2021届高考英语高三一轮复习读后续写典例分析+范文欣赏（3） 附自主练习与答案）.docx

1、读后续写典例分析+范文欣赏（3） 读后续写深度解读:典例分析 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Lost,Injured, and Cold Threedays earlier, I was on a guided group horseback journey through the Montanabackcountry. After we pitched camp in the morning, I decided to go on a solotrail run. I picked an 8-mile circle on another guys map an

2、d showed himmy intended route so he would know where I was headed. Then I packed a bag withsnacks and water and planned to be back by mid-afternoon. Iset off under a clear sky, but after about 1.5 miles, dark clouds rolled in. Burnt,fallen trees from a wildfire were covering the trail. It disappeare

3、dunder the debris (残骸)and I lost track of it. I began to feel disappointed;everything felt much more remote than I had expected. As I consideredbacktracking, it started to rain, so I hid under a tree to stay dry. Daylightdiminished and the temperature dropped. I was wearing only running shorts and a

4、T-shirtno match for an August night in Montana at nearly 6,000 feet. Iheld my backpackagainst my chest, put my face in the opening, andsealed the flap around the edge of my cap. Each breath filled the backpack withhot air to warm my body. Soon I fell asleep. Inthe morning, sunlight crept (爬行)across

5、the valley and finally warmed my back. I wondered how long it would takefor rescuers to find me off the trailbecause the trees weremostly burnt, I was in a fairly visible spot. But as the day progressed, Iworried about dehydration (脱水).I decided to head downhill in search of a stream. I lifted my le

6、g andplaced my foot flat on the ground, then propped (撑起) myself up on my hands and pushed mybottom forward. Carefully, I moved downhill, placing my leg ahead of me andcrab-walking after it. It was slow going, but this method kept the pain to aminimum. 续写要求： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右； 2. 至少使用 5 个以上短文中标有下

7、划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: Around4 p.m., I heard the distant thunder of a helicopter. Paragraph 2: Atsunrise I found the path. 参考答案 【思路点拨】 1. 文本细解读，确定续写方向 本文是记叙文， 讲述了一个作者在一次马背之旅中， 早上独自一人去小道长跑， 丌料途中丛林着火；小径在野火之下无法辨认，作者也迷路了。夜晚，作者借着背 包呾帽子取暖，勉强度过了一夜。第二天，在等待救

8、援的过程中，作者为了避免脱 水，艰难地以仰卧的方式挪动着去找水。续写部分应为故事的结局，即作者是否获 救。 根据文章内容可知， 作者出门前在一位伙伴的地图上圈了自己打算长跑的路线， 可以推知，作者最终是可能获救的。 2. 段首句解读，确定续写方向 续写第一段首句写道“下午四点钟的时候，我听到远处传来直升机的轰鸣声”， 第二段首句写道“日出时分，我找到了路”，由此可知，第一段内容可以着重描写 作者看到直升飞机后兴奋的心情，直升飞机离开后作者沮丧的心理，及第二个夜晚 作者是如何度过的。可设想，作者在又累又饿又渴的情况下昏昏睡去。续写第二段 内容应着重描写作者找到路之后，如何获救。可设想，作者找到了

9、路，说明他已经 离开了人烟稀少的焦土地，这是他失联的第三天，救援工作会更加紧张，最终的结 果是作者得救了。 3. 划线词解读，规划续写细节 1) 分类划线词 人物guy，rescuers 时间night 环境trail，stream 事物backpack，horseback，water 动作disappeared 心情disappointed 2) 构思具体情节 第一段情节：我徆兴奋直升飞机飞近我上空我挥手呼喊飞机飞离 （disappeared），我徆失望（disappointed）夜晚（night）来临，我昏昏睡 去 第二段情节： 我发现了路路上碰见了救援人员 （rescuers） 喂我水

10、（water） 喝最终获救。 【范文欣赏】 Paragraph 1: Around 4 p.m., I heard the distantthunder of a helicopter.Excitement shot through my mind. Someone was looking for me. Thehelicopter appeared over the canyon, then turned my way. I waved, but it passedoverhead and disappeared. I was disappointed. Around 8:30 p.m.,

11、I stopped on a rockfor the night. By the time it was completely dark, I was too exhaustedto keep awake. Before I knew it, I was asleep. Paragraph2: At sunrise I found the path. As I sat considering myoptions, three men on horseback appeared down the trail. My heartbeat heavily. “Im over here!” I sho

12、uted. The rescuers rushed over. Asthey talked to me and I drank water, I realized just how inactive mymind was. They told me I should be proud of myself, helpedme onto a horse, and guided me to safety through the canyon that had almostkilled me. 亮点积累 1. 词汇 disappear v. 消失；disappointedadj. 失望的；inacti

13、ve adj. 丌活跃的 2. 短语 drift to sleep 昏昏睡去； rushover 冲过去；beproud of. 为自豪 3. 提分句式 They told me I should beproud of myself, helped me onto a horse, and escorted me to safety through thecanyon that had almost killed me. 分析本句是个复合句，me 后省略了 told 的宾语从句中的引导词 that，canyon 后 that 引导定语从句，修饰先行词 canyon。 译文 他们告诉我，我应该为

14、自己感到骄傲，并帮我骑上马，护送我穿过差点要了 我命的峡谷，到达安全地带。 读后续写深度解读:自主练习 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 I served as a Newport Beach ocean lifeguardfor five seasons with pleasure and honor in Orange County, California. WheneverI could, I got shifts working here, which was known for its massive currents.If you wanted to s

15、ave lives, thats where you worked. Late in a shift, I was working Tower15. Two blocks to my right was another guard named Mike, working Tower17. Id known Mike for several years. He phoned me, “I got a couple kids. Imgoing to give them a warning. Keep an eye on us.” Anytime you get out of your tower,

16、youre supposed to let somebody else know, in case a situation develops. He hung up the phone and graspedhis buoy (浮标) when a surf came and the kids weregetting sucked out. Mike saw it before its happening, and he srunningtoward the ocean. I scanned but only to see two small noses floating abovethe w

17、ater. I dropped my binos ( 望 远 镜 ) and called, “Double rescue17hes out. Im going.” Mike was already pushing through the surf line. The mother of the two then realizedwhat was happening. She screamed when Mike reached the kids. Mike toldme later that he got to the boy first, and when he turned to the

18、 girl, he hadto reach down into the water and caught her by the hair to pull her back up. Mikeswam sideways out of the current into the clear water. When I reached themother, Mike was in waist-deep water. The kids were too exhausted to walk, soMike was carrying them, one under each arm. I turned to

19、the mother and said,“Hey, its OK. Theyre safe.” I saw her terror start to disappear.However, when she glanced back and got her first good look at Mike, a crazything happened. I saw a new kind of panic wash over heras thoughthere s some new, equally dangerous threat on her kids lives. She rushed up t

20、oMike, caught her kids and turned up the beach. Not even a thank-you. 续写要求： 1. 所续写短文词数应为 150 左右； 2. 至少使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph1: Mike had a rough upbringing, whichcan be figured out just by looking at him. _ _ _ Paragraph2: To the mother, j

21、udging from theappearance, Mike wasnt a hero but a really threatening guy. _ _ _ 参考答案 【范文欣赏】 Paragraph1: Mike had a rough upbringing, whichcan be figured out just by looking at him. He has a number of really frighteningtattoos (纹身), and his shaved head showed thescar he got from a broken beer bottle

22、. Maybe he wasnt the friendliest lifeguardon the beach and lacked professional skills, but his lifesaving ability couldmake up for everything. If any other guard had been working 17 that night,including me, there would be a very real chance that the mother wasntgoing home with both her kids. Paragra

23、ph2: To the mother, judging from theappearance, Mike wasnt a hero but a really threatening guy. I couldnt even imaginethe depth of her terror. I have a young son and daughter myself, and I am verysympathetic with her. It was not hard to understand what had happened in herheart. Mike just glanced at me, shrugged. As we jogged back to our towers,I promised that Id never let my own fear or prejudice prevent me fromrecognizing a hero whenever I saw one.