江苏省四校联考英语“读后续写”写作指导（附原创下水文）.docx

1、江苏省四校联考英语“读后续写”写作指导（附原创下水文） 江苏省苏州中学、常州中学、扬州中学、盐城中学四校联考英语【读后续写原题】 Eggs，bacon, bagels, and croissants(羊角面包）her favourite meal of the day sat right in front of her telling her to have more, probably just this one day. Her hand reached out for the last croissant; “ STOP said her mind, “ PLEASEbegged the

2、 nineteen-year-old heart. Annie could feel the tires around her waist, weighing her down, emotionally and physically. She pulled her hand back, eyeing the inviting croissant, which would have been hers if only she had not decided to follow her dream, a dream which seemed beyond her reach. But there

3、she was, she wanted it, and wanted it badly, a fantasy of a teenager to fit into the beautiful peacock green bikini(比基尼). A trip had been planned, to the sunny beaches, by a group of friends, and the trip included her. She used to sit depressed listening to her slim friends discuss about the kind of

4、 clothes they purchased, and how short each of their skirts were，and how beautiful they looked. She wanted to see their expression change from surprise to admiration, so she decided to go on diet and take fitness courses. Weeks passed and her patience started to die away. The fat was stubborn and re

5、fused to melt fast, but the time went fast. No matter how less she ate, she still looked awfully plump(胖的), which annoyed her and she was ready to call it quits. She sat on her bed and wept an entire evening ignoring her dinner. Her tears dried up, and she lay down on her bed staring at the ceiling,

6、 letting random thoughts pass through her mind, Then she heard two women talking outside her window. She heard one woman saying: “My child is special, and every child is gods gift. It doesnt matter whats on the outside, inner self is what matters. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为 150 大右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Curious,

7、 Annie got up and looked out of her window. _ Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her own figure in the mirror. _ 【写作指导】 一、概括本文中心思想 Main idea The passage focuses on the transformation of a plump girl. At first she tried to lose weight in order to fit into beautiful clothes like her sli

8、m friends. She even imagined wearing the beautiful peacock green bikini(比基尼) walking leisurely on the beach, for which she made considerable sacrifices and suffered a great deal. Later she was touched by a scene outside her window and understood it doesnt matter whats on the outside,inner self is wh

9、at matters. 二、续写详细步骤 Detailed procedures (一) 获取基本信息 acquire detailed information 1. 归纳基本信息 summarize basic information 人物 characters: Annie, two women (who) 时间 time: at meal time (when) 地点 location : at home ; outside the window (where) 事件 event :The heroine feel annoyed and depressed while losing w

10、eight ；overheard something by two women and became curious (what) 2. 回答问题，理清故事情节 做合乎逻辑的预测 clarify the storyline and make logical prediction 1) Why did Annies mind say “ STOP” in the first paragraph? 2) In what way did she manage to achieve her goal？ 3) Was Annie confident enough about her plan? 4) H

11、ow did she like the process? 5) Why do you think Annie was curious about what she heard outside? 6) What would she see outside the window and would it produce any influence on her? (prediction) 3. 整理上述答案形成以下情节思路图 Annie intended to lose weight- struggled not to take in yummy meals necessary for good

12、health - a meaningless dream /plan beyond reach - tough and wanted to call it quits- maybe inspired by something out of ordinary outside the window-would quit the plan and her life would return to normal . (二) 第二次阅读获取并预测情感发展线索 frustrated and annoyed: while on a diet curious and moved: what she overh

13、eard and saw light-hearted and refreshed: after deciding to quit the plan and would start a normal life. (三) 预测情节发展 predict the development of the story 1. 情节构思 construction of the plot Predict and construct the plot as well as details.Try to create a physically abnormal person (disabled on the outs

14、ide) with positive attitude towards life or noble deeds (respectable in terms of inner self.) whose deeds or attitude towards life helped Annie change. 2. 连贯上下文，避免写跑题 coherence of the passages given and to be written Para 1. The focus is what she saw outside the window, which ought to fit in with wh

15、at the two women said “My child is special, and every child is gods gift. It doesnt matter whats on the outside,inner self is what matters. First, it must be an abnormal or a disabled child on the outside who had something to do with one of the woman. In addition, the girl must have some fine qualit

16、y like optimism or something like that.(inner self is respectable) Para 2. Moved by the scene outside, Annie resolved to quit her meaningless plan and no longer would she have to avoid consuming her favorite food that maintained good health and her life was to be on the right track. 【原创下水作文 1】 Curio

17、us, Annie got up and looked out of her window. What greeted her eyes were two neatly-dressed women chatting. But something else arrested her attention. There, about one or two yards away a girl with a slim figure was dancing merrily to music. Her beautiful skirt was whirling perfectly in the air. An

18、nie was somehow envious of her. A closer look,however, took her greatly by surprise. It was a crippled girl ! Annie continued to watch. The bright smiles on her face, the confidence in her manner and her graceful dance struck her to the heart. Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her ow

19、n figure in the mirror. She found she was not that ugly and since she was also a gift from the God ,there was no need to copy others. Let the peacock bikini go to hell ! Freed from the torture, she became light-hearted . She decided to first satisfy her grumbling stomach by consuming her yummy meal

20、and follow a regular balanced diet from the next day. After all possessing sound health outweighs physical pursuit. 【原创下水作文 2】 Curious, Annie got up and looked out of her window. It was Mrs Jones and another middle-aged woman living in the same community. Not far from them was Uncle Jones, who exper

21、ienced cerebral infarction (脑梗) two months ago and was now on recovery . Uncle Johnson was an incredibly remarkable figure in the neighbour, devoting all his spare time and energies to helping the underprivileged. He was said to prone to paralyze unless trained scientifically. Toddling like a 2-year

22、-old, he struggled along independently, refusing to be supported by Mrs Johnson. Sweat was streaming down his cheeks, but he was glowing with smiles and excitement, satisfied with every inch forward. Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her own figure in the mirror. What she was really

23、concerned about was not her slight obesity but the words she overheard ,which lingered in her mind. Motivated by what she saw and overheard, she decided to put an end to her plan and dedicate herself to helping others like Uncle Jones. By doing this not only would she brighten the lives of of others but also she would possess inner abundance in soul.