2021届高三英语考场作文读后续写下水文指导：走出火山谷.docx

1、2021 届高三英语考场作文读后续写下水文指导：走出火山谷 题目： On a steamy morning in July, Clay and Acaimie Chastain arrived at the base of Mount Liamuiga on the Caribbean island of St. Kitts, ready to spend a day of their honeymoon climbing Mount Liamuiga. The highest point on St. Kitts, Liamuiga is also a dormant (休眠的) volca

2、no that starts in the clouds and plunges down to meet the sea. They couldnt find a visitor centre or hire a guide, so they set off on their own. They reached the peak around noon and ate their sandwiches looking out over the ocean and surrounding islands. Thats when Clay saw it: a small trail that l

3、ed into the volcanos crater(坑), a bowl of green with cloud forest giving way to green grass. A series of screw eyes(螺钉孔) had been drilled into the rocks, with ropes that led down. Clay wanted to go down and take some pictures. Acaimie followed him a little way, but she was very cautious and quite sc

4、ared of heights; so Clay went on alone. A few minutes later, she heard a crasha noise that sounded like a large branch snapping，followed by the sound of something big rolling downhill. “Clay?” she called. Silence. Uneasy, she waited a minute and shouted againstill nothing. And then, from somewhere m

5、uch further down, she heard a weak cry for help. This time she was certain: It was Clay calling for help from deep within the crater. As she looked over the lip of the volcano, she tried to stop some of her worst worries. Her phone wasnt getting a signal, and her cries for help were met with only si

6、lence. “Clay! she shouted as loud as she could. Clay, are you OK?” Acaimie grasped the rope and began climbing down the trail. When the path became too steep, she slid on her butt, her legs and arms getting bruised and scraped in the process. Then, just off the trail, she saw a flash of red. It was

7、Clays scarf. And next to it was his cell phone. She grabbed both and continued down, screaming for Clay all the way. “Help, he said in that strange voice. Im coming! Stay where you are,” she said. 注意: 1.续写词数应为 150 左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Finally, she spotted Clay. Acaimie had to push those thoughts

8、 away and focus on what could do. 简要分析： 若干个要素： Time: On a steamy morning in July Characters: Clay and Acaimie Chastain(cautious, scared of heights) Purpose: spend a day of their honeymoon climbing Mount Liamuiga Place: a dormant volcano 情感变化：uneasy, worried, cries for help 一些物件：Clays scarf, his cell

9、 phone, a crash of branch 提示：上面要素是必须列出来的，因为小说要素多，一丌小心就漏掉重要的，好 记性丌如烂笔头。 如何写： 读后续写最快捷的办法就是将情节场景化， 然后在各个场景之间进行有效的衔接。 Finally, she spotted Clay. 场景一：Clays situation 场景二：Acaimes care 场景三：Acaimes concern (the rope cannot stand their weight) Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what could d

10、o. 场景四：find a tunnel leading out through the cloud forest 场景五：overcome her fear and grope for the way 场景六: see the light, hug each other 为什么想到隧道：因为研究死火山在 bbc 探索频道里非常常见的，而这个火山又 在森林里，也可以有溶洞（cave）,宜兴的溶洞就很多。 由于高考作文评分标准着重于六大要素：主题（照应文章线索）、句式、衔接、 用词、细节描写（动作和情绪描写），逻辑（情节符合逻辑）因此我这篇作文： 主题：显性主题克服困难，走出火山谷；隐性主题夫妻

11、之间的爱能战胜 一切困难包括害怕。 句式：非谓语动词、定语从句、名词性从句、对话、强调句、虚拟语气、感叹句、 倒装句、连动句、物称主语句、状语从句 衔接：those thought 用了两个句子做铺垫。 我尽力都用课标词汇，基本都没有超纲词汇。 Finally, she spotted Clay. 场景一： Lying on his back, Clay moaned bitterly. His trousers were torn to pieces and splashed with blood, which immediately brought tears to her eyes. 场

12、景二： Heartbroken as she was, Acaime bandaged his wounds carefully with his scarf. 场景三： It was four oclock now! Fear crept upon her heart what if a wolf appeared out of nowhere? what if they were starved to death?. 衔接句： “Honey, we need to find a new way out before the sun sets.” Clays voice awakened h

13、er. Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what could do. 场景四： “Right! The rope couldn t stand our weight.” She looked around only to find something glimmering in the deepest forest. She approached it in curiosity. God! What a big tunnel to the outside! She dashed back and told Clay he

14、r discovery, her voice trembling with excitement. 场景五： She held Clay by the arm and led him to the entrance, edging their way through the tunnel. 场景六： It took them a century to finish such a long journey. What met them were the final sunrays, in which they hugged tightly in tears. It must be love th

15、at got them through the darkest time. 完整的： Finally, she spotted Clay. Lying on his back, Clay moaned bitterly. His trousers were torn to pieces and splashed with blood, which immediately brought tears to her eyes. Heartbroken as she was, Acaime bandaged his wounds carefully with the scarf. It was fo

16、ur oclock now! Fear crept upon her heart what if a wolf appeared out of nowhere? what if they were starved to death?.“Honey, we need to find a new way out before the sun sets.” Clay s voice awakened her. Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what could do. “Right! The rope couldnt sta

17、nd our weight.” She looked around only to find something glimmering in the deepest forest. She approached it in curiosity. God! What a big tunnel to the outside! She dashed back and told Clay her discovery, her voice trembling with excitement. She held Clay by the arm and led him to the entrance, ed

18、ging their way through the tunnel. It took them a century to finish such a long journey. What met them were the final sunrays, in which they hugged tightly in tears. It must be love that got them through the darkest time. （177 words） 附原文答案： Finally, she spotted Clay. He was sitting on the ground, bl

19、ood running down his face. Clay, she called in an anxious voice. Whats wrong? Have you broken anything? With a confused look on his face, Clay just stared at her and couldnt remember anything that had happened. Perhaps the rope hed been holding had snapped, or maybe hed just missed a step, but it wa

20、s clear hed fallen a long way. Acaimic had to stay calm for Clay, but inside she was in great panic, worried that he had internal injuries that could kill him. Acaimie had to push those thoughts away and focus on what she could do. She helped him up, had him hold the rope tight and pushed him from b

21、ehind. Inch by inch, they climbed. After what felt like forever, they reached the top. As they made their way down the trail, Clays breathing became more laboured. Acaimie kept shouting for help, but they didnt see anyone. Thankfully, about halfway down she managed to get a signal and call an ambulance. To their relief, by the time they reached the bottom, the ambulance was waiting for them. （173words）