1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习当祖母说打开箱子就能得到这个箱子1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文My parents love the saying“If at first you dont succeed,try,try again so much that they even bought a pillow with those words on it.But I was recently in a situation where I was SO ready to give up.It started last week when my friend O
2、llie and I were helping his grandmother Mary to carry boxes from her garage to her car for the homeless shelter rummage sale(义卖).4续写原文At the sight of a big old trunk(行李箱)，we asked Mary what was inside.But she told us that as she had lost the key,she had to find a master locksmith to figure it out.Le
3、t me have a try!said Ollie.“I bet I can open that lock in two minutes flat!Maybe theres a treasure inside,like gold or diamonds or an ancient map!Mary smiled.Ill tell you what.If you two treasure hunters can open this trunk,you can have it,along with whatever is inside.Ollie got a tool kit and we se
4、t out to open the lock.But he definitely lost that bet.Those two minutes turned into two hours,with no luck at all.We had tried every tool in the kit,but the lock wouldnt move slightly.“Its no use.Ollie sighed.I guess we have to give up.5续写原文“But we cant give up!I said.What about If at first you don
5、t succeed,try,try again?Ollie shook his head.Unless you know a magical key fairy,were never getting this unlocked.Just then,my little brother Tex showed up.He showed great interest in the trunk.It looks like an upside-down boat!Can I turn it over and pretend Im sailing in the ocean?Sure,Ollie replie
6、d.Its no good for anything else.“Ahoy!Tex said,climbing on top after Ollie and I turned it over.“Im the captain!”He giggled as he jumped up and down.And right then,a screw(螺丝)from a hinge(铰链)came loose and rolled to the floor.6段首句Para 1：“Thats it!I know how to open it!said Ollie.Para 2：Oh!There were
7、 only lots of shoes in the trunk!7Part 2题目分析8续写原文分析9本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和奥利得到了一个箱子，他的祖母玛丽说如果他们能打开箱子，就能得到它，可是他们用尽了办法也打不开，后来作者的弟弟特克斯出现了，他拿着箱跳上跳下，就在这时，一个铰链上的螺丝松了，滚到了地板上。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点10续写思路分析 Para 1:“Thats it!
8、I know how to open it!said Ollie.由第一段首句内容“就是这样!我知道怎么打开它!”奥利说”可知，第一段可描写他们怎么打开箱子。11续写思路分析 Para 2：Oh!There were only lots of shoes in the trunk!由第二段首句内容“哦!箱子里只有很多鞋子!”可知，第二段可描写作者他们看到箱子里的东西后的反应。12续写素材 续写素材 取下铰链打开箱子失望安慰有成就感13续写素材 续写素材 行为类 取下：remove/take down 打开：open/unfold 拍肩膀：pat sb.on the shoulder/tab s
9、b on the shoulder 情绪类 失望：disappointed/despondent 有成就感：a sense of achievement creep over us/have a sense of achievement14续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1Ollie and I were pretty disappointed at the discovery,which wasnt diamonds or gold.（由关系代词which引导非限制性定语从句）高分句型2Seeing our frustration,Mary patted us on the shoulder,s
10、aying,“These shoes are in such great shape that we can raise money by selling them at the rummage sale.”（用现在分词作状语）15Part 3范文呈现16范文呈现“Thats it!I know how to open it!”said Ollie.“These are regular screws.We could remove the screws so that the hinge can be taken off from the trunk!”he exclaimed with a
11、radiant smile.Just now,we were so focused on the lock that we didnt try to open the trunk another way.Then we asked Tex to jump off the trunk,and turned it upright.Ollie immediately took out a screwdriver from the tool kit.In two minutes flat,he opened the trunk with my assistance.(79 words)17范文呈现Oh
12、!There were only lots of shoes in the trunk!Ollie and I were pretty disappointed at the discovery,which wasnt diamonds or gold.Seeing our frustration,Mary patted us on the shoulder,saying,“These shoes are in such great shape that we can raise money by selling them at the rummage sale.”Our faces lit
13、up and a sense of achievement crept over us.We found“treasure”after all!Our persistence finally paid off!If at first you dont succeed,try,try again.(73 words)18范文译文“就是它！我知道怎么打开它！”奥利说。“这些是普通的螺丝。我们可以拆下螺丝，这样铰链就可以从行李箱上取下来了！”他灿烂地笑着喊道。刚才，我们太专注于锁了，没有试图用另一种方式打开后备箱。然后我们让特克斯从树干上跳下来，把它竖起来。奥利立刻从工具箱里拿出一把螺丝刀。两分钟后，他在我的帮助下打开了后备箱。（79字）哦！后备箱里只有很多鞋子！奥利和我对这一发现感到非常失望，因为它不是钻石或黄金。看到我们的沮丧，玛丽拍了拍我们的肩膀，说：“这些鞋子的形状很好，我们可以在清仓甩卖中卖掉它们来筹集资金。”我们的脸都亮了起来，一种成就感油然而生。毕竟我们找到了“宝藏”！我们的坚持终于得到了回报！如果一开始你没有成功，再试一次。（73字）19Part 4努力方向20高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语21定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）22Thank you!
