读后续写阅卷心得课件.pptx

1、心后续写阅卷读得读后续写题型解读 提供一段提供一段350350词以内词以内的语言材料，要求考生依的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写（150150词左右词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻有逻辑衔接辑衔接、情节合理、完整情节合理、完整的短文。的短文。To is one thing, to is another.To is one thing, to is another.阅卷心得（三大方面）一、明确续写的评分标准一、明确续写的评分标准二、反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施二、反思学生续写中存在的

2、主要问题及应对措施三、备考续写的几点思考三、备考续写的几点思考一、明确读后续写的评分标准评分评分: : 先根据整体情况对文章进行先根据整体情况对文章进行定档定档，然后依据该档的，然后依据该档的相应要求来相应要求来确定或调节档确定或调节档次次，最后打分。，最后打分。打分打分主要从主要从续写续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构内容、词汇语法、篇章结构三方面考虑。三方面考虑。1.1.创造创造情节情节的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽度。的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽度。2.2.词汇、语法词汇、语法的准确性、恰当性及多样性。的准确性、恰当性及多样性。3.3.上下文的上下文的衔接衔接和全文的和全文的

3、连贯连贯性。性。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档次档次描描 述述第七档第七档（22-25分）分） 优秀档优秀档创造了创造了新颖、丰富、合理新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有的内容，富有逻辑性逻辑性，续写，续写完整完整，与原文情境，与原文情境融洽度融洽度高。高。使用了使用了多样且恰当的词汇多样且恰当的词汇和和语法语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段衔接手段，全文结构

4、清晰，全文结构清晰，前后呼应前后呼应，意义连贯。，意义连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档次档次描描 述述第六档第六档（18-21分）分） 良好档良好档创造了创造了比较比较丰富、合理的内容，丰富、合理的内容，比较比较有逻辑性，续写有逻辑性，续写比较比较完整，与原文情境融洽度完整，与原文情境融洽度比较比较高。高。使用了使用了比较比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有些许语法错误，不影响理解。多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有些许语法错误，不影响理解。比较比较有效地使用了段落间衔接手段，全文结构有

5、效地使用了段落间衔接手段，全文结构比较比较清晰，意义清晰，意义比较比较连贯。连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档次档次描描 述述第五档第五档（15-17分）分） 一般档一般档创造了创造了基本合理基本合理的内容，有的内容，有一定的逻辑性一定的逻辑性，续写，续写基本完整基本完整，与原文情境，与原文情境相关相关。使用了使用了比较恰当比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样不够多样，表达，表达有些有些错误，但错误，但基本不影响基本不影响理解。理解。使用了使用了语句间

6、衔接语句间衔接手段，全文结构手段，全文结构比较清晰比较清晰，意义，意义比较连贯比较连贯。读后续写的高考评分标准各档次给分范围和要求各档次给分范围和要求: : 总分为总分为2525分，按分，按7 7个档次个档次给分给分。评分评分档次档次描描 述述第四档第四档（11-14分）分） 较差档较差档（低级语法错（低级语法错误，如主宾格误，如主宾格使用混乱，时使用混乱，时态错误，拼写态错误，拼写错误等）错误等）创造了创造了基本完整基本完整的故事内容，但的故事内容，但有的有的情节情节不够合理不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关基本相关。使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有使用了简单的词

7、汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误部分语言错误和不恰当之处，和不恰当之处，个别个别部分部分影响影响理解。理解。尚有尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。12月模考续写优秀档作文必备条件：1 1）内容上内容上-有创新意识，情节展开，注意避免两段情节重复有创新意识，情节展开，注意避免两段情节重复，并注意前后文的呼应并注意前后文的呼应，与原文融洽度，关联度高与原文融洽度，关联度高2 2）写作尽可能传递正能量写作尽可能传递正能量3 3）语言表达流畅，避免低级语法错误，最好有细节描写语言表达流畅，避免低级语法错误，最好有细节描写4 4）对第二段所给

8、首句对第二段所给首句.started barking breathlessly.started barking breathlessly.的合的合理解读也是这篇文章能否上优秀档的关键因素。理解读也是这篇文章能否上优秀档的关键因素。二、学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施：阅读方面，学生的问题主要是阅读方面，学生的问题主要是词汇贫乏词汇贫乏和和阅读能力不够阅读能力不够或或时间紧张没有意识到解读文本的重要性时间紧张没有意识到解读文本的重要性(1)(1)词汇贫乏词汇贫乏(2)(2)阅读能力不足阅读能力不足二、学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施：续写写作部分，主要在续写写作部分，主要在内容内容（逻辑性、

9、合理性），（逻辑性、合理性），词汇和词汇和语法语法（丰富、准确），以及（丰富、准确），以及语篇语篇（连贯性，前后呼应）这（连贯性，前后呼应）这三三大大方面方面存在问题存在问题文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。融洽度不高，衔接不合理。融洽度不高，衔接不合理。大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。主题升华牵强或跑偏。主题升华牵强或跑偏。1. 内容（逻辑性、合理性）-情节构建中的问题：2

10、. 词汇和语法方面存在的问题：词汇词汇-使用过多的上义词，不会替换相应下义词；使用过多的上义词，不会替换相应下义词； 重复使用同一词语；重复使用同一词语； 基础词汇拼写及词性错误较多基础词汇拼写及词性错误较多(injure, injured, injury, die, death, dead, sleep, asleep; (injure, injured, injury, die, death, dead, sleep, asleep; hurt, bite, fight, hit; hurt, bite, fight, hit; thief, theft, chef, chief.)thi

11、ef, theft, chef, chief.)语法语法-通篇都是简单句的堆积；通篇都是简单句的堆积； 非谓语的使用出现语法错误；非谓语的使用出现语法错误； 时态、语态的错误；时态、语态的错误； 低级语言错误低级语言错误( (如主宾格不分，谓语动词单复数使用混乱等如主宾格不分，谓语动词单复数使用混乱等) )衔接不符合逻辑，如要求续写的第一段最后一句与所给第二段衔接不符合逻辑，如要求续写的第一段最后一句与所给第二段首句连接不当，或两段间毫不关联；首句连接不当，或两段间毫不关联；句子之间逻辑不严密，不能有效借助连词、代词、副词等语言句子之间逻辑不严密，不能有效借助连词、代词、副词等语言手段建立清晰

12、合理的逻辑关系。手段建立清晰合理的逻辑关系。3. 语篇的衔接连贯方面：针对上述问题的应对措施：分期有计划地进行读后续写专题指导课：分期有计划地进行读后续写专题指导课：如何有效构建续写情节如何有效构建续写情节如何打磨续写语言（词汇和句式两个层面）如何打磨续写语言（词汇和句式两个层面）Show,dont tell!Show,dont tell!What is What is plotplot? ?Plot is the way an author creates and organizes a chain of events in a narrative. The plot must follow

13、 a logical, attractive format that draws the reader in. Plot differs from “story” in that it highlights a specific and purposeful cause-and-effect relationship between a sequence of major events in the narrative.Plot is a literary term defined as the events that make up a story, particularly as they

14、 relate to one another in a pattern, in a sequence, through cause and effect.The exposition introduces the , describes theand establishes the in the story.The rising action is where builds and the problem gets worse and becomes more .The climax is in the story. It is usually the most exciting part i

15、n the story and the part that makes the reader eager to keep reading.The falling action is the events that happen after the climax and lead to a resolution.The resolution is the outcome of the story. It is how things end up or turn out for the characters.1. 1. 文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离2. 2.

16、 违背真实生活，缺乏合理性违背真实生活，缺乏合理性3. 3. 融洽度不高，衔接不合理融洽度不高，衔接不合理4. 4. 大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡5. 5. 主题升华牵强或跑偏主题升华牵强或跑偏读读 -（plots+language+clues）内容 -who, when, where, what(He met her at a party and finally got married. Before death, he left her a letter asking for forgiving.) why+how(续写内容续写内容)线索线索/意图意图-

17、（多为结尾或主旨服务）（多为结尾或主旨服务）.He was tolerant, kind, warm and careful. He was such a good man.And every time she made coffee for him, she put in some salt, the way he liked it. After 40 years, he passed away and left her a letter.两个段首句是重要的续写提示，在很大程度上指明了两个段首句是重要的续写提示，在很大程度上指明了情节的发展方向。对段首句分析，进行设问，可有效情节的发展方向。

18、对段首句分析，进行设问，可有效地推理续写的主要情节。地推理续写的主要情节。第一段第一段-三个三个逻辑上逻辑上的衔接（的衔接（原文原文+段首句段首句+第二段段首句第二段段首句）第二段第二段-关注与文章开头的遥相呼应（关注与文章开头的遥相呼应（线索线索/意图意图），），根据具体语境弘扬真善美根据具体语境弘扬真善美Para 1: My dearest, please forgive me for my cheating you all the time. Do you still remember our first date in the cafe?_Para 2: She was shocked

19、 by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. _对第一段段首句进行设问：对第一段段首句进行设问：What happened at their first date in the cafe?What did he do to cheat her and why did he cheat her?Why did he cheat her all the 40 years?Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. _对第二段段首句进行设问：

20、对第二段段首句进行设问：Would she forgive him for his life-long lie?Why or why not?*? She broke down, regretting her naive decision to marry him. Never would she forgive him and never would she marry him if given a second chance.*? Reflecting on what he had done for her in the past 40 years, she began to unders

21、tand his white lie and chose to forgive him. She would definitely marry him again if given a second chance.*在不影响主要情节的前提下，可适当合理地在不影响主要情节的前提下，可适当合理地增加部分次要情节增加部分次要情节*可依据需要增加适当可依据需要增加适当细节描写细节描写（环境，心理，（环境，心理，外貌等）外貌等）小提示：小提示：1.1.高级词汇的选择遵循高级词汇的选择遵循具体性原则具体性原则，晚词优先原则晚词优先原则1) a good/nice woman a warm-hearted/

22、generous/honest woman2) Finding the lost diamond ring would be difficult. Finding the lost diamond ring would be challenging.3) Ashleighs carelessness caused the loss of the diamond ring. Ashleighs carelessness were responsible for . 小提示：小提示：2. 避免重复使用同一词语避免重复使用同一词语1) The Hannahs thanked Korey, sayin

23、g “Thank you for your kindness, or we will never have it” again and again.2) The Hannahs expressed their gratitude to Korey, saying “Thank you for your kindness, or never will we have it” again and again. Abundant sentence patterns Abundant sentence patterns思考翻译：穿着白色裙子，这个女孩儿看起来非常漂亮。思考翻译：穿着白色裙子，这个女孩儿

24、看起来非常漂亮。(1) The girl wears a white skirt, and she looks (1) The girl wears a white skirt, and she looks beautiful.beautiful.(2) Wearing a white skirt, the girl looks pretty (2) Wearing a white skirt, the girl looks pretty beautiful.beautiful.(3)(3) Wearing Wearing a white skirt, the girl appears a w

25、hite skirt, the girl appears absolutely absolutely , , making making me fall in love me fall in love with her.with her.(1) In order to show her husband where to turn, Ashleigh screamed out, gesturing wildly with her left hand.(2) So out of the car dashed the Hannahs.(3) They stared at the car, tremb

26、ling with rage and depress.(4) Fortunately, this month Korey made contact with Daniel Hannah, to whom she explained the whole thing. (5) Hannah, deeply touched by what Korey did, cried out with gratitude.(6) On Mothers Day, the moment Ashleighs son presented the lost ring to his mother, she recogniz

27、ed it at the first sight and danced forward to catch it as if a kid had got treasure. 在续写文本中，熟练应用并列句在续写文本中，熟练应用并列句(6)，三大从句，三大从句(4,5)，非谓语动词非谓语动词(1,3,5)和特殊句式和特殊句式(2)。Abundant sentence patternsAbundant sentence patterns 根据实际情况在文章中交替使用长句与短句，使得文章错落有致，这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感，而且使文章读起来铿锵有力，如:Later, the couple came

28、back home. Then they searched the car for hours once again with the last ray of hope. After that, they had no choice but to give up. They stared at their car desperately.Later, the couple came back home. After searching the car for hours with the last ray of hope, they had no choice but to give up,

29、staring at the car desperately.1) The Hannahs were very exhausted and depressed. They couldnt drive to the event as planned. The Hannahs were too exhausted and depressed to drive to the event as planned.2) Ashleigh was touched by her kindness. She cried out with gratitude. Ashleigh was so touched th

30、at she cried out with gratitude. So touched was Ashleigh that.3) On Mothers Day, Ashleighs son presented the lost ring to his mother. And she recognized it at the first sight.On Mothers Day, the moment Ashleighs son presented the lost ring to his mother, she recognized it at the first sight.三、备考读后续写

31、的几点思考：1.1.读后续写，读是基础。读的深度决定写的高度。读后续写，读是基础。读的深度决定写的高度。2.2.要想学生写得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的语言输入无疑是必不可少的要想学生写得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的语言输入无疑是必不可少的. .做好高中三年阅读规划，精读与泛读有效结合。做好高中三年阅读规划，精读与泛读有效结合。3.3.课堂教学的指导上：可以组织学生进行小组讨论，读写展示活动、小组互评课堂教学的指导上：可以组织学生进行小组讨论，读写展示活动、小组互评活动等多活动等多。同时，老师们同时，老师们要要有步骤地进行写作方法微技能的指导。有步骤地进行写作方法微技能的指导。4.4.写作输出方面，帮助学生规范写作，形成素养。写作输出方面，帮助学生规范写作，形成素养。Nothing is too difficult if you put all your heart into it.