1、第 三 部 分写作专题六 读后续写英英 语语 2023内 容 索 引NO.1写作总策略破解读后续写3大策略NO.2题型微技法提升读后续写3大技法NO.3真题实战经典对练拿高分写作总策略写作总策略 破解读后续写破解读后续写3 3大策略大策略NO.1 NO.1 策略一策略一 学习评分标准学习评分标准,实现高分有方向实现高分有方向一、各档次给分范围和评分标准解读 档次评分标准解读第七档(2225分)内容新颖、丰富,富有逻辑,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高词汇和语法结构丰富恰当,语言错误少上下文衔接有效,结构清晰,意义连贯第六档(1821分)内容丰富、合理,较有逻辑性,续写较为完整,与原文情境融洽度较高
2、词汇和语法结构恰当,有个别错误衔接手段比较有效,结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯档次评分标准解读第五档(1517分)内容合理,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关词汇和语法结构使用比较恰当,有些许错误使用了衔接手段,结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯第四档(1114分)内容完整,有些情节不合理或逻辑性不强,与原文基本相关使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误,个别部分影响理解有衔接意识,结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯第三档(610分)内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度脱节使用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误多,影响理解不能使用衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯档次评分标准解
3、读第二档(15分)内容和逻辑上有重大问题,内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文基本脱节使用的词汇、语法结构有限,错误极多,严重影响理解几乎没有使用衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯第一档(0分)未作答;内容太少,无法评判;所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目不相关二、评分细则1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次进行评分。2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或
4、调整档次,最后给分。4.评分时还应注意:(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;(2)书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分;(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美式拼写及词汇用法均可接受。策略二策略二 遵循遵循4 4步骤步骤,读后续写保高分读后续写保高分策略三策略三 研究典例研究典例,掌握高分技巧掌握高分技巧(2021新高考全国卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought
5、 of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.The big
6、day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the br
7、ead and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the o
8、ther slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the sto
9、ve was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned bla
10、ck as well.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared._The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up._第1步读透文本本文为记叙文,记叙了母亲节来临,一对双胞胎为妈妈准备早餐的故事。在阅读文章时,我们要带着when、where、who、what、why、how这6个问题去理清语篇内容和故事情节的发展脉络。在梳理故事情节发展的脉
11、络时,我们要把握三条线索:时间线、故事情节线和情感发展线。1.本文的六要素Who:the twins,their father,their motherWhen:on the morning of Mothers DayWhere:at homeWhy:to celebrate Mothers DayWhat:made the French toast and chicken porridge and brought the breakfast in bedHow:overcame a series of problems in preparing the breakfast2.故事脉络母亲节
12、来临之前,双胞胎计划给母亲一个惊喜,那就是为母亲做一顿早餐。虽然一开始顺顺利利,但后来遇到了各种问题。那天早上闹钟一响他们就悄悄地下楼到了厨房。他们要煲鸡肉粥,煎鸡蛋吐司。首先,他们把米放进锅里熬着,然后再煎面包片。由于锅太热,Jeff煎面包片时面包一放进去就煳了。Jenna把煳面包扔掉,又放进了另一片,这次她把火关小了。沸腾的粥溢出来扑灭了火。幸亏Jeff冷静地关了天然气。炉灶上面一团糟。Jeff想清理干净炉灶,结果烫着了手,疼得喊出了声。Jenna让他把手放在冷水里降温,这时她闻到了煳味,锅里的面包片又煳了。3.本文的行文和语言特点本文语言平实地道,行文流畅,叙事娓娓道来。语言形象生动,动
13、作描写细腻,富有感情。如:filled with excitement;as they thought of the surprise;went down the stairs quietly;steam shooting out of the pot;the lid starting to shake;Jenna panicked等。语言运用准确、地道,且有感染力。如:There was nothing to it.;The big day came at last.;Then she caught the smell of burning.等。第2步构思情节1.开头语解读读后续写所给的开头
14、语提示了写作思路和框架。因此,在写作前必须仔细研究两段的开头语。第一段开头语提到,正当双胞胎在失望中四处张望的时候,父亲出现了。因此下文要描写的是父亲做了什么。第二段开头语提到,这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上,然后叫醒了妈妈。因此下文要描写的是妈妈看到后的反应。2.写作思路首先要确定文章的故事情节,然后再考虑情感的铺垫。第1段的故事情节主要描写爸爸在厨房里对双胞胎的帮助和鼓励。第2段主要描写妈妈看到早餐后的反应,以及与孩子们的互动,同时也要有爸爸的参与。这样,一方面可以避免情节浮于表面或者过于简单,另一方面也可以有空间进行生动细致的描写。3.写作要点续写第一段:故事情节衔接上文,双胞胎把厨房灶台弄得
15、一团糟,而且锅里的面包片又煳了。当他们失望地四处张望的时候,爸爸出现了。爸爸看到这样的场面,肯定立刻意识到发生了什么。爸爸会让他们收拾好灶台,然后帮助他们做早餐。孩子们重拾信心,并按照爸爸的指导继续做早餐。不一会儿厨房就打扫干净了,早餐也做好了。爸爸了解到孩子们想给妈妈一个惊喜,于是爸爸偷偷回到床上假装睡觉。孩子们准备好餐盘,放上准备好的贺卡,然后走出厨房。续写第二段:这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上,然后叫醒了妈妈。首先描写孩子们的表现,孩子们拥抱妈妈,同时祝妈妈“母亲节快乐”。妈妈也会拥抱孩子们。描写妈妈看到早餐的惊讶表情,与文章开头as they thought of the surprise相
16、呼应。这时候也要描写爸爸的表现,爸爸还在假装酣睡,被妈妈叫醒后,看到早餐后表现出吃惊的神情。描写妈妈吃早餐,赞扬孩子们的厨艺。孩子们和妈妈一起共进早餐,与爸爸偷偷用眼神交流彼此的默契,呈现一个有浓浓的亲情的温馨场面。第3步打磨写作读后续写对考生的语言能力要求较高。要想写的生动形象,内容具体,就要有丰富的词汇量,能用生动的语言刻画细节。只有用“准确连续的动作+丰富生动的表情+恰当的心理活动描写”,才能让人物栩栩如生。句子结构上尽量丰富多样,长短句结合,多使用具体的语言。根据语言环境,恰当使用复合句,灵活使用非谓语动词,适当增加直接引语,注意衔接过渡的流畅,这样文章表现力才会更强,内容才会更加充实
17、饱满。第4步认真誊写【参考范文】As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.One look and he knew what they were up to.Seeing their crestfallen faces,he told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother.The twins cheered up and did as told.Within an hour,the
18、 kitchen was cleaned,and Father had made some egg sandwiches and cooked some oat porridge.Then he sneaked back to bed.Meanwhile,the twins prepared the breakfast tray,added a card they had made and walked out of the kitchen.The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.They hugged
19、 her and yelled“Happy Mothers Day,darling Mummy!”Mother hugged the twins.Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray.She shook Father who was pretending to snore.He feigned astonishment when he saw the breakfast.Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted.Jeff imm
20、ediately wanted to have a bite.Jenna caught her fathers eye and they winked at each other secretly.题型微技法题型微技法 提升读后续写提升读后续写3 3大技法大技法NO.2 NO.2 聚焦命题明晰增分策略聚焦命题明晰增分策略研命题研命题 透析高考真题,把握命题规律 项目试卷文体文体话题2022新高考全国卷 记叙文 鼓励打算放弃比赛的学生勇敢地参加比赛2022浙江1月卷记叙文与不喜欢自己的搭档做研究,通过努力,得到了搭档的认可,作者的努力也得到了回报2021新高考全国卷 记叙文 母亲节为妈妈做早餐项
21、目试卷文体文体话题2021浙江6月卷记叙文理解父母担心自己太过自私而不知奉献,自豪地将自己的劳动所得交给父亲2020新高考全国卷 记叙文 三个孩子帮助一个贫困家庭的孩子挣钱2020浙江6月卷记叙文 夫妻二人在营地做饭遇北极熊2020浙江1月卷记叙文 关爱宠物狗考情解读高考读后续写以价值素养为导向,突出综合性和创新性,倡导读写融合。语篇文体为记叙文。文章结构简单;时间、地点明确;语言生动,但难度不大。段首句信息明确。段首句规划了写作思路和框架,写作内容基本明确。话题积极向上。歌颂真善美,传播正能量。明策略明策略 升华解题思维,考场有序增分 命题特点该题型一方面考查学生对所学语言的实际运用能力,另
22、一方面也培养学生的发散思维能力。续写不是随心所欲地写,而是在读懂原文的基础上,利用原文的素材、线索和情节等充分发挥想象力和创造力来续写。其特点如下:选材为故事类记叙文,内容有趣,故事线索逻辑性强;所给出的段落开头语与上文联系密切,指明了续写的方向;读写并重,先读透所给材料才能使续写的内容不偏离主线;续写段落内容情节不一,可根据自己的理解续写不同的内容。备考策略方向比努力重要。研透题型特点,明确考查的各项能力。变的是语篇,不变的是思路。提供的文本材料为故事体记叙文,就要根据记叙文的要素来理清文本的内容和故事情节的发展脉络,提炼故事的主要事件,进行合理的续写。不能等沧海横流,才想起筑堤。要想能够快
23、速提炼出故事梗概,理清故事脉络发展方向,就要加大阅读量,总结归纳其写作特点。所有被旁人视作的“天赋异禀”,都逃不开从始至终的规划布局。读后续写是一个写作大工程,要得高分,就要有厚实的写作功底,这就要对整个写备考策略作训练进行科学规划。在解读文本、构筑续写情节、打造故事结尾方面进行精准训练。只有训练整篇布局,才能写出高分佳作。走一条自己的路,享受读写的快乐。一篇完整的续写用时多,课堂上练习的时间有限,这就要求学生有自己的复习计划和节奏,合理安排阅读和写作的练习。小段的时间可以进行小语段、小情节的微写作;大段的时间就可以进行整篇的续写,逐渐养成提笔能写、见情景能表达的写作习惯。技巧点拨领悟解题之道
24、技巧点拨领悟解题之道技法技法1精准解读文本读后续写以记叙文为主,记叙文是以记人、叙事、写景、状物为主,以写人物的经历和事物发展变化为主要内容的一种文体文体形式。要写好续写文章,理解文本是第一步。对于记叙文阅读,要注意以下几个方面。1.抓住记叙文的六要素即人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果,读后续写所提供的文本除了结果这一要素之外,把其余五个要素叙述得清清楚楚。因此阅读文本时要紧扣这五个要素。2.掌握记叙文的三大线索即时间线、情节线和感情线。阅读文本时要抓住这三条主线,必要时可以列出这些线索,以更好地理解文章,为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确和深刻的理解,续写的内容才能
25、和原文骨肉相连,契合紧密。3.把握文章主旨及故事的发展方向只有把握了文章的主旨意图,才能很好地完成续写,这一点至关重要。确保续写的内容和原文要有逻辑上的一致性,并能回应原文的信息。4.分析文章的用词特点和行文风格以使续写的内容在语言色彩和行文风格上与原文保持一致。【典例展示】【典例展示】(2022浙江1月改编)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。When Dr.Henderson was assigning(指定)project mates for his psychology class,I secretly hoped that he would pair me w
26、ith my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with.Above all,I hoped he wouldnt assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.As fate(命运)would have it,Dr.Henderson very deliberate
27、ly matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself.He looked at me as though I werent there.I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in
28、 the course.He wasnt mean or abusive;he just gave me the impression that he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.Needless to say,I didnt look forward to an entire term of being brushed off,but I tried to make the best of it and didnt say anything for fear that I would ma
29、ke things worse.The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假说),set up an experiment to test the hypothesis,do the statistical analysis and present the findings.Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.When my teammate and I met to discuss our project,I was uneasy
30、.Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good gradesthe exact opposite of me.I actually wanted to drop the class at one point,but stopped short because I didnt want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out.I decided to stick to it no matter what.Afte
31、r long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers.I wasnt sure what it meant exactly,but at least we had a topic.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans._ One day I got word that he was admitted to ho
32、spital for a serious disease._【文本解读要点】【文本解读要点】1.抓住文本五要素人物:I,my teammate时间:when my teammate and I do a study on our project地点:in class起因:to cooperate a project经过:We had a topic but I had to accomplish the project alone.2.理清文章三大线索时间线:When Dr.Henderson was assigning project matesWhen my teammate and I
33、met to discuss our projectAfter long discussions情节线:作者与一个他想避开的人分到了一组搭档对他的态度很冷淡为了不让事情变得更糟糕,作者尽力把研究项目做好作者搭档的专注和优秀的成绩是出了名的,作者正相反他们决定对青少年的心理健康进行研究他们有了共同的话题感情线:uneasystick to it3.把握文章主旨,推测故事发展方向本文的主题语境属于人与社会。作者与自己最想避免的人分到了一组完成实验项目,搭档对他的态度很冷淡,好像作者的加入会妨碍他的研究,还可能阻止他在这门课上得到A。当作者和他的搭档讨论研究项目时,作者很不安,因为作者搭档的专注和优
34、秀的成绩是出了名的,而作者正相反。经过长时间的讨论,他们达成一致,决定对青少年的心理健康进行研究。虽然作者不确定这到底意味着什么,但至少他们有了一个话题。4.分析用词特点和行文风格文章动作和心理描写并重,运用大量的动词(短语),如discuss,assign,match,go up to,look at,stick to和心理描写,同时采用了比喻等修辞手法,句式长短结合,生动形象地描述了作者从开始不安的心理到最终决定坚持下去的情景,画面感强。因此续写时要侧重动作与心理描写,延续这一写作风格。【范文赏读】【范文赏读】We started to meet regularly to draw up
35、our plans.The more we met,the more I knew his ability.I was aware that my teammate was much more advanced than me.He knew technical things and approached every detail with great singularity of purpose.I,on the other hand,had little to share.We discussed a lot and tried to fashion an intelligent yet
36、simple experiment.Part of our job was to select students who had volunteered to be subjects for our project.I decided to devote myself to the task of working with the subjects,while he developed the scientific model.One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.Apparently
37、,the stress of getting the best grade had taken its toll on him.When visiting him,I noticed for the first time a sense of vulnerability on his face.I assured him I would finish the project alone and that I wouldnt let him down.I poured more time and energy into that project.Finally,my hard work paid
38、 offwe were awarded an A,which gave me great satisfaction.More importantly,I earned my teammates recognition and we have become good friends since then.语言风格与原文一致,侧重动作和心理描写;丰富的动作类动词(短语):assure;let sb down;pour.into;pay off等;丰富的形容词与副词:technical;scientific;apparently;importantly等;高级句式:“The more we met,
39、the more I knew his ability.”是“the+比较级,the+比较级”结构;“.while he developed the scientific model”是while连接的两个并列分句;“When visiting him”是when引导的时间状语从句的省略句。技法技法2精心构筑续写情节进行读后续写时,对所给文本后面的故事情节及故事结尾的推断是写好读后续写的前提。高考所给的读后续写形式是半开放性的,这种形式既可以让考生充分发挥想象力,又能让考生有章可循。考生在推测后续情节时一般根据两个方面:第一是所给文章的情节,特别是伏笔之处;第二是所给每段的首句。1.根据文章的
40、情节和伏笔进行预测。读后续写所给的文章的情节一般较为曲折,因此要把握故事情节,尤其注意所给文章结尾处的伏笔。2.利用所给每段的首句进行预测。所给第一段的首句既能承接上文,也是本段的起始句,由第二段的首句可以推测第一段的结尾。【典例展示】【典例展示】(2021浙江1月改编)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Pumpkin(南瓜)carving at Halloween is a family tradition.We visit a local farm every October.In the pumpkin field,I compete with m
41、y three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin.My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home,and as the eldest child I have an advantageI carried an 85-pounder back last year.This year,it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother,Jaso
42、n,was the winner.Unfortunately,we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides,but I was determined to prove my point.All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table,with my mom filming the annual event.Im unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter,b
43、ut it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.With the pumpkin resting on the table,hole uppermost,I bent over and pressed my head against the opening.At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then,as I went on with my task,unwilling to quit,my nose briefly prevented entry.Finally I managed to p
44、ut my whole head into it,like a cork(软木塞)forced into a bottle.I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.My excitement was short-lived.The pumpkin was heavy.“Im going to set it down,now,”I said,and with Jason helping to support its weight,I bent back over the table to
45、give it somewhere to rest.It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in.When I pulled hard,my nose got in the way.I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right a
46、ngle,but it was no use.“I cant get it out!”I shouted,my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已为你写好。I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer._That video was posted the day before Halloween._【读文预测】【读文预测】1.根据文章情节找伏笔,预测续写内容本文以人物
47、为线索展开,讲述了作者与万圣节南瓜之间的故事。作者家有在万圣节雕刻南瓜的传统,今年也不例外,家里所有人都在厨房的餐桌上辛勤地工作着,而作者的妈妈则在拍摄这一年一度的活动。结果作者在将头伸进南瓜里时被卡住了,无论如何也无法挣脱出来,因此感到万分焦虑,想把头从南瓜中取出。在所给的文本信息里,已经为下文续写内容埋下了伏笔,如妈妈在拍摄一年一度的活动,就可以预测下文可能有相对应的内容。原文结尾处对作者焦急情绪的描写也为下文续写内容埋下了伏笔,从而可以预测接下来的情节将着重描写作者取下南瓜的方式和过程。2.根据段落首句大胆设问,理清写作思路由第一段首句内容“虽然时间只过去了五、六分钟,但我还是感觉时间要
48、比这长得多。”可知作者急于想把头从南瓜中取出,基于此,我们可以从对以下几个问题的梳理中理清写作思路:(1)How did I feel then?(2)How did others feel?(3)Who came to help me?(4)How did he help me?(5)What did mother do then?由第二段首句内容“这段视频在万圣节前发布了。”可知,第二段可描写作者的这段视频在网络上引发的反响,以及视频走红后对作者一家人产生的影响。同样地,我们可以从对以下几个问题的梳理中理清写作思路:(1)What influence did it bring?(2)How
49、 many views it caused?(3)How did it influence my family?这样,根据设问整理答案并适当扩充,再运用合适的动作描写、心理描写和一些高级句式和高级表达,用适当的过渡词语,就组成一篇完整的文章了。【范文赏读】【范文赏读】I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.During the process,the voices from outside were oddly calm.My mom was amused,suggesting“Dont use up all
50、 your oxygen”.My smallest brother was singing a song I couldnt make out.Fortunately,my dad came to respond to my shout.He helped pull my head hard.Finally,I was rescued with messy hair and a sore nose,and it was only then that I realized my mom had been filming the whole time.And she said she was go
