1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习脊椎侧凸做了三次手术的小女孩靠顽强意志终于能正常行走了1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文Only four years ago,Kameelah was told that she would never walk again.But now,with the support of her father James,she can run,jump and even get her green belt in Tae Kwondo(跆拳道）.When Kameelah was 11,she was diagnosed as sco
2、liosis(脊椎侧凸）.Her family was told that only 10 percent of all children were troubled by scoliosis,but they just couldnt believe Kameelah was a part of that 10 percent.Her first surgery was arranged immediately.The doctor had the difficult task of rebuilding Kameelahs entire spine(脊椎）and then re-situa
3、ting her organs around it.I had never been in the hospital for anything serious before,and Id never had surgery,either.I was so scared,Kameelah recalled.4续写原文She was given something to fall asleep for the surgery,so that she would not feel anything.Because this surgery dealt with the spine and nerve
4、 connections to the brain,the doctor had to make sure that Kameelah could still move her body parts right.Therefore,she was woken up in the middle of the surgery.They asked me to move my fingers,then my toes.I could hardly understand what was going on.It was bright,and things werent very clear.To lo
5、ok back,I cant believe that I was awake while my back was open,and the doctors had their hands in there.The first surgery was successful,but Kameelah would have to return two more times for the doctor to completely fix the problem.It was at the end of the third surgery when things went wrong.really
6、wrong.The doctor put in a metal stick,which happened to be too small,into Kameelahs back.As a result,it affected some of the nerves in her spine.She was practically paralyzed(几乎瘫痪）from the waist down.5段首句Para 1：Im really very sorry,said the doctor,“but I dont think Kameelah Para 2：I just remember te
7、lling Dad,I have to walk.I have to walk.Kameelah said.And he 6Part 2题目分析7续写原文分析8文章讲述卡米拉虽然现在看起来能跑能跳，很健康，但谁也想不到她从十一岁开始因为脊椎侧凸已经连续做了三次手术，并且在第三次手术结束的时候出现了问题。医生把一根很小的金属棍插入卡米拉的背部。结果，它影响了她脊柱的一些神经。她几乎从腰部以下瘫痪了。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和
8、强调主题。情节构建的重点9续写思路分析 Para 1：Im really very sorry,said the doctor,but I dont think Kameelah 由第一段首句内容“医生说：我真的非常抱歉，我认为卡米拉再也不能”可知，第一段可描写当医生告知这一不幸的事实后，卡米拉和爸爸的反应。10续写思路分析 Para 2：I just remember telling Dad,I have to walk.I have to walk.Kameelah said.And he 由第二段首句内容“卡米拉说：我只记得我跟爸爸说，我得走路。我得走路。”可知，第二段描写爸爸帮助卡米拉
9、积极地进行锻炼并最终收获健康。11续写素材 续写素材 手术失败医生放弃继续治疗无法接受不能走路的现实积极锻炼正常走路收获健康12续写素材 续写素材 行为类 锻炼：do exercises/work out 解决/应对：deal with/fix/get over the problem 安排手术：arrange a surgery/perform another surgery 情绪类 难以相信：cant believe/cant accept that result/can hardly understand 艰难的任务：hard work/a difficult task13续写素材 续写
10、素材 高分句型1.They insisted that the doctor perform another surgery or try some other ways of treatment,hoping that Kameelah would recover one day with the help of the doctor.（由连接词that引导的宾语从句）高分句型2.Kameelah was brought home in a wheelchair and worked with her father,doing exercises that would be quite ea
11、sy for any other person,but were extremely painful and difficult for her.（由关系代词that引导定语从句）14Part 3范文呈现15范文呈现 Im really very sorry,said the doctor,but I dont think Kameelah will ever be able to walk again.But her father,as well as Kameelah herself,couldnt accept that result.They insisted that the doc
12、tor perform another surgery or try some other ways of treatment,hoping that Kameelah would recover one day with the help of the doctor.But the doctor refused their request,as he knew her situation very well.16范文呈现I just remember telling Dad,I have to walk.I have to walk.Kameelah said.And he promised
13、 me that he would help me.Kameelah was brought home in a wheelchair and worked with her father,doing exercises that would be quite easy for any other person,but were extremely painful and difficult for her.After about a year of hard work,Kameelah was able to walk with a stick.Eventually,she walked c
14、onfidently and could even run.Later,she took up learning Tae Kwondo.Once getting over the problem,she lives a quite good life now.17范文译文“我真的很抱歉，”医生说，“但我认为卡梅拉再也不能走路了。”但她的父亲和卡梅拉本人都无法接受这个结果。他们坚持要求医生再做一次手术或尝试其他治疗方法，希望卡迈拉有一天能在医生的帮助下康复。但医生拒绝了他们的请求，因为他非常了解她的情况。卡梅拉说：“我只记得告诉爸爸，我得走了。我得走。”。“他答应过我，他会帮助我。”Kameelah坐在轮椅上被带回家，和她的父亲一起工作，做对任何其他人来说都很容易的运动，但对她来说却非常痛苦和困难。经过大约一年的努力，Kameelah能够用拐杖走路。最终，她自信地走着，甚至还能跑。后来，她开始学习跆拳道。一旦解决了这个问题，她现在过着相当不错的生活。18Part 4努力方向19高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语20定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）21Thank you!
