1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习当老人接到了诈骗电话1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文Grandpa Bill Rodgers has narrowly escaped a phone scam(欺骗).It all began with a telephone call.Bill is an elderly man from Cincinnati,Ohio,who was looking forward to spending time with his family over the holidays.They were all coming to visi
2、t him at his Elmwood Place home,including his adult grandson David.One afternoon,while napping in bed,he was awakened by the sharp ringing of his telephone.4续写原文“Who will ring me up at this time?”He wondered.Peering towards the phone,he hesitantly picked it up.From the receiver came an urgent voice.
3、“Grandpa,this is David.I am in trouble.”Before Bill could ask him any question,he continued,on and off,half crying,“I hit a womans car and she was seven months pregnant.And they charged me with drunken driving and Im in prison.”He sobbed loudly.His voice was so broken that Bill could hardly match it
4、 with the gentle and warm voice of his grandson.Poor David!He must be suffering!Bill panicked(惊慌)immediately.5续写原文Without more detailed communication,the phone passed suddenly to another person Davids lawyer who had a deeper voice.Seemingly,he understood Bills anxiety and attempted to comfort him wi
5、th a solution.“Now the only way to help David is to go to Wal-Mart and transfer$2,300 to another store.I would pick up the money and then use it to post Davids bail(保释金).”“I am sure everything would be OK as long as the money is in place,”he added.Ultimately,he lowered his voice,“Dont tell anybody.Y
6、ou dont want to make your grandson look ugly in your neighborhood.”The lawyer hung up even before Bill could give an answer.6段首句Para 1：Bill was totally at a loss.Para 2：The lucky part of Bills day was when he stepped into cashier Marys line in Wal-Mart.7Part 2题目分析8续写原文分析9本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了老人Bill一天突然接到一个
7、电话，电话里称孙子David遇到了麻烦，被指控酒后驾车，现在关在监狱里。律师告诉老人唯一能帮助David的方法就是去沃尔玛把2300美元转到另一家商店，然后用它来交David的保释金。并且嘱咐老人不要把这件事告诉别人。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点10续写思路分析 Para 1:Bill was totally at a loss.由第一段首句内容“Bill完全不知所措。”可知，第一段应该描写老人想尽办
8、法救孙子，取了钱去沃尔玛转钱。11续写思路分析 Para 2：The lucky part of Bills day was when he stepped into cashier Marys line in Wal-Mart.由第二段首句内容“Bill一天中最幸运的时刻是，他走进了沃尔玛并且遇到了收银员Mary。”可知，第二段应该描写Mary怎样帮助老人识破骗局，使钱财没有损失。12续写素材 续写素材 取钱匆忙去转钱遇到Mary询问帮助老人识破骗局13续写素材 续写素材 行为类 抓起：grab/catch/snatch up 拒绝：refuse/reject/decline/turn do
9、wn 泄露：reveal/leak out/let out 情绪类 心碎：heartbreaking/heartrending/heart-broken 怀疑：doubtful/skeptical/suspicious/incredulous14续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1 Noting Bills desperate and anxious look,Mary instantly knew something was wrong.(运用了现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)高分句型2 David was safe and sound and Bill realized that he
10、nearly fell victim to a phone scam!(运用了that引导的宾语从句)15Part 3范文呈现16范文呈现Bill was totally at a loss.His mind went blank and Davids heartbreaking sobs were echoing in his ears.Without a second thought,he quickly grabbed his bank card and decided to spare no effort to go to Davids rescue.With the card tig
11、htly in his hand,he rushed out to the bank.After withdrawing the money,he went straight to the local Wal-Mart.He was overwhelmed by the thought“Send the money and my grandson will be saved”.17范文呈现The lucky part of Bills day was when he stepped into cashier Marys line in Wal-Mart.Noting Bills despera
12、te and anxious look,Mary instantly knew something was wrong.Yet,having the lawyers words in mind,Bill stubbornly refused to leak out any information and insisted on transferring the money.Suddenly an idea hit Mary.“I guess you are worrying about somebody.I bet if you call him right now,he will answe
13、r the call.”she suggested.Though doubtful,Bill pressed the telephone keys.The ending can be expected:David was safe and sound and Bill realized that he nearly fell victim to a phone scam!18范文译文比尔完全不知所措。他脑子一片空白，大卫令人心碎的抽泣声在他耳边回响。他毫不犹豫地迅速抓起银行卡，决定不遗余力地去救大卫。他紧紧地握着卡片，冲向银行。取完钱后，他直接去了当地的沃尔玛。他被“把钱寄出去，我孙子就会得救”的想法淹没了。比尔一天中最幸运的部分是，他走进沃尔玛收银员玛丽的队伍。玛丽注意到比尔绝望而焦虑的神情，立刻知道出了什么事。然而，考虑到律师的话，比尔固执地拒绝泄露任何信息，坚持要转账。玛丽突然想到了一个主意。“我猜你是在担心某人。我打赌如果你现在给他打电话，他会接的。”她建议道。尽管心存疑虑，比尔还是按下了电话键。结局是可以预料的：大卫安然无恙，比尔意识到他差点成为电话诈骗的受害者！19Part 4努力方向20高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语21定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）22Thank you!
