One day, I will give you a car too.” The boy said to his brother. Jack sat in his car, stunned. It dawned on him that he was totally wrong. “Could you please take us for a drive together? My younger brother loves cars very much.” The boy said. Without any hesitation, Jack agreed.“I wish I could be

19、 a brother like that.” Jack got out and lifted the boy to the front seat of his car.coherentreasonablelogicalcorrectadd some detailsuse different structuresParagraph 2: Jack got out and lifted the boy to the front seat of his car. Although they followed a normal route, the little boy was in high spi

20、rits as if he found himself in heaven. But to his surprise, the boy didnt enjoy the view. He only focused his attention on his brother. Moved deeply, Jack realized the best Christmas present was the concern from the bottom of the brothers heart rather than a car. Jack told them it was Christmas Eve,

21、 so the joyride was a gift for them. WRITING STEPS定位（定位（Determine）设计设计(Design)初稿初稿(Draft)核查核查(Check)Step1. Determine通过阅读定位所提供语言材料的核心信息，包括核心单词、短语和句子等，目的是梳理内容的发展脉络和推进方向。本步骤的关键在于高效的阅读，要求学生在尽可能短的时间内，基于对某种语言的掌握，利用分析综合、分类比较、归纳演绎、抽象概括等逻辑思维技能，调动知识体中的有关部分，去洞穿语篇的文脉肌理，积极寻找信息。Step2. Design设计出与上下文内容连贯、丰富充实、自然流畅、

22、引人入胜的情节走势。头脑风暴出核心词（以名词、动词、形容词、副词等内容词为主）即可，无需完整句子。在设计过程中，应充分考虑以下几点。 1. 续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接，而后者是容易忽视的部分。简言之，第一段的内容设计要成功搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁。 2. 续写第二段是文章的结尾，要关注与文章开头的遥相呼应，根据具体语境弘扬感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美，从而凸显主题，升华精神。考虑利用抒情和议论等表达方式使得画龙点睛之处能够表露文章深处蕴涵的主题意蕴、思想感情或人生哲理。3. 灵活运用各种描写手法，以帮助打造鲜活灵动的人物形象和丰

23、富充实的情节链条。以动作描写、语言描写和心理描写为主，辅之以恰当的外貌描写和环境描写。情节的推动主要靠动作描写，要完整描绘每一动作的前因和后果。语言描写包括独白和对话，可以反映人物情感、行为动机、或预示和推动故事情节的发展。心理描写聚焦于在某一境况下人物的内心活动，可以细腻地展示人物跌宕起伏的心路历程。外貌描写和环境描写的使用应根据情节发展和主题表达的实际需要Step3. Draft按照情节链条进行初稿的撰写。此过程应注意以下几点。 1. 分析原文语言表达方面的显著特征，观察有无直接引语、各类从句、特殊句型、非谓语动词等。通过模仿和创造，尽量提高与原文的协同，力求在各个语言层次（关键词、短语和

24、句型等）的表达风格上和原文保持一致。 2. 先在头脑里组织整个句子的语法结构和内容走势，然后动笔书写，从而下笔流畅、整洁美观，避免字字艰难、反复涂改。 3. 对词汇的选择务必字斟句酌、精挑细选。文章是语言文字编成的织锦，词汇是构成文章唯一的材料，是文章的色彩和音色，要确保围绕主题之下的词汇使用在理性思维引导下能够丰富多彩和恰当合理。Step 4. Check核查连接词、词数、语法词汇、和标点等五个方面。核查有无连接词的使用；如无，应增添连接词，以保持上下文的衔接和连贯。字数控制在150-160词范围内为佳。最后通读全文核查标点和语法词汇。AssignmentFinish writing your story after class and share it with your classmates.Read the possible version to pick out the sentences you like and keep them in mind.