2020南京三模作文指导：勇士的理解.docx

1、2020 南京三模作文指导：勇士的理解南京三模作文指导：勇士的理解 南京三模的作文题非常接地气，将课标主题（人与社会）和时政结合在一起了，不落 俗套。 新时代的勇士是怎样的定义？ 这个话题有很多可写的，一定要选好点。勇士在我看来有两个要求：对自己，要求敢 于拥抱未知，走出舒适区；对社会，要承担责任，排除万难，有亮剑精神。 这就是一分为二分析话题。 写这篇文章的时候，我想到了两个： 1.马斯克说的：我嚼着玻璃，凝视深渊。 2.最美的逆行者 题目 请阅读下面材料，并按照要求用英语写一篇 150 词左右的文章。 Ddaughter Mmommy D: “Mommy, are you leaving

2、home again?” M: “Yes, honey. Mommy is going to fight a monster!” D: “A monster? Is it scarier than a big roaring tiger? Oh my!” M: “Well.yes! A lot scarier! Its called Virus. Many people are working hard to defeat the monster.” D: “Who are they?” M: “Theyre the scientists who are working on new medi

3、cines to cure the ill and the construction workers who are building new hospitals for patients as fast as possible. They are the delivery people who are delivering masks to everyone in need, risking being caught by the virus monsters, too. They are all ordinary people, including volunteers, but now

4、they are also powerful soldiers; they are the bravest fighters and they are heroes!” D: “They are so brave! But mommy, are you scared?” M: “Yes, everyone is scared. Mommys too. But if no one goes to fight the monster, there will be more monsters, and the monsters will be even more aggressive, and th

5、ey may defeat us all.” D: “But mommy.I dont want you to leave me.” M: “Baby, mommy doesnt want to leave you either. Sweetie, do you know what “to be brave” means? To be brave is to do the right thing even if you are really scared.” D: “Mommy. Ill be brave, too. I want to be a doctor when I grow up,

6、and I will fight the monsters together with you.” . 【写作内容】 1. 用约 30 个单词概述上述对话内容； 2. 谈谈你对“勇士”的理解； 3. 写出谁是你心目中的“勇士” ，并简要陈述理由（至少两点） 。 指导 概要部分：概要部分： Summary: 事情+反馈 事情：mother, explain, bravery, daughter 反馈：女儿的愿望 正文：正文： 谈谈你对 “勇士” 的理解谈谈你对 “勇士” 的理解： 一分为二， 即对自己的要求 （挑战 comfort zone, over difficulty） ； 对社会的责任(

7、shoulder responsibility) 心目中的“勇士”心目中的“勇士” ：医生，因为符合上面的勇士的定义，即：钻研疫苗；冒着风险救他 人 全文如下： A mother explains bravery to her daughter by her fighting the virus monsters like other ordinary heroes, which inspires the girl to follow suit（效仿）after growing up. (27 wds) The brave, in my eyes, should possess the fol

8、lowing qualities. For one thing, they dare to challenge their comfort zone and embrace setbacks instead of being contented with the status quo. （主题句中用对比手法 instead of， 这样让句子的内涵度更多） A striking example is Elon Musk, who claimed that he was chewing the glass and staring into the abyss to fullfil his goa

9、ls.（举例法，同时用到了马斯克的名言） For another, the brave never cower but shoulder due responsibility whatever the risks.（并没有展开，因为放在末段了） Personally, doctors deserve the honor of brave heroes. First, threatened by virus, they stick to fighting in the front line to save the patients. Besides, they become a beacon o

10、f hope in pursuit of vaccine, breathing confidence into those locked home. （造句用到了比喻修辞， 同时 用 in.of 来简化句子，建议同学们多用介词短语） In a word, the brave are the counter-marching people. （最美的逆行者） We dont know who they are but we know who they are for. (130wds) 感悟： 冲刺阶段写作文，要在造句上下点功夫，我的经验是：过于复杂的复合句尽可能少一 些， 因为熟练地驾驭长难句

11、的能力是大部分中学生不具备的， 建议用介词短语来代替， 即： 主干部分+介词短语（inof 短语；by doing; instead of; rather than） ，复合句基本就是一 个简单的 which， 非谓语动词也就是一个。 我认为这些足够了， 关键是用词上多锤炼一下， 四种修辞：反问句；比喻句；对比句；虚拟句（otherwise, would have done） 。至于倒装句 和强调句不要太俗套，譬如 only in this way can we这种没啥意思的。 官方范文： A mother explains to her daughter why she leaves hom

12、e to fight against the virus monsters like ordinary heroes, sparking her ambition to fight like a soldier. (27 words) Personally, heroes refer to people from all walks of life who perform their duties faithfully whatever the situations. They play an irreplaceable role in any critical moment. Dangero

13、us and urgent scenes can bring out their best, such as courage, responsibility and commitment. Heroes in my heart are my teachers. After the outbreak of the virus, they rise to the challenge of live streaming lectures and grading assignments online. Not only do they have to adapt themselves to the n

14、ew teaching model but they make enormous sacrifices as well. Besides, serving as the essential role of imparting knowledge to their students, they offer immediate assistance in terms of mental relief and comfort. To conclude, those who do their own parts whole-heartedly deserve our credit and admira

15、tion. (125 words) 提示： 建议大家多记几句马斯克的名言，因为这个人不同于其他名人，最近的火箭发射又成 功了，他作为典型的敢于拼搏、创新，还有对人类命运的使命感等优秀品质，可以作为很 好的例子： 1. If something is important enough, even if the odds are against you, you should still do it. 如果一件事情对你很重要，即使成功的概率很小，你也应该去做 2. (Physics is) a good framework for thinking. . Boil things down to t

16、heir fundamental truths and reason up from there. 物理是思想的框架。 。 。 。追索到事情的本质，再从那里思 考下去 3. The first step is to establish that something is possible; then probability will occur. 只有 首先看到事情的可能性，才会有发生的机会 4. Its OK to have your eggs in one basket as long as you control what happens to that basket. 只要你能左右一颗

17、树的未来，那么你是可以在那棵树上吊死的 5. Persistence is very important. You should not give up unless you are forced to give up. 坚持很重要， 永远不要放弃，除非不得已 6. You want to have a future where youre expecting things to be better, not one where youre expecting things to be worse. 每个人都幻想将来会更好，而不是更糟 7. It is a mistake to hire hu

18、ge numbers of people to get a complicated job done. Numbers will never compensate for talent in getting the right answer (two people who dont know something are no better than one), will tend to slow down progress, and will make the task incredibly expensive. 雇佣许多人去做一件复杂的事，往往是错误的。数量永远不如质量 (三 个臭皮匠不一定

19、比一个诸葛亮强)，人多降低效率，增加成本。 9. If you go back a few hundred years, what we take for granted today would seem like magic being able to talk to people over long distances, to transmit images, flying, accessing vast amounts of data like an oracle. These are all things that would have been considered magic a

20、few hundred years ago. 其实我们现在拥有的一切，在几百年前都是不可思议的魔术奇迹 10. My biggest mistake is probably weighing too much on someones talent and not someones personality. I think it matters whether someone has a good heart. 我犯下的最大错 误是过度看中人的才能而不是人品。我认为拥有一颗善良的心至关重要。 11. When I was in college, I wanted to be involved i

21、n things that would change the world. Now I am. 我在大学的时候，一直想参与做能够改变世界的事情。而现在我就在做这样的事 情 12. I think its very important to have a feedback loop, where youre constantly thinking about what youve done and how you could be doing it better. I think thats the single best piece of advice: constantly think ab

22、out how you could be doing things better and questioning yourself. 我认为循环反馈很重要，这样你可以及时知道自己做得怎么样，是否可以做得更 好。最好的忠告是： 重复问自己，我是否可以做得更好? 13. I wouldnt say I have a lack of fear. In fact, Id like my fear emotion to be less because its very distracting and fries my nervous system. 我不敢说自己从未担心害怕过。 实际上我希 望少一点担心

23、害怕，因为它让我分心，使我焦虑 14. Life is too short for long-term grudges. 生命太短暂，它无法承受无休止的恩恩怨怨 15. Dont be afraid of new arenas. 不要害怕新的竞技场 16. I think it is possible for ordinary people to choose to be extraordinary. 我想一个平常 人完全可以选择不平常 17. I could either watch it happen or be a part of it. 我要么旁观，要么参与 18. Being an

24、Entrepreneur is like eating glass and staring into the abyss of death. 做一个企 业家就像吞玻璃和凝视着死亡深渊 19. I would like to die on Mars. Just not on impact. 我情愿在火星上死去，而不是坠毁其 上 20. On his favorite book when he was a teen, The Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy: It taught me that the tough thing is figuring out what

25、 questions to ask, but that once you do that, the rest is really easy. 关于少年时期最喜欢的书“银河系漫游指南“： 它教会我最难的是提 出问题。 一旦做到了，其它会变得很容易 21. I just want to retire before I go senile because if I dont retire before I go senile, then Ill do more damage than good at that point. 我只希望在自己衰老前退休，否则我只会成为累赘。 埃隆马斯克启示录 关于创业

26、所谓创业，就是嚼着玻璃凝视深渊。既然必须穿过地狱，那就走下去。 关于创新 在我们这里，失败只是一个选项，假如你从未失败，只能说明你不够创新。 关于进步 也许是因为有太多人去做互联网、金融和法律，导致了我们至今没有太多的创新。 关于信念 假如某件事情足够重要，即使成功的几率很小，你也要勇往直前。 关于工作 如果你对你所做的事并不痴迷，应立即停止，去找一些能让你痴迷的事情来做。 关于团队 只让聪明的人为你工作。 “我会亲自面试，未来工作直接向我负责，你将享有超高优先 级！ ” 关于人生 生命太短暂，他无法承受无休止的恩恩怨怨。 关于未来 在自己死去的时候能够想着人类能有一个美好的未来有可持续的能源，同时能够 殖民其他的星球来避免人类灭绝的可能。