1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习患有注意力障碍的学生在暖心老师的鼓励下发愤图强努力学习1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文At thirteen,I was diagnosed with kind of attention disorder,It made school difficult for me.When everyone else in the class was focusing on tasks,I could not.I just sat there,doing nothing.However,everything changed when a n
2、ew teacher,Mrs.Smith,taught me.In my first literature class.Mrs.Smith asked us to read a story and then write on it,all within 45 minutes.I raised my hand right away and said,“Mrs.Smith,you see,the doctor said I have attention problems.I might not be able to do it.”She glanced down at me through her
3、 glasses,“You are no different from others,young man.”4续写原文I tried,but I didnt finish the reading when the bell rang.I had to take it home.In the quietness of my bedroom,the story suddenly all became clear to me.It was about a blind person,Louis Braille.He lived in a time when the blind couldnt get
4、much education.But Louis didnt give up.Instead.he invented a reading system of raised dots,which opened up a whole new world of knowledge to the blind.Wasnt I the“blind”in my class,being made to learn like the“sighted”students?My thoughts spilled out and my pen started to dance.I completed the task
5、within 40 minutes.Indeed,I was no different from others;I just needed a quieter place.If Louis could find his way out of his problems,why should I ever give up?5段首句Para 1：The next morning,I didnt expect anything when I handed in my paper to Mrs.Smith.Para 2：As a student,I can tell you that there is
6、nothing better than being praised by my teacher.6Part 2题目分析7续写原文分析8本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者十三岁时被诊断患有注意力障碍，很难上学，作者在史密斯老师的鼓励下，以一个叫路易斯布莱叶的盲人为榜样，努力学习，得到了老师表扬的故事。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点9续写思路分析 Para 1：The next morning,I didnt
7、 expect anything when I handed in my paper to Mrs.Smith.由第一段首句内容“第二天早上，当我把论文交给史密斯太太的时候，我并没有期待什么”可知，第一段可描写老师给作者论文的反馈情况以及作者的反应。10续写思路分析 Para 2：As a student,I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher.由第二段首句内容“作为一名学生，我可以告诉你，没有什么比受到老师的表扬更好的了。”可知，第二段可描写作者得到表扬后的反应和感悟。11续写素
8、材 续写素材 交论文论文得了A作者惊讶得到表扬作者高兴作者回家告诉妈妈作者感悟12续写素材 续写素材 行为类 鼓励：encourage sb.to do sth./inspire sb.to do sth.持续做某事：keep doing sth./go on doing sth.表扬：praise/speak highly of 情绪类 高兴：happy/glad 自豪：proud/beamish13续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1 See what you can do with the difficult task when you keep trying?(运用了what引导的宾语从句和
9、when引导时间状语从句)高分句型2 I was not proud,because I am no different from others.(运用了because引导原因状语从句)14Part 3范文呈现15范文呈现The next morning,I didnt expect anything when I handed in my paper to Mrs.Smith,so it was quite a surprise when it came back to me the next day with an“A”on it.At the bottom of the paper we
10、re these words from my teacher:“See what you can do with the difficult task when you keep trying?”16范文呈现As a student,I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher.A unique sense of accomplishment arose.I couldnt wait to tell my mum as I got home.She was very happy for
11、me and encouraged me to continue to work harder than my classmates.Although the teacher praised me.I was not proud,because I am no different from others.No one will give up but yourself.You should always treat yourself as a normal person.17范文译文第二天早上，当我把论文交给史密斯太太时，我什么也没想到，所以第二天当它还给我时，我感到非常惊讶上面写着“a”。在论文的底部是我老师的话：“看看你继续努力的时候能做些什么？”作为一名学生，我可以告诉你，没有什么比被老师表扬更好的了。一种独特的成就感油然而生。回家后，我迫不及待地想告诉妈妈。她为我感到高兴，并鼓励我继续比同学更努力地学习。虽然老师表扬了我，但我并不骄傲，因为我和别人没有什么不同。除了你自己，没有人会放弃。你应该始终把自己当作一个正常人。18Part 4努力方向19高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语20定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）21Thank you!
