2020年7月山东高考卷读后续写-邻里关爱课件（26张ppt）.ppt

1、读后续写 01原文一致原则原文一致原则 内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯 语言表达语言表达风格一致风格一致。 03曲折性原则曲折性原则 凡是凡是故事都应有故事都应有跌宕跌宕起起 伏伏，其中人物会遇到困，其中人物会遇到困 难或问题，但难或问题，但最终能解最终能解 决决。 02正能量原则正能量原则 故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘扬社会主义，弘扬社会主义 核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定 回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但 最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，是言归于好，和睦

2、相处和睦相处； 犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定 是绳之以法，是绳之以法，等等。等等。 三大原则 写作指导 四个步骤四个步骤 细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架 仔细阅读仔细阅读所给所给两段的首两段的首 句句，结合正能量结尾结合正能量结尾， 思考大致框架思考大致框架。 读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络 读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事， 弄清大意和主题，理清弄清大意和主题，理清 故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。 修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写 思考再三，把修正润色后思考再三，把修正润色后

3、的续写整洁地写入答卷。的续写整洁地写入答卷。 增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作 根据“所见根据“所见/ /遇所想，遇所想， 所为所感”等构思具体所为所感”等构思具体 细节。细节。 +The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to hel

4、p each other meet the challenges. n.社区 n.经济 在衰退中 v.奋斗，挣扎 使收支相抵 迎接挑战 阅读下面材料阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构使之构 成一篇完整的短文成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为续写的词数应为150左右左右。 +Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and th

5、ey needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. adj.体贴的 +One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The lit

6、tle boy his name was Bernard had interested her very much. +“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I dont see what he can do.” +After their mother left the room, the children sat t

7、hinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money.” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” +“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” v.受苦 v.帮助，协助 +For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great i

8、dea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完 成）.” +The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us？Well, we can make popcorn （爆米花）, and put it i

9、nto paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” 突然站起来 n.解决办法 全神贯注 跳起来 +Paragraph 1Paragraph 1： +When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. +Paragraph 2Paragraph 2： +With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 1 读懂大意，读懂大意

10、， 理清脉络理清脉络 主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意， 特别要弄清故事的特别要弄清故事的人物人物，时态时态( (通常是一般通常是一般 过去时过去时) )，事件事件( (故事的起因和经过故事的起因和经过) )，语言语言 特色特色( (以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保 持持不变不变) )，等等。，等等。 人物时态和事件人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变语言特色不要变 1 Setting (under what circumstances the story takes place) Characters Plot Theme

11、The economy was bad, people lost their jobs and they were trying to help each other. Mrs. Meredith, John, Harry, Clara, Bernard. the sick man and his wife. Mrs. Meredith was warm-hearted and helping people in need. Mrs. Meredith told her children about Bernard and his family. All the three children

12、wanted to help Bernard and John thought up the popcorn plan. Love among the neighbors. 语言特色语言特色(language styles)(language styles) 1.When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought i

13、t was a good one, too. (语言特色是：语言特色是： ) When引导的时间状语从句引导的时间状语从句 语言特色语言特色(language styles)(language styles) 1. After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money.” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We r

14、eally should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完成）（完成）.” (语言特色是：语言特色是： ) 对话对话 两段首句定一框两段首句定一框 由续写的第一段首句与第由续写的第一段首句与第 二段首句确定第一段的框架。二段首句确定第一段的框架。 二框二首

15、正能量二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段第二段的框架，由第二段 首句与正能量结尾来确定。首句与正能量结尾来确定。 细读首句，细读首句， 构思框架构思框架 Para.1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Para.2 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 构 思 框 架 由第由第1段首句段首句“Mrs. Meredith. thought it was a good one”及第”及第2

16、段首句段首句“With everything ready.Bernard” 可知，本段应写“爆米花计划”的准备过程并告知可知，本段应写“爆米花计划”的准备过程并告知 Bernard该计划。该计划。 01. 两段首句定一框两段首句定一框。 Paragraph 1Paragraph 1： 注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。 构 思 框 架 由续写的第二段首句由续写的第二段首句“ Bernard started.Bernard started.”可知，可知， 本段主要描述本段主要描述BernardBernard实施“爆米花计划”的过程以实施“爆米花计划”的过程以 及邻居对此的反应及

17、邻居对此的反应 01. 由正能量结尾，可知，最终爆米花都卖出去了，由正能量结尾，可知，最终爆米花都卖出去了， BernardBernard赚到钱补贴家用。赚到钱补贴家用。 02. Paragraph Paragraph 2 2： 二框二首正能量二框二首正能量。 构 思 框 架 how to make popcornhow to make popcorn 01. when to tell the plan to Bernard and his when to tell the plan to Bernard and his parentsparents 02. Paragraph Paragra

18、ph 1 1： 根据以上分析，列出每段的根据以上分析，列出每段的3 3个问题个问题 Bernard and his parents response to the Bernard and his parents response to the planplan 03. 构 思 框 架 where to sell the popcornwhere to sell the popcorn 01. peoples response to Bernardpeoples response to Bernard 02. Paragraph Paragraph 2 2： 根据以上分析，列出每段的根据以上分析

19、，列出每段的3 3个问题个问题 how Bernard feelshow Bernard feels 03. 3 增加细节，增加细节， 开始写作开始写作 在已定在已定框架框架范围内范围内，依据依据 情节发展和生活常识，情节发展和生活常识，推断故事推断故事 中人物所见、中人物所见、所闻、所遇、所闻、所遇、所思、所思、 所说、所说、所做等所做等给给每段增加每段增加5 5至至8 8个个 具体细节具体细节，我们称之为叫，我们称之为叫“58“58细细 节添加法节添加法”。 3 构思 Paragraph 1 Paragraph 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns id

20、ea, she thought it was a good one, too. Paragraph 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 所做 网购机器，告知计划 机器到货，学习使用 所想 感动不已，终能赚钱 构思 Paragraph 2 Paragraph 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Paragraph 2: With everything ready, Bernard

21、 started out on his new business. 日子虽苦，人心却暖 挨家售卖，都帮一二 所想 邻里大爱，衷心感知 4 修改润色，修改润色， 整洁誊写整洁誊写 审读初稿，注意语义是审读初稿，注意语义是 否衔接，前后是否连贯，事否衔接，前后是否连贯，事 件是否符合逻辑，语言特色件是否符合逻辑，语言特色 是否与前文一致。在修改润是否与前文一致。在修改润 色之后，整齐工整地誊写在色之后，整齐工整地誊写在 答卷上。答卷上。 4 Paragraph 1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good o

22、ne, too. Then, Mrs. Meredith searched the Internet and ordered a household popcorn machine. After that, Mrs. Meredith, together with her three children, paid another visit to the family and told them about the popcorn plan. Needless to say, they were deeply moved, especially Bernard who finally foun

23、d a way to make money for his family. A few days later, the machine was delivered to Mrs. Merediths doorstep. And it wasnt long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn. Paragraph 2 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Although it was a hard time and t

24、hings were tight for everybody, Bernards business worked out quite well. He carried the popcorn on his small bike, going from door to door to sell it. People were surprised to see such a little, poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors, but eventually almost all of them would buy a bag or two. It is love that makes the world go round and Bernard felt it deep in his little heart. 每个人的日子都不好过 THANKS